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    Twenty years after Luna's return, Equestria advances with augmentation technology and burns with civil unrest. And in the shadows, a hidden conspiracy carefully pulls the world to their own whims...
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  • E Special Relativity

    Pinkie gets a bit too carried away with finding long-lost members of the Apple family.
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  • T Vee for Vendetta

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  • E A Word to the Wise

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  • T More Than She Could Dream Of

    Pinkie finds herself heartbroken after another rejection. A chance meeting leads to a blossoming relationship, but is her new love life worth the friction it causes in her friendships?
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  • 20w, 11h
    Engineered, to a degree!

    Hi again, everyone!

    University for me is finally over! I graduated Friday before last from the University of Cambridge with a Master's in Manufacturing Engineering, and wow, was that ever an experience. Kind of hard to believe that I was fretting over my first year exams when I joined this fandom! Now to find a job...

    In the meantime, I've been gallivanting around Singapore and Malaysia for the past week and a half on an overseas research project which has been planned for over the past year. It's been very interesting to see a variety of start-ups and manufacturers in this area of the world, but as you can probably tell by the lateness of this entry, both free time and internet access have been in short supply recently! I'll be travelling around Japan for the rest of the month come Sunday, so I should have plenty of downtime on trains and planes there. I'm hoping to get the next chapter of Vee out in a couple of weeks if all goes according to plan, and August should see some shorter stories I've been planning... and maybe a little Equine Revolution too.

    In the meantime, I'll be hitting the road, and my keyboard. Repeatedly.


    8 comments · 72 views
  • 25w, 1d
    Powers of estimation: slightly off

    Gah. I say I'll get the next chapter of Equine Revolution out in the month of May, and end up three days late. Still, it's out! Hope you enjoy this one as much as I enjoyed writing it!

    Also, I notice that I've hit 100,000 words as of this chapter. Even spread over 2 years, I'm still a little taken aback that it's grown to this size! Here's to keeping it going, and a big thank you to everyone who's been reading so far!

    2 comments · 134 views
  • 29w, 6d
    Breaking Radio Silence!

    Sorry for my rather erratic activity on the site these past few weeks—comments not being replied to, story chapters falling later than usual, and so on. My last ever set of university exams was last week, so there was a flurry of revision for those, and this weekend past, I was settling down into the grim and desolate very lovely and picturesque North of England for the industrial project I'm now doing.

    But here I am! Hopefully I should now be around more often for magical horse words. The next chapter of Vee for Vendetta will be out tomorrow, and Equine Revolution's next chapter later in the month. And with that productivity, I'm thinking about branching out a little more. Beyond my longer-running stories, I was wondering (for those of you who have read them) what thoughts were on the one-shots I've done for the EqD writing prompts recently. Obviously, those prompts are about to dry up for the summer, but as someone whose story ideas frequently end up spanning multiple lengthy chapters, it's been pretty interesting writing stories that wrap up in less than 7,000 words. I have a fair few concepts on ice I could use, so if there is a bit of interest, I'll be putting together some shorter stories later this year.

    Also, finally, thank you to all my followers! Sorry I didn't acknowledge the 200 mark being hit sooner; I really do appreciate all your feedback on my writing, and I hope I can continue to keep you entertained. I'll try and belatedly do something special for this event; I feel like Veggie Vee needs a picture in all her megalomaniacal glory...

    4 comments · 73 views
  • 45w, 1d
    New Story!

    OK, I've finally released my new story, Vee for Vendetta! I've been picking at this idea on and off for about a year, so it's great to finally get it out into the open. Give it a read here.

    Jump in, and see what happens when a neurotic civil servant tries to boss around Ponyville: the town that's already seen off Nightmare Moon, Discord and Alicorn Amulet-ed Trixie. All I can say is, things are not gonna stay civil for long...

    1 comments · 78 views
  • 59w, 3d
    150 Followers!

    So, I ended up out in the sticks just after posting Chapter 8 of Equine Revolution on Monday, with nary a megabit-per-second to my name. On returning, I found that I'd hit the 150 follower milestone!

    It's really awesome to have so many people following me for my writing, so thank you very much to everyone who follows me! I've got big plans for a couple of upcoming stories, plus the next chapters of Equine Revolution, so stay tuned!

