The Inferno Within

Sometimes life is easy, passive. But sometimes it takes the brink of peril for a pony to realize just how far she'll go for her friends.

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NorsePony

NorsePony #1 · Feb 23rd, 2012 · 1 · ·

Some questionable word choices, a couple of typos, and that distracting hyphenation habit. But, a well-told story that earned a thumbs-up from me. Good work. : )

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TheCreativeWonderDash #2 · Jan 28th, 2018 · 1 · ·

Ahhh, I reallllly love this a lot. You definitely kept me hooked from start to finish, with how this is setup and how everything unfolds. The story telling process with Twi coming to rescue Fluttershy and her monologue with that as with her flashbacks too are brilliantly done in here with how they add and connect together in the end. It's really heartwarming too with the chills that it gives when transitioning back to the present. Twi's thought process and the interactions of everyone in here. It's so natural and feels real. I love stories on this site for how scenarios are brought to life and ones ability to get lost in that. The immense detail and the word choices are done so wonderfully.

She knew well enough to approach this subject with the utmost caution…even the wrong word phrasing could do the unthinkable and send the delicate Pegasus into a fresh deluge of tears. Equestrian bomb squad…green wire, or blue wire?

Ahh, love how that's portrayed in here and really is in tune with Twi's thought process. AND JUST, these two are sweet together with their interactions in here and the heartfelt moments of words exchanged. Reallllllllly love this

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