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  • Wednesday
    Scratching My Head

    I just read a critique of My Roommate is a Vampire, and one of the commenters mentioned that they thought Octavia was out of character in the story.

    Is that possible?  Can Octavia be out of character?  I mean, as long as it's consistent within the story?

    11 comments · 49 views
  • Monday
    Overly-Long Thoughts on Brave and Frozen

    As I’ve said before, I’m a very slow consumer of media.  You know that song you’re sick of?  I’ve probably never heard it.  Your favorite video game?  I probably haven’t played it.  All those movies at the Oscars?  I’ve never seen any of them.  I tend to live in my own brain because I’m too poor (cheap) to afford easy access to these things, and I don’t have the motivation to figure out torrents and the like.

    What happens because of this is that I see just a few movies a year, and they tend to be older.  Something my wife and I can pick up at the store on sale.  A few weeks ago, she picked up Frozen and Brave.  I watched both last night, and kinda wished I hadn’t by the end of things.

    Spoilers ahead

    Brave was firmly okay.  Not great, but not actively bad.  I was caught a little off-guard by the thrust of the film.  I was fully on board up until the bearification, and from that point on, the film became a baffling series of weird decisions by the characters.  

    One of the things this movie does that I detest is that it highjacks Merida’s character for the sake of convenient plot.  When meeting with the witch, she makes sure to give her a very vague idea of what she wants.  The movie tries to set this up with earlier snippets of dialogue, but I don’t buy it at all.  Merida is a headstrong teenage girl who knows exactly what is bothering her: She doesn’t want to get married. Yes, I know it’s deeper than that, but the marriage is the primary concern.  But she doesn’t ask the witch to make is so that she doesn’t have to get married.  She asks her for the very broad “I want a spell that will change my mom.  That will change my fate.”

    This does not sound to me like natural phrasing.  It feels like the script’s author is trying to be clever about things.  Contrast this with the wish Geppetto is granted at the beginning of Pinocchio.  Geppetto is a lonely man, and when granted a wish, he knows exactly what he wants.  He doesn’t ask for something vague.  He wants his creation to be a real boy, not for his creation “to experience life.”  Aladdin doesn’t as the genie to “change my life somehow.”  He wishes to be a prince.  Ursula tempts Ariel by saying she can transform her into a human, not that she could give her something the prince might like.  She’s very direct about it.

    So when Merida meets a weird stranger in the woods, doesn’t worry at all that the witch might not have the best intentions or if she even knows what she’s doing, then gives her an obviously vague set of instructions, it makes me roll my eyes. It’s established early on that Merida is at least somewhat enamored with magic, but come on.  With that kind of set up, you either make me question the writers of the character herself.  Either the writer is being lazy or the character is kind of dumb.  I don’t like either of those options.  It think it would have been better to introduce the witch a little earlier.  Merida could have heard her offer and refused, then caved when things were looking bad for her.  It would have felt a lot more natural to me than just taking the word of some bizarre stranger that she just met all of a sudden.

    The mother is shockingly okay with becoming a bear.  I mean, she’s obviously concerned, but they kind of play it mostly like, “Gosh! Isn’t this very awkward?” rather than “Holy shit, my daughter just completely ruined my life!” Not that I wanted it to fully swing in that direction, but it felt odd to me.

    Then when it’s found out that they have two days, they basically spend the first one bonding.  That’s nice and all, but, um, your… your mom’s a bear, Merida.  Like, she’s going to be permanently a bear really soon.  Some urgency in the solving the bear problem would be nice.

    This film also has a pet peeve of mine going on: People not listening to extremely shocking news.  Merida tells her father repeated that the bear is her mother.  She’s in a room in the castle… with a bear… that is not mauling her… telling her father that it is her enchanted mother… and he never stops and says, “Wait, what?”  I know that they said he doesn’t believe in magic, but that’s just defying any level of rational curiosity.