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February Write-Off First Place Winner! Commissioned to produce a dress for Princess Celestia herself, Rarity orders in the finest fabric she can get her hooves on. However, her work is disturbed by a mysterious plague that spreads through the town, causing ponies to lose their beloved manes! Is it the work of a phantom prankster? Perhaps a deadly disease? Or maybe something a little more... colourful?

First Published
6th Mar 2012
Last Modified
19th Feb 2012
#1 · 144w, 1d ago · · ·

Hello,

I'm some guy who reads stories and have decided to give feedback on the entires for the write off I'm taking a look at, done in stream of consciousness style. Please take all feedback with a grain of salt, as it's meant to be freeform thoughts rather than a delicately put together review.

Thoughts; Just from the intro I'm unsure of where this story is going, or how it relates to the prompt, but the dialogue writing is snappy and the characterization well presented - though, from what we know about Derpy, I'm not sure how I feel about her presentation. She seems a tad too cohesive.

The interactions between Rarity and the other characters are well done with lots of personality, but we're quite a ways into the story and it's unclear how any of this will relate to the prompt. Big Mac's accent is unnecessarily thick, and I'm still not a fan of Derpy's portrayal.

And, then as the prompt reveals itself, the story suddenly comes together in a magnificent way. The strength of the writing really carries the plot along, though I didn't much care for the ending at all. I liked the clever interpretation of the story prompt, which is testament to the fact that good writer's posess the ability to circumvent expectation. I feel like the referential conclusion was the story's weakest point, but it was still a fabulous work over all.

#2 · 144w, 1d ago · · ·

FINALLY

A STORY THAT DOESN'T SUCK. Oh god there are so many terrible entries. If this doesnt make it into the top ten, I dunno, I'll go on some kind of rampage.

God, that was hilarious :rainbowlaugh:

#3 · 144w, 14h ago · · ·

Awwwwwwww, that was good.  :rainbowkiss:  The flow was excellent and the pay off was brilliant.  :moustache:

#4 · 143w, 5d ago · · ·

Add that to the short list of good stories in this competition.

Although I was surprised to see so many misspellings and typos in such a well-crafted story. It just goes to show that a spell check before submitting is a good idea, no matter your confidence in your ability to spell.

#5 · 143w, 2d ago · · ·

This is just fantastic! You had me laughing pretty much the whole way through. I very much like your style, as well, quite fluid.

I'd 'Watch' you, if I knew your handle. Blasted anonymity.

#6 · 142w, 1d ago · · ·

Congragulations Melon Hunter! You just won 100 dollars! What are you gonna do now?:pinkiehappy:

#7 · 142w, 1d ago · · ·

we have almost the exact same pic...WTF?

#9 · 142w, 22h ago · · ·

Hoo, this is a winner all right. Great idea, great writing, and a great twist! Although I was kind of hoping for a more adventurous resolution with the ponies trying to get the dress back, you've written a lot as it is. Congrats.

#10 · 142w, 21h ago · · ·

Later that day, upon finding out who was responsible (don't ask me how), all across Equestria could hear the scream of Celestia "REVENGE".

And so the war continues........:trollestia:

Anyway, very nice story, and the way you wrapped it up at the end was hillarious. Did not see it coming.

#11 · 142w, 21h ago · · ·

haha, pretty good!

#12 · 142w, 20h ago · · ·

Let me just say first of all: Wow. That was awesome.:rainbowdetermined2: Second, I counted like 2 spelling errors, but I'm pretty sure one was gryphon, which has a number of acceptable spellings. And third, that ending was just plain WIN:raritystarry: You most definitely deserved your victory, those near on 10'000 words were all absolutely fabulous. I take my hat off to you, good sir or madam:moustache:, and as is my habit, a rating of 9.5/10:eeyup:s. Most excellent work.

#13 · 142w, 20h ago · · ·

Congrats on winning the contest! Loved this story!

#14 · 142w, 19h ago · · ·

Well, well, well.

I did not expect that! All hail Trolluna! :rainbowlaugh:

This was a funny and well-written story, and deserved to win. Congrats!

