I'm making this little new chapter just so everyone who is tracking this story knows, the sequel is now out :)
There it is :) enjoy!
>>335751335751 many thanks glad you enjoyed it! Hope that single tear wasn't too important
>>394116394116 glad you're enjoying it! Or... not enjoying the events that are happening... Or, you know what i mean!
>>394131394131 STORY Y U MAKE MANLY TEARS SHED?!?!
EVERYPONY! I think he liked the ending!
You're everywhere I go.
>>510351510351 Quit stalking me.
>>528083528083 thnks! Glad you liked it!
>>583284583284 i guess you enjoyed the story then?
so i read your story...I thought it was good, well written, lots of emotion, but there were a few problems.]
1. TEXT WALL, break up your damn paragraphs more.
2.your grammar wasn't horrible, but it did have errors. (cahpter, id, capitalization, etc)
fix those and this story would probably get better ratings, oh and change the cover. A picture of a car photo-shopped into ponyville pushes away more readers than it brings.
good work though! just fix those things and your story should be fine.
should this story be human