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Slick Dash
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I'm making this little new chapter just so everyone who is tracking this story knows, the sequel is now out :)
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/13086/A-time-of-sadness
There it is :) enjoy!
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so i read your story...I thought it was good, well written, lots of emotion, but there were a few problems.]
1. TEXT WALL, break up your damn paragraphs more.
2.your grammar wasn't horrible, but it did have errors. (cahpter, id, capitalization, etc)
fix those and this story would probably get better ratings, oh and change the cover. A picture of a car photo-shopped into ponyville pushes away more readers than it brings.
good work though! just fix those things and your story should be fine.
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