This is a tale of four brothers. They were separated by circumstance and now seem to lie worlds apart. Now Bosco is alone and his brothers barely ever contact him. He became a Private Military Contractor to help the family after tragedy struck. His brothers came to see him as a murderous gun-for-hire and have since all but disowned him. He has fallen to reflection of his past, of the good times and the bad. His only comfort are those memories and some precious few keepsakes. This story will bring him to his family but not in the circumstances he would want. The decisions he has made and his urge to protect his kin will perhaps push him to become something he is not. Will he fall? Will they understand one another? What in the name of hell does this have to do with ponies? Well sit down, shut up and read the !@#$ing story and you might find out! Also, no clop, nor do i intend there to be.
I'm only a new writer but I'll give you my 50 cents.
The idea is interesting and is complemented by the writing for the story as I didn't see any grammar mistakes and it painted a picture in my mind of what was happening. However, it seems like it's a bit jam packed, dialogue and all so I would suggest more spacing.
As a writer, I find that it is a well written story that targets the more mature readers due to it's dark premise.
As myself, the prologue was too dark for my tastes and it made me assume that Bosco was the individual responsible (though it was vague enough so readers couldn't be sure, so that's a good grabber).
Anyway, it's a good story (even though it's dark) and I'm curious to see where it goes.
I like this story very much and would like to see it continue.
this is a very good story so far, and can't wait for the next chapter to come out.
No human x pony clop? I like this story more already.
Nicely written and very intriguing,
I look forwards to more!
great story so far i hope you are creating more chapters
another good chapter.
can't wait for the next chapter.
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another good chapter.
can't wait for the next chapter.
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I like the story and the things in it.
However ser, you need to watch your typing. capitalized "I"s... How uncouth!
OH MY GOD THE GRAMMAR ERRORS!!!
but other than that its good i guess 
Oh and also its nice to read something with good non-stereotypical writing surrounding the subject of guns, so hard to find media where people shoot things other than other people.
It seems to be a rather predictable story so far, try to throw in more plot twists that you cant see coming
I haven't read your story, but this seems like a much better premise than it.
I must read mooooooooooooooorrrre!!!!!!!
3292613 o_o
3292253 Ok...
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Feedback seems good on this story, though. I might read it at some point.
Keep writing!
another good chapter.
Add oh my to the end of the chapter name, that'll make it 20% cooler
3342002 thats the third time I've had that suggested to me. WHY!!!!
3343030 wizard of oz reference for the win!!!
3343590 i don't wanna bat man. its been done so much its painful
This isn't ever getting updated is it