Behold the continuing adventures of Daring-Do! Daring learns from her friend of a goblet that is owned by a griffon, whom is the self-proclaimed "king" of where he lives. His goblet is a very beautiful artifact, and dates back to the time of the griffon's ancestor, whom was the original owner of the goblet. Now daring-Do has to get to the griffon's mountain and obtain the goblet, but she'd better be careful, because this griffon isn't prepared to let his most prized possession get taken.
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Very nice, but IMHO you should use more descriptions of character's emotions and actions mid-dialogue. Description-less as it it it resembles ranobe, and i am not sure if Daring Doo is a ranobe
. You can re-watch the episode and see that book have a lot of descriptions, and not just dialogues. Or you can continue work as it is, if you not very good with descriptions. Either way, good luck! I will happy to see more chapters.
Also, I thought about what you said, and I realized that why I'm not so descriptive is because
1. I didn't want to put too much text for people to read.
2. I'm not good at thinking of the right words to describe the ponies, so sometimes I don't put any at all. ![]()
You are beautiful and this is beautiful. Keep striving to improve and things will only get better! This is beautiful and I love you!







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