Fluttershy has always been the meek and kind Pegasus loved by her friends in Ponyville. However, there lies a much darker, more sinister side to her and only Rainbow Dash knows this secret. Once an outburst of Fluttershy's other personality has made the front page, Gilda and her father, a notorious crime lord, aim to find potential blackmail material on the shy pony. Another incident helps Fluttershy and the stallion she's had a crush on, Big Macintosh, reveal their feelings for one another.
A week after Princess Twilight Sparkle's coronation and one day after the events of Equestria Girls, Fluttershy is in deep trouble. Rainbow Dash, who has been keeping the other Mane Six in the dark, must save her sister figure both from Gilda and herself. But before the day is done, an Element and friend will be lost... and a new villain shall rise.
Elsewhere, Twilight sees strange, but comforting visions of Sunset Shimmer changing for the better in the human world. And they're all connected with Fluttershy's troubles. In that alternate realm, however, a madman is threatening to alter the future of our heroes forever.
This story is based on one of the best two-part episodes from Batman: the Animated Stories. Mainly featuring FlutterMac, with a bit of SoarinDash and TwiSentryShimmer thrown in. Coaxed into writing this by Shadow051.
All OC's are mine.
This. Is. AWESOME!
Colour me the colour of intrigued.
I have a question, since this is based off of the animated stories... and is a Two-Face story... will "The Judge" make an appearance (if you don't know what I am referring to watch Batman TAS "Judgement Day")
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Tell me soon please
... also instant fav. 
ok..... im sold.
and two face is best batman villain by far.
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Well, I'm glad to hear that.
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I remember that very well.
Of course, Fluttershy isn't a D.A. or any other kind of lawyer. That's the difference between her and Harvey Dent.
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Well, I respect your opinion.
Is The Fanfic Named After Batman Villain TwoFace?
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Well, you can have a third personality similar in concept later on in the story, depending on if Fluttershy is saved or falls into becoming two face permanently. Like how she is able to use the stare, the third personality can be one who uses the stare, but to an extreme and has a very loud, commanding voice that brings discipline
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Just an idea
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Yep.
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How so?
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Well, I'm not so sure about that.
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Well... okay... (Turns around and walks away, flips a coin........)
KILL HIM BOYS!
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Good one!
Hmm...I'm on the fence about this one.
First, I'd just like to say it's fairly well written, although you need to proofread it again because there are a number of glaring errors of the kind that tell me you didn't read back over your own work.
As to the story itself...
I like Two-Face, and I loved the way B:tAS portrayed and developed him, but...
For this to work, you have to take a long, hard look at your idea and ask: "Is this just Harvey Dent with ponies, or do I have a substantially different story here that's different from just replacing Batman characters with ponies?"
Because right now, this looks very much like the latter, and the latter doesn't make for a good fanfic.
But as this is only the prologue--and honestly, you should've posted a bit more than this before shipping it out into the world--I'm taking a wait-and-see approach.
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Believe me, this is the best I can think of. By the way, which errors would they be? I'm curious.
Anyway, I'm working on the first chapter. Wait and see...
2974952 There are quite a few; one I recall is "hoofs" instead of "hooves", and the word "always" used inappropriately in place of something else at one point. There are quite a few, but just reread it yourself twice and you should catch them.
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Thanks! I'll get all those fixed soon. And where would "always" be, exactly?
2974971 Alright, I'll give you detailed comments. I'd have done so in the first place except I'm trying to do several things at once this afternoon.
On a second readthrough, it stands out to me that your writing style is VERY stilted, suggesting you are either very young, or English is not your first language. You need to work on making your writing flow more naturally, but I have neither the time nor the inclination to attempt to teach you how to do that. But these are the worst of the errors and mistakes:
shone
hooves
to raise
Nothing about this is right. Suggest:
She screeched to a halt in midair.
descent
There's the "always". And it's in the middle of a particularly badly constructed sentence. Suggest:
Slowly, the eyes dipped towards the floor.
This is not a grammar nitpick so much as a story nitpick:
This was my biggest problem with this whole thing. I know that the double-sided coin is Two-Face's motif token, but you need to find some other way to express this particular character trait in Fluttershy, because for the character AND the setting, it's wrong. Equestria doesn't have silver dollars. Or even silver bits. It has gold bits and no other form of currency. Find another way to express this concept that matches the setting.
Heard, not uttered. The two are not interchangeable.