    My last real gripe with the film is the mending the tapestry thing.  The idea of that is fine, but why on earth would they try and get back into the castle?  Have Merida go in and get it.  They can mend it outside!  Have the boys sneak it out!  Yes, I know they were bearified at the time, but Merida didn’t know that.  Not that it impeded them in any way.  Tell a guard to go and get it.  She’s still the princess.  Anything other than “Let’s drag a huge bear through a castle filled with people that like to kill bears.”

    Besides story structure, there was a lot to like about the film.  The voice acting was top notch.  Character design was appealing.  The humor was generally good.  I loved Merida’s hair, especially when she was a little girl.  I was deeply enchanted by the way she said, “I missed” right at the beginning of the story.

    Overall, I liked this film, but I liked it less than I expected.  I was completely caught off guard by the bear thing.  I was expecting a heroic journey kind of thing.  I don’t really mind that they went in another direction, but it was surprising.  My quibbles with the movie are more based in details than the overall plot.  

    If you haven’t seen this film, I think it’s worth checking out, but it isn’t Pixar’s best.

    On the other hand, I thought Frozen was actively bad.  It seems like this movie needs a director’s cut or something, because there seemed to be whole swatches of information missing.  The trolls just, um, keep Kristoff?  And no one cares?  Anna never gets to see her sister, and her parents don’t have some kind of rationale for that?  How does Anna know where Elsa is when she flees the city?  How did the snowman get into the castle to free Anna?  Just on and on.  I kept watching and thinking, “Wait, how…?”

    I didn’t particularly care for any of the songs except for Let It Go.  I just found the music in the whole thing to be generally lackluster.

    Lots and lots of plothole and contrivance in Frozen. Way too many to just wave off as “Well, no film is perfect.”  For example, Elsa wants solitude and can control ice in cold to such a degree that she can make a pretty fantastic castle up on a mountain.  A castle with a huge friggin’ door that everyone can come in through.  All the people that she doesn’t want to see.  Just a parade of people coming through those doors…

    Or, um, isn’t there a regent or a chancellor or something in the kingdom?  The parents died pretty early on, and it’s pretty obvious that the girls weren’t running things, so why is control giving to some random dude that showed up all of a sudden.  Granted, he’s apparently a prince from some neighboring place, so I guess he has cred(?), but that’s just a bizarre thing for everyone else to accept.

    But mostly I felt like Frozen was a collection of good scenes that weren’t held together very well.  Watching any scene by itself, I’m sure I’d like it, but it rarely felt to me that one scene was a logical progression from the one before it.

    Also on display here was some writer contrivance that I can’t stand.  For example, Kristoff and Anna show up to meet the trolls, and this whole scene is a nightmare to me, but what I gritted my teeth at is that the trolls are in rock mode when they show up and stay that was for no good reason other to allow Olaf and Anna to have a joke-y scene where Kristoff is talking to rocks.  Exactly why are they just standing stock still and not responding?  I don’t know, I have no good explanation other than “Well, it wouldn’t be funny if they didn’t.”  Then we get into a song about marriage that doesn’t really serve any purpose.  

    Now, I’ve always said that I don’t mind if a story meanders off from the main plot for a while, and I stick by that, but the caveat is that it must be entertaining.  Douglas Adams is the master of that, in my opinion.  He can write things that are basically totally irrelevant to the plot of the story, but are wildly fun to read about.  Probably a quarter of the Hitchhiker books are useless errata, but we love them for it.

    That’s the problem here for me.  We go off on this marriage song and dance, but it didn’t entertain me at all.  That’s just a personal opinion, of course.  Given this movie’s success, I’m probably in the minority about that scene, but it was like nails on a chalkboard to me.

    I could go on and on about the storytelling problems in that movie, but I’m sure you get the gist of it by now.  There is a school of writing where the author moves the plot along by what seems to be the first thing that comes to mind.  In MLP terms, this is kind of what Merriweather Williams seems to do.  Bats! relentlessly moves forward, ignoring much better, completely obvious solutions.  Frozen suffers from this, though it’s considerably better than Bats!  Much, much better.  However, I still got the feeling that someone would say, “But why didn’t the parents have some explanation as to why their eldest daughter is a recluse” and the room would go quiet for a moment, then someone would finally say, “Oh, whatever. It’s just a kid’s movie.”  

