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Creative Charmer 711

Joined February 2012
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    Creative Charmer's Stories (7)

    • The Curse of Discord
      After defeating a chaos-causing cloud, Twilight starts undergoing strange and chaotic changes...

      19,771 words · 972 views · 44 likes · 4 dislikes
    • The Magic of Reading
      Sweetie Belle at long last learns how to use magic
      24,353 words · 550 views · 15 likes · 0 dislikes
    • To Love a Pet
      Wanting a pet of her own, Sweetie Belle comes across a porcupine in the woods, and creates a great friendship with the creature. However, she soon learns the hardest factor of owning a pet...
      4,576 words · 175 views · 10 likes · 1 dislikes
    • Love at First Charm
      A new stallion comes to Ponyville, and he has captured the hearts of the Mane Six. Unfortunately, things get worse when each pony wants him
      26,050 words · 833 views · 28 likes · 13 dislikes
    • Daring-Do and the Griffon's Goblet
      21,356 words · 471 views · 6 likes · 2 dislikes
    • Nightmare Over Equestria
      7,183 words · 204 views · 2 likes · 0 dislikes
    • The War of the Equestrian First Reign
      1,630 words · 15 views · 1 likes · 1 dislikes

    Behold the continuing adventures of Daring-Do! Daring learns from her friend of a goblet that is owned by a griffon, whom is the self-proclaimed "king" of where he lives. His goblet is a very beautiful artifact, and dates back to the time of the griffon's ancestor, whom was the original owner of the goblet. Now daring-Do has to get to the griffon's mountain and obtain the goblet, but she'd better be careful, because this griffon isn't prepared to let his most prized possession get taken.

    First Published
    22nd Feb 2012
    Last Modified
    30th Mar 2013

    Comments ( 7 )

    #1 · Chapter 1 · 64w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Very nice, but IMHO you should use more descriptions of character's emotions and actions mid-dialogue. Description-less as it it it resembles ranobe, and i am not sure if Daring Doo is a ranobe :raritywink:. You can re-watch the episode and see that book have a lot of descriptions, and not just dialogues. Or you can continue work as it is, if you not very good with descriptions. Either way, good luck! I will happy to see more chapters.

    #2 · Chapter 1 · 64w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>247284

    (Sorry, forgot to press "reply". :facehoof: )

    Well, there should be more descriptions once she gets to the mountain, so there'll be more to describe. :pinkiehappy:

    #3 · Chapter 1 · 64w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>247284

    Also, I thought about what you said, and I realized that why I'm not so descriptive is because

    1. I didn't want to put too much text for people to read.

    2. I'm not good at thinking of the right words to describe the ponies, so sometimes I don't put any at all. :derpyderp2:

    #4 · Chapter 1 · 64w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>247471

    I know, but it will not hurt if you describe character's emotions or minds a little bit more :pinkiesmile:

    #5 · Chapter 1 · 64w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>247479

    Well, I'm not good at describing since I don't know the words to use and I don't how to describe the words, either. :applecry:

    I guess I can try, but don't expect any miracles.

    #6 · Chapter 7 · 42w, 1d ago · · ·
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    You are beautiful and this is beautiful. Keep striving to improve and things will only get better! This is beautiful and I love you!

    #7 · Chapter 7 · 42w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>986778

    Oh! Well, thanks a lot! :pinkiehappy:

    I'm glad somebody finally commented on this after so long~ :pinkiesad2:

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