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unfortunately are you sure?

Meh. You get a like.

Good fic! But made me "wut"

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Meh

That's it? No real criticism, constructive or not? That seems like a waste of a comment.

I think I would have prefered this story if he would have been released after the initial rape, would have realised he did love her etc etc.. rather than the kidnap and rape scenario we have now because in these stories I can never make my rational side go away which yells: kidnap, been away for months, no sunlight, parents think hes dead and are mourning.. well you get the idea.

Ok well I gave it a down vote. I wasn't going to post in order to avoid the "you downvoted because it's a rapefic" arguement but I decided that since i down ussually downvote I might a well give my opinion, for whatever it's worth.

First off I did read the story in it's entirety and no I did not down vote solely because the story invovles rape. That said, I found the story boring. It was a lot of nothing in the first chapter. Second I am not a fan of 2nd person perspective stories because I feel like some authors use it so they don't need to create a main character( not saying that you chose this style for that reason but thats the way it feels).Third the sex was short and boring. I feel as though you had more but cut it out. Next I hate when the "victim" ends up developing stockholm syndrome and then ends up like "yay, rape me again". To me it cheapens the story and makes it feel like there wasn't a lot of thought put into the ending.

Ok as for pro's, I liked the punishment I thought that it was fairly interesting but it would've been better if vinyl didn't let "Anon" cum at all(just my opinion) .I can also see Vinyl being a crazy obsessive bitch.

I hope that some part of this helps you. And I hope that you understand that this isn't some kind of attack on you.

I up voted this because in my opinion, it was fairly well written. I do have to agree with what another user said however, in that I am not a big fan of all the events of the story suddenly becoming okay because the victim says he/she loves his/her captor.

Stockholm syndrome doesn't make everything okay. What about his life he's missing out on? Friends? Family? Co-workers? He's trapped in the basement and used for nothing but sex.

I think I would've liked the story better if the rape had happened (Since, let's be honest here, this story is just a sexual fantasy thing, the rape was going to happen no matter what.) and then Vinyl got jailed or something.

Just my opinion, take it for what you will.

2895817 I do still have much to work on, and I do appreciate you actually telling what you did/didn't like. The ending could have used some more work, I agree, but I was getting bored and if I tried to continue it would have had an even worse ending.

And no, I don't see this as an attack, you're just here to help and teach me a bit. Thank you for your time.

2895382 you, good sir, get a like for your picture alone, though I am jelly as well, about the sex with vinyl, not the whole hostage part

2895817 If you're interested, I've uploaded a second version of the 2nd chapter with a different ending.

Ah, here we go. This is the ending I was hoping for!

Thank you very much for the alternate.

2896904 No problem, hope you enjoyed reading :twilightsmile:

Or is it (dum dum dummmmmmmmm):pinkiecrazy:

I liked this more sensible ending better and I appreciate you writing it for our viewing pleasure. :twilightsmile:

Yeah, this is the kind of ending that I would hope for. If put in that situation, I would have done what I could to escape. Mostly out of spite.

I prefer the "original" ending.
Great story - normally i'm not into fetish and/or clopfics, but i really enjoyed this one.
Ty for your work and effort!

PS: I really liked this 2nd person style.

Well, damn. He really can't handle alcohol. Reminds me of a certain fluffy comedian.

Dude, I saw the description about how you get peeved off when people favorite without rating and I totally agree! It kinda gets on my nerves when people bother to click the favorite button and don't spend the extra two seconds hitting the other button that actually tends to get your story more views! And that detail about how to act if you dislike the story? You took the words right outta my mouth.

If I had a like for every time someone favorited my stories . . .

2897672 Yes, but what if I want to follow your story but I want to read it at a later time? Take for mind, I keep my "read later" tab mostly for completed stories.

I am NOT going to rate your story until I get to read it first. This includes up voting, down voting, or any sort of interaction until I read at least a couple of chapters. But, if a story interests me, I favor it so I can access it easier.

Now, please tell me that you understand now why many people, including myself, favor and not rate. Just because people dont rate now, doesnt mean they wont in a week or two :D Just give them time.

Yes, another Best Pony Vinyl Scratch thing! 2nd person and it's not a Goris the Deathclaw fic!
Will read later.:rainbowwild:

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I'm glad that you read my review and decided to make changes to your story. I have had instances where I have given advice on a story and have been cursed out. For example, on time I read a story that wasn't all that good and while reading the comments I saw that a couple of people were praising the author. So I left a review stating my opinion and I got bombarded hate mail by not only the author but two or three of his friends. So since then I have been careful with my comments.