    And if you don’t think that happens, think again.  I have a friend that works for Hasbro, and he has lots of stories about execs using the “Whatever, it’s just for kids” line. Tangentially related to that is his many stories he has about how dumb they think that kids are.  Lots of decisions and discussions where he has to argue not to assume kids don’t understand a single thing.

    Back to Frozen.  It’s not all bad.  The character designs were nice.  The animation was pretty good, though at certain points it had this kind of bizarre stop motion feel.  I happen to love stop motion, so I was good with that, but it was a little strange to get that stuttering effect all of a sudden.  I kept wondering if my blu-ray copy was messed up somehow.  It felt very Rankin Bass at times.  And like I said, the individual scenes themselves often were satisfying to watch.

    Overall, I just can’t recommend Frozen.  I enjoy lots of flawed movies, but this one just had too many of the things that specifically irritate me.  It’s a smash-hit, though, so my opinion should be taken with a huge grain of salt.  I’m definitely not the target audience, it would seem.

    17 comments · 98 views
  • 1w, 7h
    Shut Up, Brain!

    It's really annoying when you have what should be a passing idea that becomes a permanent, insistent idea. I was talking with Steel Resolve the other day, and he was lamenting the dearth of Fluttershy/Rarity romance stories. Mostly joking, I told him that I'm going to write him one some day, and that it would suck, but I'd write it for him all the same.

    Strange thing is, I can't quit thinking about it!

    Now let's break down why this is ridiculous:

    1)  I don't have any freakin' time.  Seriously, I just semi-retired because I can't get three seconds together to write.

    2)  Fluttershy is not a favorite of mine.  I don't particularly care for writing her.

    3)  I've tried to write romance several times. It's never really come together, besides what I write with Steel.  I'm going to have to give him most of the credit on that one.

    4)  Every idea that I have for it is miserably sad.

    All of this points to it being a horrible idea, but my mind is fixated on it for some reason. I should probably just bang out a chapter so that I can look at it and say, "Oh, yeah. That's bad. Let's throw that in a drawer where no one will see it again."

    But it's something about challenge. I have all these great ideas that I think people will like and that I know I'll enjoy writing, but they aren't as challenging as writing a miserable romance about a character that I don't like in a genre that is my weakest. So my interest is all piqued. It crowds out all the thoughts that I need, and I find my imagination playing out scenes of a story I don't want to be working on.

    Why, brain? Why?!

    Ugh.

    8 comments · 60 views
  • 1w, 4d
    It's My Cheeri-versary!

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  • 2w, 24m
    Story Recommendation #3

    Wow.  It's been a long time since I've read a story that I liked well enough to recommend.  Yeesh.

    So let's discuss Spring is Dumb by HoofbitingActionOverload.  As is the case with these things, I'm going to try to avoid spoilers, but what is below this might contain them.  Consider yourself warned!  Warned, I say!

    This is a romantic comedy, and romance really isn't my genre.  I like the idea of it, but I find most stories to be generally overwrought, and no category has more offenders in that department than romance.  And that's precisely what makes this story nice.  The romance in it felt very natural to me.

    Less natural was the comedy. Now don't get me wrong. This story is funny enough to get a couple of actual laughs out of me. I almost never actually laugh out loud. It's more of a mental registry that something is, indeed, funny. My mind makes a little mental checkmark, but it doesn't usually translate into a smile or a chuckle. This story did a time or two, and for that, I applaud it.

    However, that didn't stop it from feeling like it was clubbing me on the head with the premise from time to time. There is a certain repetition that is going on in the story for comedic effect, but there is a fine line between 'still funny' and 'getting old.' Toward the middle of the story, I was starting to get pretty tired of the schtick, but the great thing is that the story also mostly does away with it at that point, too.  Not quite quickly enough for me, but I'm prickly and easily irritated, so for most readers, it will probably be right in the sweet spot.

    One thing that I really liked here is that this is a comedy with romantic elements, and that really lets the romance at the end have greater impact. It sets up the conclusion well, then delivers because you're ready for that change of pace. I think the instinct on it was good.

