After being embarrassed during a failed race held by the Wonderbolts, Rainbow Dash and her friends go on vacation to the resort island of Clamhoof Cove. But instead of relaxing, Dash is forced to confront what happened during the race and must decide how to deal with the pony who caused the failure.
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Derpy being goshdarn adorable
The movie "What About Bob?" but always wondered "What if we made this "What About Derpy?""
Rainbow Dash and Derpy Learning to be Friends
A story written like an episode of MLP:FiM
All of the mane six having their time to shine
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Derpy Derpy Derpy Derpy Derpy Derpy Derpy Muffins!!!!!!!
This is defiantly getting my vote.
This is hilarious. Good enough for a vote, not quite perfect though. The opening starts out as a journal, while the amount of detail in the rest just feels like normal first-person. Which isn't a bad thing, since Dash's voice is just wonderful and really makes this. Switching back and forth between first-person 'present scenes' and journaled entries would probably work.
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You are right about that, good pony.
There is much Derpy love here for all. I really enjoyed writing this story and I have a soft spot for the sweet little mailmare. She was in the story from the moment I wrote the first line and when I made my way through the narrative, I realized the story should be more about her and Dash and their relationship after the race. It was really fun to give her a lot of "screentime" and see how her character would develop. 
Thank you for reading my work and taking the time to comment on it! The comments mean a lot to me and inspire me to keep going. I think I'm going to post a few more stories here from another offsite account as a bonus.
yay!
-BGB
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Thank you so much for your kind comments! I really hope I'm getting this reply button option working right and that you actually see this message...
I'm glad you liked the humor! I tried really hard to give a comedic voice to Rainbow Dash's personal writing style, but you are right about the style. At the beginning, I felt I had written a really strong journal entry, but when action started to overtake the story, it did feel like more normal first-person than anything, except for a few parts like the description I wrote of Dash's "Stratospheric Rainboom."
I think you might have something there when you said I could try switching between present-first-person scenes and journal-first-person entries. That has the potential to kick this story up a couple notches.
Thank you again! I'm going to upload more stories very soon.
-BGB
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Cool beans. :)
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I hope we get more of your stories soon, I really enjoyed this one
Another entertaining story, especially liked your pinky, fit her to a t.
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Thank you! This was the first story I uploaded to fimfiction in hopes of earning one of the top three spots in the February Write-Off competition. I didn't win, but I really enjoyed writing the story.
This is actually written in the style of of an episode because I one day hope to get to write at least one MLP:FiM episode. I have so many ideas and many of them involve sea ponies, which I'd love to see in the show.
-BGB
493587 Seaponies would be awsome. And I hope you accomplish that goal, because I have no doubt that whatever you made would be a great episode.
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Thank you! I'm hoping to start up a group of fans who would like to have sea ponies in the show. I'll see if I can make a group here based on that. Still thinking about the details, though.
-BGB
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Definatly tell me when you do, I would like to join it.
Aw, poor Derpy. I could see maybe Trixie taking her stage persona too far and accidentally hurting her, but not Rainbow Dash ... well, except maybe if it had to do with the Wonderbolts. but maybe even then Dash would try harder to forgive her. Anyway, Derpy will soon have her revenge on the Wonderbolts! By becoming one.
How are they going to remind Spike they care after leaving him behind while taking an awesome vacation to an island resort? I'll bet he's feeling pretty pissed off and dejected.