Hilarity ensues when the pragmatic & well-mannered Arbiter and his intelligent-defunct & acid-tongued friend the Master Chief find themselves on Equestria with absolutely no idea as to how they arrived. Please note that the following characterizations of both Arby and the Chief are the property of Jon Graham. Rated Teen for ridiculous and gratuitous language.
Also, keep in mind that I'm not a moron; the Chief actually does talk in the manner in which you are about to experience. For those of you unfamiliar with this brilliant series, I advise you to check it out here: http://www.youtube.com/show/arbynthechief
Chapters (6)
This sounds awesome and it's a good thing the chief likes fluttershy
I didn't know people(besides me) watch arby 'n the chief. this is going to be funny
Wut
The
Heck?
I found the reactions interesting and Arbiter's dialogue to be on point :). Please continue.
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Sure thing. Thanks, will work on weaker aspects.
Well paced and interesting. This might actually be more better off than first thought.
holy shit this is funny!
I<3 Arby n' the Chief and MLP. I can't wait to find out what happens when they meet the rest of the mane 6 also celestia's and luna's reaction to chiefs foul mouth. I hope he doesn't get sent to the moon
keep up the good work
I also hope chief will do the ROFLcopter. that's like the funniest thing ever but it's clearly up to you what chief will do and say.
LESS THAN THREE
No, really, this is hilarious. Way better than I thought it would be. It does have a few weak aspects, but overall it isn't bad. You did Arby and Chief well enough to overpower any problems though. Carry on, I'll be looking forward to it.
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Thanks! Do let me know where I could improve it if you don't mind!
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The arrival in Equestria is a wee bit weak. I mean, it's pretty difficult to think of a story that would suitably explain how they would show up (I'm having a hard time coming up with one myself), but it could do with a little tweaking. Maybe Chief read an incantation from the Necronomicon. I dunno.
The pacing before they arrive is good. You spent enough time that a reader who's never seen the show can understand the basics, and yet longtime fans won't be bored by explanations and development. However, after they get to Equestria, it gets a little too sped-up. Don't feel bad, this is a hard part to get right, and most writers do screw it up a little. It's easy to let ideas for what to do later in the story get the better of you, so you rush the intro a bit. It happens.
Overall, though, it IS a decent fic. I will keep reading it, and you have the comedy of the show and characters spot-on (I wouldn't worry about the MLP characters too much. They kinda write themselves). Keep up the good work.
This is either madness, brilliance, or a combination of the two...
This is going to be fun...
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Thanks for your input. I'll certainly refer to it for future chapters.
He11 t0 7h3 y3s. This story is great, you keep it up.
Wait a minute... THE CHIEF WON SOMETHING? AGAINST PINKIE PIE?!
*calls whoever* Is the Apocalypse happening?
This is way to fuckiny funny!
my stomach... it hurts... too much... laughing!!
I fell out of my chair laughing at this point
continue
2944148 I believe it is. Get the nukes.
2943063 Ever seen the youtube series Arby n' the Chief?
Da Fuck?
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For those of you unfamiliar with this brilliant series, I advise you to check it out here: http://www.youtube.com/show/arbynthechief
A once terrible day is now better
2946294. Can't say that I have. Guess I'll have to look into it.
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It's worth your while, dude. Check it out!
"dat sexy plot"
OH MY GOD I CANT STOP LAUGHING
At the 'Unholy Offspring' joke...
OH MY GOD MY FUCKING LUNGS I CAN'T STOP LAUGHING
He keeps passing out.
Awaiting more.
This is FUCKING GOLDEN.
Liek Holey Sh1T I r sow <3 Th1s evry ch@pt3r maek m3 g0 L0L L0L LOL L01
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ROFL!
Wow shes that damn hot....!
“OMG YOUR 3V3N MOAR HOTTER THAN TEH ONES ON RUL34 OMFG SRSLY YOUR LIEK TEH SECKSIEST THIGN IVE EVEAR SCENE MARRY M33 PLIXY PLOX ADN TEHN WE R GON HAS BILLIONS OF BEHBEHS TOGETHAR ADN IT R GON BE TEH KEWLEST THIGN EVAR WIT NEST BY TEH PEEPLES AND PONIES ALIKE OMFG IT R TEH PURFECT PLAN SO SAI YES K THANX BAI” There was another pause.
Thump.
“FUUUUUUUUUCK.”
I died!
oh my sides!
SOI SOI SOI SOI SOI SOI SOI
Bro just take all of
yes spider chief!th01.deviantart.net/fs70/PRE/i/2011/085/6/5/spider_chief_by_crslozada-d3cjlrn.jpg
“Hold your horses, Chief." *ba dum tss*
I can't help but to read this in the character's own voices.
I'm expecting myself to hear a roflcopter go in my head.
This is the funniest damn thing I've ever read on here!
Keep it up!
Ahh yes, Rule34. I remember accidentally wondering onto that site.
That was extremely disturbing.
I hope that the arbiter finally enjoys himself.
Wait ending already how is this it nooooooo
Why is this teh end?
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Honestly? Because I ran outta gas just after I planned the ending.
3353421
I know that feel bro.
I was wondering what happened to you, but I understand how you feel
. Every writer gets a block every once in awhile. I even got it when writing my own Arby 'n' the Chief fics; Equestrian Afterlife and Dimensional Dilemma.
PS: I hope poor Fluttershy is going to be okay
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I think she'll be fine.