    Occasionally, the narrative voicing falls off track, but it's a rare problem.  Once or twice, HBAO has Rainbow think things that are humorous, but not really something that Rainbow would think. Then he kind of has Rainbow point that out to herself, but that's a false joke in my book. You can't have someone think about how they'd never actually think like that. But like I said, it's a nit-pick, not a recurrent thing.

    I was left wondering why it was divided up into two chapters. I didn't see the need to break up the flow.

    In the end, I found myself really enjoying this one. It's not perfect, but who knows more about Not Perfect fics than me? Eh? Eh?!

    No one, that's who.

    But the comedy hit its marks quite a bit of the time, and the romance was heartwarming. That seems like a win in my book.

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This story is a sequel to Diary of a Silent Tyrant

It's funny what an idle slip of the tongue can lead to.  When Discord makes an off-hand comment to Fluttershy about the mental diary he kept when encased in stone, she begs him to continue it.  She says it will be "therapeutic", but he's sure it'll be a real bore.  But who can resist those puppy-dog eyes and a bribe of fresh cookies?  Grudgingly, he takes up a pencil to document his thoughts and experiences in his new life.  A life among his old enemies.  A life he never wanted.

Cover Image by Grievousfan who makes awesome art!

First Published
27th Aug 2013
Last Modified
27th Aug 2013
#1 · 65w, 1d ago · 9 · ·

Hey, awesome, the Discord story you spoke of is out!

~Skeeter The Lurker

#2 · 65w, 1d ago · · 2 ·

Well there goes my idea...

#3 · 65w, 1d ago · · ·

>>3115296  Yup, at long last!

#4 · 65w, 1d ago · 3 · ·

>>3115315  I know about that!  That's happened to me a couple of times, too.  

#5 · 65w, 1d ago · · ·

>>3115553

Someone gave me the idea to write a silly diary for discord in stone. Silly autobiography

#6 · 65w, 1d ago · · ·

>>3115568  That what I did for my first Discord fic.  At the same time I put it out, three other people put out stories of a similar nature, including Hoopy Mcgee's The Keepers of Discord.  Coming up with great, original stuff is so hard.  My advice is if you have a good story about the time Discord was imprisoned in stone, then go for it!  How you write is really what will set it apart.  There is always room for different takes on the same concept.

#7 · 65w, 1d ago · · ·

>>3115597

Ya...I am also writing about a changling

#8 · 65w, 1d ago · 6 · ·

You deserve eight and a half pounds of pure bacon:pinkiesad2:

#9 · 65w, 1d ago · 4 · ·

>>3115779  That sounds.... beautiful!  Just the thought of it brings me to tears!  :fluttercry:  So majestic!

#10 · 65w, 1d ago · 3 · ·

I gave you most of my thoughts during editing, so here I'll just say this: I really liked Silent Tyrant, but I dare say you've topped it here in terms of wit, strength of characterization, thematic depth... everything.  I loved the way the original managed to show both those changes in Discord's demeanor and nature of which he was aware, and those which he didn't or couldn't notice; this story does it even better, and still through a difficult medium to show un-self-aware change.

Incidentally, the ending here is a great improvement (for me, at least) on the first version; nice work!

You see, up until now, Celestia was merely a pesky gnat that I hadn’t really gotten around to swatting yet, but now she’s truly a challenge! Winning is always magnificent, of course, but it’s so much better when the outcome isn’t assured. I’ll be on pins and needles for the entirety of our next contest.

I think Discord's reaction here--the way you can read into his literal intentions, the evolving (and so often, self-serving) way he interprets events, and the slow shifting of his, for lack of a better word, "moral compass"--encapsulates what I love about this fic.  Great story, through and through.

#11 · 65w, 1d ago · · ·

>>3115821  Thanks, man!  You were a tremendous help with this.  Your insights really helped me make this something special!  :pinkiehappy:

#12 · 65w, 1d ago · 4 · ·

...And if I thought you writing a good Discord was impressive, now you've blown me out of the water. Actually developing Discord's character - treading the line between friendship and Discord's chaotic, rebellious self, and making it work, while keeping the essence of Discord the same? Straight on my favorites list. This is golden.

