Princess Celestia is sick, with a disease that is very unlikely to survive. She summons Twilight Sparkle to come to her deathbed, certain she's about to die. But Twilight won't let it happen, no matter what the cost. Is Twilight strong enough to save her?
CAUTION: a couple gory scenes... Not recommended for readers with a vivid imagination and weak stomach.
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Hmm. I have already seen some of these. Spelling is fine. Grammar is fine. Story telling is not bad. Build of tension is okay. I can not grasp any flaws. It's a mediocre story really. One that leaves you wondering, yet not wanting for more. By the way, what do you think of talking about yourself in third person? You should try it.
Just one REALLY, REALLY MINOR ERROR:
A small purple dragon with round spikes running down his back came out from behind a bookshelf. His green eyes wide. " You want me to find a book?"
Red: You placed a spacebar there. And you shouldn't. I... That's such a small error. It's more like a typo. Well, just remove it. Haha, sorry for that.
*Looks at the ground*
Poor Twilight.
2876569 thank you for that
I appreciate it! I will try to build up more tension as the story goes on 
"The flesh must be of a single Pegasus who's pure"
and the first pegasus twilight can thinks of that fits the description is Rainbow Dash?
3308093 Well Rainbow Dash is pure. She isn't afraid to speak out like another Pegasus
... And Rainbow Dash is the element of Loyalty, so she would be the best candidate, as::::
loyal: adjective
1. faithful to one's sovereign, government, or state: a loyal subject.
2. faithful to one's oath, commitments, or obligations: to be loyal to a vow.
3. faithful to any leader, party, or cause, or to any person or thing conceived as deserving fidelity: a loyal friend.
4. characterized by or showing faithfulness to commitments, vows, allegiance, obligations, etc.: loyal conduct.
(Direct from http://dictionary.reference.com/
So she would be best fit...
And Zecora also says "Someone close, someone daring. Someone loyal, someone caring." I dont think Fluttershy is daring.....
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Blueblood???
Celestia "Dont worry twilight i will never really leave you."
Twilight "Do you mean because a part of you will always be in my heart?"
Celestia "No i mean im an immortal goddess who is the embodiment of the sun itself and can never actually die..."
Twilight "Oh...well thats nice too..."
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Hahaha Yeah I don't think that's where the story is headed, but you can dream right?
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haha umm... okay?
I still don't know who he is... Am I supposed to? 
Ohhhhh wait... That's that's Rarity's "prince" I get it!
And Rainbow Dash likes him...? Sorry if this is common sense, but whaaat?
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You could try and stop me if you like.
However you would soon find out exactly why us changelings have fangs.
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Ummm... No thanks?
haha
And I wouldn't dream of stopping you! From... dreaming... I guess...
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OHHHHH Princess Celestia!!! I thought you meant Rainbow Dash.
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I never really understood that emoticon,
Are you trying to lick me?
Because i may or may not be into that.
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okay I will be sure to add that...? You, sir/ma'am are welcome.
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Just some helpful help from you...
When would you like me to introduce him??
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haha okay
P.S.
Nice pic...
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Empty chapter....?? What do you mean???
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yay.