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Sequel to Battleships are Magic-
A few years have passed since first contact between ponies and men. The gap between worlds has secretly been bridged and it is possible to travel between the United States and Equestira.
The President hopes that the American public will be receptive, but on the way to the press conference something goes terribly wrong.
A sequel? Already?
I am literaly shaking out of happyness. Keep up the good work.
>>248689 Air to air missiles are designed to lock on to the heat produced by aircraft engines or a radar or laser target. Rainbow Dash doesn't have engines generating heat, so she's safe from heat-seekers and too small, agile, and fast for radar and laser guided missiles.
I doubt Pegasi have a large enough radar signature for an AIM-7 Sparrow or AMRAAM to lock-on to, and I KNOW a Sidewinder can't lock onto a heat signature under a certain threshold..
and YAY! Update!
Although, I personally don't love the idea of referencing the MLP shows when doing human stories. It just feels awkward IMO. (Don't change it, though.)
The one thing I don't understand about the story so far is why they made Celestia ride in the back of an unescorted van. I mean she is recognized as the leader of her country, why wouldn't she be placed on a much more secure form of transport to go to the White House?
Even if it was for secrecy or something the government would have personnel with proper clearance to be protecting her. It just seems very unlikely this is how it would have played out if this had happened in the real world (assuming talking colorful ponies with tattoos were real)
but despite this I'm enjoying this story and can't wait for the next chapter
I considered this for a long time. As secret as everything was, there should have been no one else that knew Celestia was being transported. An escorted van would have been a red flag. I know that the escort could have been discrete with an unmarked car or something. I realize now that I should have put this information in the story.
Truly, though, would it have made a difference? Could extra people on the scene have stopped the "on the run" scenario from happening? If so, then there wouldn't have been much plot! 
Wow was this written by the same author that wrote Battleships are Magic?
*checks*
Yup. Well I must say the quality between these two fics freaking skyrocketed. All the chapters are at least two thousand words so the pace is slower than last time which is very much a good thing. Plus this time round there are actual obstacles the characters must overcome. I can imagine the frustration of having to find the ponies yet always finding them a few steps ahead. Overall this is a much better story and I very much like the fact that humanities darker side isn't hidden and yet the ponies still continue to see and hope for the best in humanity. Good Job, mate!
Welcome to Earth.
Land of corrupt and greedy executives and politicians, endless bloody religious conflicts, high suicide rates, routine murder, rape, theft, kidnapping, worldwide poverty, starvation, tyranny, intolerance, hatred and nuclear and biological weapons.
I hope you enjoy your stay, naive little ponies. Try to avoid the guys in the white hoods, and the ones with the colored armbands, and... actually, avoid everyone.
Oh, and THANK YOU for introducing some human conflict in here. I was afraid it was going to be another "perfect world" story. Still, I'd like to see the ponies' reactions to the wretched underside of our world, not just the shining facade diplomats always get. Take a tour of Harlem, or Johannesburg, or Dhaka, or any number of other areas in the world. The rich feast while the poor starve. Do you blame the human for resorting to violence and illicit activities in such oppressive environments?
An interesting conflict to introduce besides the overused corrupt politician/CEO scheme would be having any one of the mane six get lost for a prolonged period of time and find themselves among the forgotten people of the cities. Maybe a teleportation spell goes wrong, or they decide to take an impromptu tour, and are forced to come face to face with the harsh reality of our world. How would they react? Grey and Grey is always more thought provoking than Black and White, in my humble opinion. If Twilight had a gun, and was surrounded by mobsters ready to rape, kill and rob her, not necessarily in that order, would she be willing to end the lives of some mothers' children and possibly some children's parents? If she met a starving child stealing food, would she stop him knowing he would do the same thing the next day?
I'm not asking for grimdark. Grimdark would be having Twilight sniped the moment she walked out of the portal or having Russia or China or a private army invade and curbstomp the pathetic weaklings with nukes and missiles galore. I'm just requesting something beyond "they're the infallable good guys who teach humanity a thing or two about love and tolerance" or "humans are awesome who do we shoot next".
this is interesting. you actually introduce a conflict in this story. i hope things turn out well in the end. pacing also seems good. you work pretty fast by the way. i mean i check battleships are magic was done a few weeks ago and here you are on your third story. again, your story is engaging. i always thought these kinds stories wouldn't attract much attention because people would get to the kind of jargon that mainstream don't understand, but you just made perfect balance. not too much jargon, yet still catches peoples interest.
by the way, do you travel a lot? you seem to know a lot about these places. i'm sure you can pick this up in google but the way you say it, almost feels natural, like you actually live there.
well, on to the next story.
Have you thought about a crossover with SG-1 perhaps?
Now that the ponies have been made public here.
Perhaps it can turn out that the Stargate is here and the SGC can be made public.
That would be cool!
Ponies in the SGC!
Yeah!
In the SGC, maybe even with SG-1!^_^
Then you don't know anyone who believes it: Al Gore _never_ made that claim, it's a lie spread by certain people on the US right.
(He claimed that he pushed for funding on something that would become a part of the Internet, which was true.)
It's a standard technothriller trope: The US is the only 'real' nation, all others are either enemies, places things happen or providers of elite troops.
It's a subset of a more general trope, where you have things like: "The government is rounding up all people who are X," without even lip service offered to the response "people who are X should claim refugee status in Canada."
There's a reason that, when you write a fictional encounter with the President-- or any other national leader-- you use a fictional President, or even give no name at all. There's no point in riling people with a political figure who most likely has gone in and out of favor a dozen times since you started writing.
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