#13 · 65w, 1d ago · · ·

>>3116437  Thanks so much!  I worked really hard on this one, so I'm thrilled you enjoyed it!

#14 · 65w, 23h ago · · ·

i would love to read a darker sequel to this story but still a funny one

#15 · 65w, 23h ago · · ·

Why a pony would want to cohabitate with a creature that does nothing but make life harder is beyond me.

Oh the pure irony in that sentence.

This was absolutely wonderful to read. I'm glad to read a happy ending to all of this and to see Discord finally accepting how life can be chaotic and orderly.

Well done~ :pinkiehappy:

#16 · 65w, 23h ago · · ·

>>3115800 Applewood smoked, delicately glazed with angel tears and cooled by the giggles of newborns.

#17 · 65w, 23h ago · · ·

This was really quite incredible.  Too many stories either turn Discord right back into a villain, make him an uninteresting clown or Pinkie Pie clone, or give him a complete "nice guy" makeover.  You've given him a character all his own, a personality with interesting tensions, and a natural progression of character development and relationships with others.

I'd love to see more of this Discord.

#18 · 65w, 22h ago · · ·

>>3117064  Man, why doesn't my supermarket carry that?!

#19 · 65w, 22h ago · · ·

>>3117162 They only carry it in North Korea, where there's no laws against giggle extraction.

#20 · 65w, 22h ago · · ·

>>3117124  Well, thank you!  I really enjoyed writing this, though it did feel like it was sucking the life out of me at times.  I may write a third story down the road to make a trilogy out of the whole thing.

#21 · 65w, 22h ago · · ·

I'd actually would like to see what this might turn into.

Sure, the diary entries are amazing, but I'd rather much see a Discord-fic detailing the draconequus' adventures and errands that he would run for Celestia. Control over chaos is one thing, but what about the "sons of chaos," so to speak.

Does Discord's power reign over the unexpected minds of individuals? Can he control maddness? What happens when a being of equal power comes to claim Discord's crown (such as a troll)? What about the unexplainable, like the Pinkie sense or even holes in reality?

:facehoof:So many questions, so little time...

#22 · 65w, 22h ago · · ·

>>3116966  It really depends on where the show goes.  I try and fit my stories into their existing framework.  If the show leaves me with a thread of something dark, it may happen.

#23 · 65w, 22h ago · 1 · ·

>>3117056  It's great that you enjoyed this after reading the first one.  That was my biggest fear when writing this.  Doing sequels is always dangerous.  It's hard to capture lightning in a bottle twice.

#24 · 65w, 22h ago · · ·

>>3117174  That's... a lot of ground to cover.  Still, Discord is one of my faves, so I may work on a story with him in the relatively near future.  I have my Trixie fic to finish and another story planned after that, but once those are done, I'll be hunting for a new story.  Discord may be the way to go.

#25 · 65w, 22h ago · 1 · ·

>>3117192

Well then,

I suppose it's a great that you can say that. Recognizing limits is the first step, or one of them at least...

If it were anyone else, I'd have doubts but with you leading the charge then, :derpytongue2: I'll blindly follow! I'll wait paitiently as you take your time to smooth out the rough edges.

#26 · 65w, 21h ago · 2 · ·

This here? This is written art.

The way you managed to write out Discord in this,  his thoughts, emotions, it was beautiful. To not only play on his character, but to also build on it? Incredible. The way you kept true to his character all the way to the very end, yet also showing some growth in his acts that he shrugged off as nothing.

I also greatly enjoyed the way you represented Celestia in this story. Conniving, yet also looking out for the greater good of her subjects. You portrayed her the same way I would imagine her, and you did it well.

All in all, great read, wonderful writing. 10/10 Would recommend.

