This is an imaginary story, but then, aren't they all?
In another time, and another place, the Ministry Mares hastened Equestria's road to ruin with their every move. For every problem they fixed, two sprang up in their place, and ultimately their legacy amounted to death, ruin, and hatred.
So why have the Ministry Mares returned to pristine, innocent Ponyville? The land of their happy, carefree youth no longer suits them and their memories. How can they go back to how they once were, knowing what they do?
And when the specter of war rides over the horizon, will they be too wrapped up in their personal demons to see it coming again?
(A work in progress, obviously. Don't hold back on your critiques and feedback. I may edit existing chapters in the future if I need to.)
I'm DualThrone, and I approved of this AU of an AU.
I like how this is starting!
Ooh, I'm interested in seeing where this goes.
Looks good so far
Glad to see an update on this-- Reading FoE again as kkat reposts it here is lovely, but it's nice to know I'm not the only one who aches a bit for the mane six to have another chance to fix things.
On a conceptual level, this story is intriguing enough to warrant a follow. It's an interesting way to see how things are handled by the character we love now that they have a second chance at saving their world.
I do hope that the more florid narrative style used in Refitting compared to Wake Up Time is a conscious choice. Further, I hope you continue the trend of narrative technique and word choice tailored to the main mane involved in each chapter. It's an interesting stylistic flare that's subtle, but still noticeable.
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Oh good, somebody noticed! Being the amateur that I am, I wasn't sure how well I'd be able to pull it off. My preferred writing style when writing a story from multiple viewpoints is third person limited with a narrative voice reflecting the POV character's state of mind.
Just read Chapter 1. It's neat. Mainly, it was Twilight's reaction to reawakening that got my attention. Sorta brings to mind Asylum's intro or the Happyhorns section of Project Horizons, and that bit of mind-screwy fish-out-of-water confusedness tends to be amusing for me, at least in parts and when it's not played for angst.
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I'm not sure what Asylum you're referring to, and I haven't read that far in Project Horizons yet. But I'm glad I was able to satisfy you in that regard. Please let me know what you think of the second chapter when you get to reading it.
Pretty cool so far. One thing I want to say though is either put a paragraph break after each paragraph or indent the very first line of each paragraph. Helps break up the chapter a bit, because the way I looks now is just intimidating.
You should listen to 3589495. If only to convince other commenters (like me) that making comments is worthwhile, because that advice is the only advice you will ever get in writing that is 100% correct, and yet you haven't taken it.
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I only just figured out how to fix this issue. Thanks for letting me know. It should be alright now. Sorry it took me so long.
Do you intend on finishing this, its quite the interesting idea and story
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I'm trying, but I keep getting this niggling feeling that I'm doing something wrong with this story. I might end up making edits to these two chapters before I do another.
3998724 Well, I'd be a shame to let it die as "Incomplete" as so many stories do.