(I don't want to embarrass someone unless absolutely necessary)

If you want my opinion, I can always give it good riff.

I down-voted due to the fact that the second chapter was filled with unnecessary little sentences or remarks. Also some parts of the story should have been fleshed out more such as why she needed the drug because she obviously isn't schizophrenic, maybe but it isn't very believable that she has bipolar disorder, and I highly doubt that she has depression. That being said, then how did she get her hands on some if it has to be prescribed by a doctor (I made sure by looking it up so I didn't sound stupid.), also how did nobody at the party that had people "literally all over the place!" (Your words.) seem to notice someone unconscious as Vinyl most likely had to drag him to the basement which would seem awfully suspicious.
The ending was disappointing because of the Stockholm Syndrome and made me wonder how nobody had found him since the last place he would have been seen was her home and what would have been a mysterious call about a kidnapping that was cut off. I would say more, but I feel this is more than enough to help as most of my other qualms are more personal things that bug me.

Spacecowboy
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I downvoted because of this right here:

I don't really appreciate those of you who favorite without rating. And if you leave a dislike please leave a comment as to why so I can learn for the future

You don't tell readers who are giving you their Favorite and Views that you're not appreciative of them. Fuck off why don't you?

And oh, Anthro and Rape. Downvoted for that, too.

2896791>>2898330 If I could, I'd like to try and answer some of your questions.
First getting prescription drugs is not that hard, I could go and get damn near every kind of drug under the sun, right now if I wanted to. So I can imagine that a party girl wouldn't have that hard a time finding what she needs. Second as far as "Anon " collapsing, if I were at a party being hosted by someone with Vinyl's reputation, I wouldn't think much of it. I would probably go back to getting drunk. And finally if "Anon" was reported missing and the cops came to talk to Vinyl, all she would have to say in that she hadn't seen him. They would have no reason to search the basement nor would they be allowed to without a warrant.

The story would have been better if some of these things explained in the story but I don't think that it's completely necessary to have it all included. And yes, the first chapter could be fleshed out more.

Also as far as the alt. ending is concerned I think it's a lot better than the first ending.

One final note using Stockholm Syndrome in stories generally doesn't work unless you show that the victim has been the subject of 'mental' abuse perpetrated by the captor.

2898537>>2898422 Oh bite me, the both of you.

Spacecowboy
Moderator

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You asked, so don't be surprised by what you receive. It's the truth.

... What the fuck am I reading?

No, don't answer that.

I should really stop.

*Clicks next chapter*

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FUCK YOU BRO RAPE IS AWESOMETASTIC :rainbowkiss:

but ew fucking anthro :pinkiesick:

2898757 Rape =/= not awesome. I'm just practicing writing and the metaphorical dye landed on this idea.

Rape =/= awesome, kids.

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I guess you didn't register my massive amounts of sarcasm
and the fact that i was loling at spacecow for saying rape is bad but bestiality is not

and also i just like disagreeing with spacecow cuz he's my homeboy

That is, without question, the weirdest boner I have ever had. And I'm not even done yet.

Fuck.

I can sum up this entire story in three words. And they're not "What the fuck?"

This fucking rocked.

Not a fan of the rape usually, but you found my weakness in Vinyl. Thumb up and fav. Somehow.

The Second Ending is better than the stockholm syndrome original.

Really liked the second ending, changed my vote for this story :) The first was just a "little" too grim for my taste.. it seemed shortsighted

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Yep, im done.

This is just fucked up.

"clicks next chapter"

like second ending better the first ending seemed worng to me.

I like the entire story in general, the sad thing is tho, thos shit happens irl and it often ends up as the original ending ... Not the alt ending which in my opinion is better :pinkiesmile:

I will say, this is a great clopfic but....

What I was looking in this alternate ending, was that Vinyl would be less chaotic, and that the character would say something like this.

"Vinyl, you need to let go, this is getting to far."

I'm sorry if I annoyed you or angered in any sort of way, I was just saying some criticism.

P.S. If you want to know what I mean, play video games that have a good and bad ending. :twilightblush:

And by the way, everyone calm the heck out. :ajsleepy:

We're bronys (bronies), we love and tolerate each other. :rainbowkiss:

Don't really like the way it jumped around with time there. Still, can't judge the whole thing just for that.
2898140 It doesn't have to be the same thing all the time.

2897739 ? w:rainbowhuh:hat do you mean by that?

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