#27 · 65w, 21h ago · · ·

>>3117490  Thanks so much!  I really poured my heart into this story, so I'm very happy that you enjoyed it!  I was interested to see if people would be into this Celestia.  To me, she's a little too perfect in the show.  I figure that's the public face she wears.  I'm not a big fan of evil tyrant Celestia, but I do think she's shrewd and hard-nosed in a way that the series can't allow her to be.

#28 · 65w, 21h ago · · ·

>>3117184

To be honest I feel like this is ten times better then the last one! Much more depth and personality in well, everypony! Even when they don't talk much there's still spirit~ And I love that kind of stuff~

#29 · 65w, 21h ago · 2 · 3 ·

Not bad though you did not resolve any issues. As it stands Celestia has successfully gained partial control over discord. He is right you know. She is an uncontested tyrant.

#30 · 65w, 21h ago · · ·

Read the whole thing.

All of it.

I just want to say, I love the way you portrayed Discord.

I'll probably go more in-depth about it tomorrow, when it's not 1:35 am and I'm bone-dead tired.

Yeah.

#31 · 65w, 21h ago · · ·

Absolutely brilliant.

#32 · 65w, 19h ago · · ·

You already know my reaction and thoughts on this, but let me say it again. I love it. Words can not convey my love of this brilliance incarnate.

I am starting to think you have a little Discord just floating around in your mind, just hanging out, and giving you the perfect characterization of him. Because you are dead on. Personally, I think even better than in the show.

As I said previously, this has gone straight to my favorites list on my page.

And as you deserve, this went right into the Feature Box. Bravo. You really do deserve it.

orp
#33 · 65w, 19h ago · · ·

Not bad at all. It appears much less chaotic and humorous than the first Diary, but it works rather well as an actual story, as opposed to a mere miscellanea of mental musings.

#34 · 65w, 14h ago · · ·

How are able to characterize Discord so well?

Also, good job! You made an ending that's neither: Discord becoming a good guy, nor did he stay evil. You made a perfect balance, so everyone is happy :pinkiesmile:!

Edit:  2 B onest dis iz teh bast dicord story

#35 · 65w, 14h ago · 1 · ·

This fanfic made me hate Celestia.

#36 · 65w, 13h ago · · ·

>>3117652 That's the position he's in.  She's in charge, but she doesn't have to be.  He could step up to the plate and dethrone here, but will he?

Having said that, my personal take on Celestia is that all rulers are tyrants of one variety or another.  I suspect Celestia is a rather benevolent one, but no one can be nice and understanding to everyone.  Some people are going to get the shaft in order to make things work for the greater whole of society.  Discord just happens to be that guy and he happens to also have phenomenal cosmic power, so Celestia can't exactly let it slide.

Thanks for reading this!

#37 · 65w, 13h ago · · ·

>>3117684  I'm really glad you liked it!

#38 · 65w, 13h ago · · ·

>>3117983  It's a success in no small part because you read it a million times before hand.  Like I told Statoose, I can't thank my pre-readers enough.  You guys really make a huge difference in my stories!

#39 · 65w, 13h ago · · ·

>>3118084  Yeah, I had to sacrifice some of the more bonkers elements because 1) the show turned him good (at least sorta good) and 2) because I wanted to actually get a story going.  I tried to keep his personality relatively intact, but he's got to a different draconequus or Fluttershy probably would have jettisoned him by now.  She'll put up with a lot, but not forever.

So basically I worked to make it less random for the sake of getting a more coherent story.

#40 · 65w, 12h ago · · ·

>>3118535  Thanks!  That ending was very important to me.  I wanted to leave it ambiguous because changing your personality is difficult, and especially so when you are a completely self-centered jerk like Discord is.  I already hated that MLP took away a perfectly great villain, so I wanted to leave it in a place where he could go either way.

#41 · 65w, 12h ago · · ·

>>3118643  Well, I hope that's because I wrote Discord well enough for you to empathize.  I feel like we see the squeaky clean public face of Celestia on the show, but she is the mare who sent her sister to the moon for a thousand years.  While I don't think of her as a tyrant, exactly, I do think she does make some ruthless decisions.

