Lyra writes a fanfiction

I HV NO FEAR #1 · Jul 9th, 2013 · 1 · ·

well you got a laugh out of me! I feel like I should have seen this idea before, but alas I haven't. there were very few mistakes in grammar, so at least that wasn't too distracting. overall it was pretty average. Funny, but average. But hey, I've seen a lot worse. the idea combined with the writing style was solid and interesting, but it wasn't amazing or awesome or great. No offense here, but the best descriptor of this story is average. There are still things to work on here.

Flint Sparks

Flint Sparks #2 · Jul 9th, 2013 · · ·

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Well that's a satisfying review right there. I wasn't going for a masterpiece, just wanted to write something down for fun. Considering I'm new here (and some of the things I've read ) average is good. Good for now. And now matter how much I proofread, why do I keep making grammar mistakes?! I'm a college student!

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I HV NO FEAR #3 · Jul 9th, 2013 · · ·

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I guess some people just don't have it. one of my friends is terrible with grammar and spelling. No matter how many times I tell him or correct him, he never seems to get better. Some people are just born with a mind that can detect mistakes in grammar, sentence structure, and spelling. other people think in a different way. I read one of his stories once. the idea was solid, and the action was intense. He's not a bad writer by any means, but he just can't get the grammar and spelling down. I suspect the same might apply to you. Well... more so the grammar. your spelling on this story was flawless. don't worry about the grammar. Proofreaders will always catch it before it's too late. Well, the good ones at least. I guess the point that I'm trying to make here is this; you obviously have the potential to write well, and practice will make you better, but a story like this could really be helped with the inclusion of a proofreader.

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Flint Sparks #4 · Jul 9th, 2013 · · ·

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ugh, no matter how many guides I read, how many classes I take ("A" student in AP Honors English), I'm always making a mistake. I guess almost everyone has this problem without proofreaders.

CoastalSarv

CoastalSarv #5 · Jul 10th, 2013 · 1 · ·

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Simple story, but very sweet. Thanks for sharing!

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I HV NO FEAR #6 · Jul 15th, 2013 · 2 · ·

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Alright lez do dis!

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there was and she had can't both be in the sentence.

The morals each episode sought to teach colts about socializing as they grew up, like how to properly treat mares in their matriarchal society, relating them to the characters they identified onscreen.

Something seems missing in this sentence.