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Berry Punch is a drunk, a very drunk drunk, and when Filly Services comes and takes her daughter it is up to Berry Punch and Pinkie Pie to help Berry confront her drinking, and thus her past. Will she be able to do it in the year before Berry Pinch goes up for adoption?
(Teen for drinking, swearing)
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This Concept is rather new here, can´t wait for more
I'll be happy to oblige!
I just read through it for the first time. (Even though I have been meaning to for a while now) and I think that I know what the fic (or at least Berry Punch) needs. Here is a list of ideas for you:
Berry Punch job searching
A friend/partner to help (Minuette is the usual, but anypony will do. Actually, maybe the stallion from Filly Services?)
AA meetings (those might be something that you could include at the beginning or end of each chapter)
Anyway, these are what I have for you right now. For me and my random plots, things just happen as they go. You have your own methods. Let me know if this helps you. I hope that this helps spark my own creative neurons.
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Oh hai! As to her partner, well lets just say there is a lot of pink in this fic.
AA meetings? Hmmm, I think that would give a too, well dark feel, I originally envisioned this as a more self-discovery/giving Berry background besides "drunk and has a child". As for the job, I believe I mentioned she gets some meager income, so she does have a job, however with as much debt as she does she needs to go on an adventure to the Everfree where she will bond with the main sidekick, and from there, I have no idea!
This did make me want to write more of this fic so it did help! Approximate release date, should be before monday.
AA meetings don't need to be dark. It is fairly easy to keep them feeling light. Dexter season two eventually managed it. If you keep Berry sharing and getting encouraged you could be surprised at what you can do. And AA is a pretty good way to have a character explain their background circumstances.
Reading your story helped me to deal with my blockage, so I sort of feel obligated to try to help you with yours. I also just want to help and try to be helpful to other people. It's why most people like me.
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Thanks man, I don't think I'll be able to fit an AA in the next few chapters due to the financial crisis, I don't think she will have neither time nor funds. Unless that is the treasure is real!
Uh oh,I know where this is going
Well, recently, my life has been pretty hectic, as well as writer's block and general apathy preventing me from finishing the next chapter. But, it is almost done! Thanks to each and every one of you who has read, will read, or is reading, this piece. I am so sorry for the lack of updates, but by Halloween I should think, another chapter will be up.
I like this, bring me another! *smashes cup*
It looks good so far, but it's riddled with errors. I find that detracts from the experience of reading the story.
Do you need an editor? I can help.
3687094 Care to point out what? Both Drive and Chrome aren't finding anything.
i do like the idea a bit. though your senteces tend to run on for too long.
3696888 I will begin rereading to see if I do want to change the sentence length, sometimes the long sentences broken only by the short breaths of a comma improve the mood, and help covey emotion. However, I shall double check over the next few weeks.
Wait... so was that dragon the Golden Dragon or was he just bullshitting Berry?
Well, he was in fact, a golden dragon, according to Pinkie Pie, she says there is still some sort of treasure. Who knows, if his treasure is beyond comparison, could be anything.
When is the next chapter?