#42 · 65w, 12h ago · · ·

Not entirely sure whether I like this or not... On the one hand, I do enjoy stories that center on the villains rather than the heroes, but I also prefer stories with more unconventional endings, including the sadly rare instances of the villain actually wining, where evil prevails over good, in defiance of the normal, more conventional endings where the good guys win.

This is why I disliked the "reformation" of Discord, as it were. In Discord's position, I would have just left. Headed somewhere else; another world, another dimension, who knows. If there's one thing I dislike, it's being constrained. Being told by others what you can and can't do.

That's why I'm not sure about this story.

#43 · 65w, 12h ago · · ·

Okay. it is no longer 1:30 am.

Everything about Discord in this story is done right. While not canon-like ((E.G. Discord didn't stay with Fluttershy in the show after he was 'reformed' but you showed how hella amusing that could have been if Hasbro chose to entertain the idea)) you really showed how his new look on life conflicts directly with a natural need to cause Chaos, and how the chaos he causes usually inflicts misery.

I felt like I could relate with the spirit of chaos in this aspect, while not interested in doing something for the 'morally good' reasons, he still expressed distaste at the idea of being left alone again. Honestly I really questioned sometimes through the whole thing if he would stop acting the way he was and just snap and do something completely and utterly chaotic, which he did! (With Celestia)

Overall, this was really well done and amazing. I swear, everytime amazing fan-fiction like this comes out I actually prefer if things were to go down like THIS rather than like they did in the show.

#44 · 65w, 11h ago · · ·

you should try making a series of these. its a realy fun read.:pinkiehappy:

#45 · 65w, 11h ago · · ·

>>3118879  That's why it took me quite a while to write a sequel to Diary of a Silent Tyrant in the first place.  I much prefer Discord as a villain, but I like to work within the framework of the show.  They changed Discord in a way that I didn't exactly care for, so I wanted to make some sense of it.

In my mind, Discord isn't evil for the sake of evil.  He's "evil" because he's different.  His mind works in a different way.  He's never had friends before because he'd never thought of having friends before, but now that he has some, he's not the same guy that he was in the past.  He has different motivations.  He could absolutely just up and leave if he wanted, but that's no longer his desire.  

That's my take on it, at least.  It's just one way to see the situation.

#46 · 65w, 11h ago · · ·

>>3118962  Well, this is a sequel (in the loosest interpretation of the word) to Diary of a Silent Tyrant, so it is part of a series.  The question is whether I go any further with it.  I'm going to wait for the new season and see if they have any Discord scheduled for it.  I don't really want to write a whole story and then have MLP go in a completely different direction right off the bat.  That can always happen down the road, but I'd prefer that it not be invalidated in a month or two.

#47 · 65w, 11h ago · · ·

>>3118643

You have to remember this whole thing was seen from Discord's perspective.

His opinions and personality strongly colour the way he perceives the world and it's inhabitants, just as it makes him disregard moral values that deviate too much from his own. If anything, this story does a good job of painting him as a narcissist, while Celestia acted more or less as I would've expected.

#48 · 65w, 11h ago · 3 · ·

>>3118894  When it comes to where Discord is these days, I felt that the show left it pretty ambiguous.  If they actually said the didn't live with Fluttershy, I missed that.  So I went with the idea that he'd made a first step, but Celestia knew he needed to keep at it.

I think the important thing with Discord is that he's not an evil-just-for-the-sake-of-it kind of a guy.  He appears to be, but I think he's a victim to his chaos.  It's just never been a problem for him before because he didn't have anything to lose.  Discord is completely self-absorbed, but is beginning to awaken to that fact.  It remains to be seen if he'll stay on the wagon.  I wanted to leave it open ended.

#49 · 65w, 11h ago · · ·

>>3119011  That's exactly what I was trying to do here.  Celestia is being pretty reasonable, but Discord is so self-centered that he sees it as an attack.

#50 · 65w, 9h ago · · ·

This is pretty much exactly what I'd have happen with Discord, character wise and everything. Right down to giving him some land to Chaos-ify. This was freaking great, read the whole thing in De Lancie's voice.

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