#15 · 142w, 17h ago · · ·

Omigosh, this WON?! Yeeees, it was such a good story, congrats!!!

#16 · 142w, 14h ago · · ·

Haha that was great! :D

#17 · 142w, 9h ago · · ·

>>241011 No problem! Thanks for the feedback, it's much appreciated. The ending does seem to be the most polarising part of the fic; I had two readers come back to me, one saying he found the ending hilarious, the other found it anti-climatic. So you're definitely not alone! :twilightsmile:

>>241025>>242619 Glad to hear you liked it! I've never really had a crack at writing comedy before, so I'm happy I was able to make someone laugh!

>>252320 Eeyep. I was cringing at how many errors a couple of readers found when I decided to polish the fic up after the voting period had finished. Chalk it up to me only coming up with the idea on Wednesday evening, then feverishly hammering away at the story with little regards to proof-reading. I really wish I had noticed the 24-hour extension now... :derpytongue2:

>>262880 Well, now you know! Thanks for reading and commenting!

>>293429 I dunno, plushie? :rainbowkiss: I really have been taken aback by this!

>>293495>>293576 Well, filly Scratch on a turntable is best pony, after all.

>>293892 Thanks! I did have an another idea for the ending, involving Sweetie Belle smuggling out some of the silk offcuts and making new Crusader capes, so that after Twilight has painstakingly disinfected the town, the CMC accidentally spread the sprites about again. But it only just squeaked in under the word limit anyways, so unfortunately it had to go.

>>294010>>294062 Thanks for the feedback, guys! Glad to see you enjoyed it.:raritywink:

>>294136 9 and a half Big Macs out of 10? You're too kind!

>>294169>>294228>>294361>>294521 You're all very welcome!

#18 · 142w, 8h ago · · ·

>>295089 Shes the cutest pony next to filly luna

#19 · 142w, 7h ago · · ·

Haha! That ending, priceless! Cal us even, that's good.

#20 · 142w, 7h ago · · ·

was the rumored bunker underground sweet apple acres a reference to fall out equestria?

#21 · 142w, 7h ago · · ·

>>295396 Indeed it was!

#22 · 142w, 6h ago · · ·

>>295421

:yay: i feel so clever

#23 · 142w, 6h ago · · ·

Luuuuuunnnnnnaaaaaaaa!!!

Also loved the story of the blanks reference

#24 · 142w, 6h ago · · ·

>>295461 Have a cookie. You earned it.

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See if you can find any of the other references? :rainbowwild:

#25 · 142w, 4h ago · · ·

Congratulations!  It was a tough choice between this and "A Life Worth Living" when I was voting.

It got down to the point where I was looking at just who was had the best flow.

Tough choice, and yours toughed out.

#26 · 142w, 4h ago · · ·

>>295897 Thanks for the vote! Also, might I add, you possibly have the most awesome username ever :rainbowkiss:

#27 · 142w, 4h ago · · ·

Melon, you swanky so-and-so!  

Congratulations, sir!

#28 · 142w, 4h ago · · ·

>>295967

Mwuahahaha, indeed, I do.

Enjoy your 100 dollars and 5K interwebz (ITBZ)

#29 · 142w, 3h ago · · ·

>>295089 Even kinder when you know what I gave my own fic: 8.25 Eeyups/10.:rainbowwild: Somehow I was unlucky enough to be offline for the entire public voting period, but if I had taken a look at this and a few others, I have no clue whether it would have recieved my vote. I just checked it out to see how the best write their fics (Dialogue and paragraph format etc.)Not going to steal your ideas or anything:scootangel:. This was the only competition entry I've actually read. Once again, a well deserved victory, sir or madam, and if I knew you IRL, it'd be a gold star to you, which so far no-one has been able to attain. And a certified Jaysteeny approval *Gives thumbs up to screen* Yes, I did really do that. The only other thing to recieve that (the thumbs up)is people in the most epicest outfits on the free dress day at school.(Luigi, two guys in morph-suits and a guy in a gilly suit) I just realised I'm rambling....Sorry:twilightblush:

#30 · 142w, 2h ago · · ·

Hah! I knew it! Only kidding, it wasn't too hard to guess what the culprit was. The Luna twist at the end was hilarious.