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Actually, there are silver bits, as shown here:
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Anyway, thanks a lot!
2975214 That was an animation error.
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How can you be so sure?
2975977 Animation errors abound in FiM. If something only appeared one time and seems out of place, chances are it was an animation error.
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Can't hurt to try it out on a fan fiction, can it?
2976881 I guess not. After all, the entire brony fandom was BORN from an animation error.
Still, dial back on the blatant copying of Two-Face's coin motif.
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Well, Two-Face was famous for that coin as well as his deformity.
2977292 But a coin doesn't make sense for Fluttershy. If you're going to copy a character tic, you need to repurpose it for the character it's being grafted onto.
The coin was an important part of Dent's character because it was his good luck charm, and for Two-Face, it was a representation of the "ultimate equalizer" that is chance, where one event has two possible outcomes and it all comes down to a flip of a coin.
To put it simply, Fluttershy needs something that is recognizable as equivalent to Two-Face's coin flip but is her own thing.
If you're determined to keep the coin motif, that's fine, do whatever you like. I'm just trying to point out that there's a way of handling it that lets Fluttershy own it instead of just copying it.
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Well, I'm determined to explain everything on where that coin came in a later chapter.
2979734 Fair enough.
Kinda interesting. I look forward to seeing where you go with this.
I love this!
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Thank you very much.
My heart is still pounding! Plus, strangely, I kept reading the demon's voice with Blackfire's (a villain from the late TV show Teen Titans) voice. Wonder why. Can't wait for the next chapter though!
2970508 Wow! I came to read and found a great BTAS episode as well! AWESOME! And it would be interesting to see the Judge within Flutters.
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True it would be interesting, but the author has said no on the idea of a third personality in general.
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Well, actually, I was planning on putting in a voice similar to that of Asajj Ventress:
3044770 Genius! I haven't watched Clone Wars in a looooooong time.
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Glad I could help you there.
Wow! I am really enjoying your story! I would like to say a bit of constructional criticism later, but
for now I'll just say the positives. You had pretty good grammar and punctuation, and that's what I like in stories. You were keeping them all in character, but Twilight seemed a bit... off.
So, onto constructional criticism...
You might need to pace your story a little bit more. You know the scene where Fluttershy got mad at Diamond Tiara for insults that she had said? Well, she had a big tantrum in less than a second. It doesn't sound natural, and it should take a lot more than that to get her worked up. Also, why would Fluttershy's dark side come up right now? Why didn't it before when Flitter and Cloud Chaser were laughing?
Twilight seemed a bit OOC, which means she's not acting like she should in this type of situation. She wouldn't go off at Fluttershy, she would quickly get concerned and try to help her, not chuck insults the first moment she saw her lying on the ground. It should be something like...
She found Fluttershy on the ground, wondering what was going on. She said that she had no memory of what was going on.
"You mean... you don't remember? Oh, gosh! This could be bad. I need to research this! Oh, Fluttershy, how do you feel? Come, we'll go and see Zecora for help. Then, I'll ask Spike to send a letter. Oh... I hope that this isn't serious. I don't want to lose one of my best friends. Applejack, get off of her."
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Understand what I mean? This was just, roughly, what I expected from this story. Good luck in your future chapters! I look forward to them!
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Thanks for the work on my grammar and punctuality.
All those explanations would be revealed in later chapters, I promise.
I thought I'd have Fluttershy slowly build into a rage, as seen by here:
For Twilight, attacking children is a serious offense. I bet she wouldn't just let it drop until seeing how sorry Fluttershy is. Plus, she might have heard about how Fluttershy had behaved while taking advice from Iron Will. As for the letter, I'll get to that in the next chapter.
3202843 Ok, I understand, but Twilight shouldn't be as harsh as she was. She could see that something was wrong after a while, but still continued.
You know what? I don't even know anymore. Good luck, I guess...
I failed so bad...
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She'll see her point of view on how she deeply she regrets her actions next chapter, I promise.
you say it's four days before Twilight's coronation, does that mean she's an alicorn yet or not?
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Not yet. This chapter takes place just three days before the events of "Magical Mystery Cure."
Not sure if I can wait for the next chapter. This one was kinda heavy. In a good way. Ergo I love it so far.
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"Heavy," eh? I like the sound of that.
this is good keep up the good work
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Thanks! I shall!
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I take it that you like it?