I'm a human from earth who was brought to Equestria to teach Twilight Sparkle about humans the way they live and their culture. After I taught Twilight all I knew I was given the choice to stay in Equis or to go home. Being a brony I chose to stay in Equestria. Now comes my first Nightmare night in Equestria.
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Oh my Celestia.... This is awesome keep it coming! :D
2887934 Thanks
>>ApplebloomOwnsCMC Your welcome! :D
Alright to help with this I am going to highlight the wrong and correct ways of things, the wrongs will be red and the right ones will be green.
all the little fillies and colts dressed as monsters and fictional creatures(at least they were fictional on earth)
all the little fillies and colts dressed as monsters and fictional creatures (at least they were fictional on earth)
most of the stallions were wearing some kinda Dracula or wolf man costume(at least that's what they were called on earth)
most of the stallions were wearing some kinda Dracula or wolf man costume (at least that's what they were called on earth)
"Well, tonight I think ApplJack Daniels", she says stifling a laugh as she fallows along.
"Well, tonight I think AppleJack Daniels", she says stifling a laugh as she fallows along.
"Being on the moon so long one kinda gets used to loneliness. Plus I still feel like people see me as nightmare moon not Luna, and this night reminds me of what I used to be." She drinks from her glass.
"Being on the moon so long one kinda gets used to loneliness. Plus I still feel like people see me as Nightmare moon not Luna, and this night reminds me of what I used to be." She drinks from her glass.
These are just minor mistakes and I don't think people will mind these, but you might want to fix these, also these are only in chapter one I well do chapter two next.
Oh goody so here we have Molestia…nice, oh well lets hope she show some maturity when her sister tell her that she got a boyfriend
2889523 Thanks man, sorry I didn't wait till you could proof read it before posting.
Chapter two's mistakes are once again in red and the correct ones in green.
Luna sat down on the grass and patted the spot next to her signaling me to sit.I sit and put my knees to my chest.
Luna sat down on the grass and patted the spot next to her signaling me to sit. I sit and put my knees to my chest.
She has nopony to be there for to tell her its okay. That it is the past.
She has nopony to be there for her to tell her it's okay. That it is the past.
Luna and I climb one long ass spiral stair case.
Luna and I climb one long ass spiral staircase.
These were the only mistakes I have found, Keep up the good work my friend as I do enjoy proofreading your stories, So if ever need someone to read these you can count on me.
2895696 Thanks, "bromosexual" quote from Pineapple Express. Great movie.
That was a good chapter can't wait till the next one comes! :D
2899439 Soon my son. Soon.
What was that yank? Did Celestia just faint?
2901815 "Yak" As in a retching sound much like the sound of a gag.
2901956
So Celestia was doing some gag noises? What is she a 8 years old? But its was hilarious her reaction and she has no excuse she bang everything that move according to Luna, only she had one night stand, Luna got a relationship
2901976 Indeed, Celestia was making gag noises. It made me laugh so I put it in.
2899762 Ok Father.
2903959 Damn right.
Nice
I can see megan in the future
My reaction when Celestia busted in:
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WTF??
Good Story...but still...
WTF??
The fun has doubled! >:3
Uuuuuuuuhhh what happened