I'd try to comment on how well-written this piece is, but I'm not very good with compliments. Excellent story, congrats on winning the Febuary Write Off!

#31 · 142w, 1h ago · · ·

Hmmm.... Ponies losing their hair... Microscopic particles... Hazmat suits.... This story is about Mesothelioma, isn't it.

Asbestos: Just because you can't see it, doesn't mean it's not a problem.

I like the positive message. Way to spread awareness. :rainbowdetermined2:

#32 · 141w, 6d ago · · ·

>>295089 Indeed. Followed.

And congratulations!

#33 · 141w, 6d ago · · ·

Dat punchline.

Yes. :trollestia:

And btw, did you keep the monies? Just want to know. :heart:

#34 · 141w, 6d ago · · ·

Good work Melon! Congratulations!

#35 · 141w, 6d ago · · ·

>>296368 Thanks a lot!

>>296462 It... wasn't intended to be, but if I am inadvertently spreading awareness about asbestos, then all the better! :pinkiehappy:

>>297260 I have the monies for now, as I'm still debating which charities to make a donation to. I hope you will respect my decision not to disclose any further details on which charities (Sorry, just my personal principles! :fluttershysad:)

>>297948 Cheers, Menti!

#37 · 141w, 6d ago · · ·

Well played, Luna, well played....

But I still think my favorite scene was Twilight with the shears.

#38 · 141w, 6d ago · · ·

Oh my word, this is awesome. Granted, I saw the whole "spider silk is causing everypony to go bald" thing coming from miles away, but having it all turn out to be an elaborate prank by Luna? Now that's a twist! :pinkiehappy:

Very well done! You took the concept of a plague and actually made it funny and fitting the feel of the show! I congratulate you, you deserve that $100!

#39 · 141w, 6d ago · · ·

That was glorious.

#40 · 141w, 6d ago · · ·

Whoa, let's hope the Princess doesn't hear of this story, because she'll most likely banish you to the moon for this.:trollestia:

#41 · 141w, 6d ago · · ·

Let's just hope that the Princesses make things up to their stooges. I can think of a grey mare that's probably feeling kinda low right now because of all of this and, well, she sort of has enough on her plate, right?

#42 · 141w, 6d ago · · ·

Luna is the best princess ever

#43 · 141w, 6d ago · · ·

This story made me itchy

#44 · 141w, 6d ago · · ·

And then, Luna reached Troll Godhood.

#45 · 141w, 6d ago · · ·

Good job! Wonderful, i say, wonderful! And Congrats!:pinkiehappy:

#46 · 141w, 6d ago · · ·

this is like my Story Picture me insane except when Rarity can't make Celestias dress she kills her friends great story though :pinkiehappy:

#47 · 141w, 6d ago · · ·

cool story bro just dont get the part about an abacus in bluebloods bed :rainbowhuh:

#48 · 141w, 6d ago · · ·

Funny! Good job. I loved the descriptions. The nano-parasprite idea was really clever.

#49 · 141w, 6d ago · · ·

>>298339 What? Awww, damn it... :rainbowlaugh:

>>298353 Well, the infection has to be stopped at the root, y'know. (God, I'm sorry for that pun :twilightblush:)

>>298639 Thank you! That means a lot, coming from an author like you!

>>298897 My thoughts on Luna were that, like her Royal Canterlot Voice, she has no idea when she's overdoing the pranking. Either that, or when it comes to getting revenge on Celestia, no collateral damage is too great. As for Derpy, I'm sure Zecora will have that restoration potion whipped up in no time!

>>299117 You might want to get some ointment for that. Nano-sprite infestations are nasty.

>>299118 U MAD, EQUESTRIA?

>>299237 Thanks very much!

>>299775 That Pinkie Smile just makes that comment. I will be sleeping with a cricket bat under my bed tonight. Just in case... :rainbowderp:

>>299869 Well, fanon Luna carries her abacus around wherever she goes, so how could it have gotten into Blueblood's bed? A slumber party, of course! :scootangel:

#50 · 141w, 6d ago · · ·

>>300073

So when the reports come in that she's basically destroyed Ponyville's economy, she'll say the same thing another character voiced by Tabitha St Germain did: "I just don't understand what went wrong."

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