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  • Shadow Of Dreams
    An inventive pony wants to fly like a pegasus but us faced with challenges other than limitations.

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Summer Sparks is a very inventive pony. For an Earth pony she is very good with her hooves and doesn't rely on magic for technology. But with all her success she still dreams of flying highwith the graceful speed of a Pegasus pony. With her newest creation, Gigatrot, she goes to Ponyville. And compared to flying, how hard could making friends be?

First Published
4th Nov 2011
Last Modified
24th Sep 2012

Comments ( 34 )

#1 · Chapter 1 · 152w, 10h ago · · ·

Hehe. I like this. I find it quite humorous, and I like that you've used the stallion counterparts to the mane 6. While it's certainly not the best in the world, it has a certain charm to it that makes me want to read more; and that's quite possibly the best thing any story can have. On another note, I prefer the CMC's counterparts as they are named in On a Cross and Arrow: Sweepy Belle, Scootaroll, and Applebuck -  but that's just me. Keep up the good work. :pinkiehappy:

Critique: Pacing - It feels a little fast paced, not to say that's a bad thing. I don't know how long you plan for this to go on, so stick to what works for you. I'm probably just overly used to reading elaborate detailed stories.

#2 · Chapter 2 · 135w, 5d ago · · ·

Hey, this! I remember reading the first chapter! I also remember wanting more - and now my thirst has been sated, albeit temporarily. Please, keep up the good work. :twilightsmile: 5/5 Tracking

#3 · Chapter 2 · 135w, 5d ago · · ·

>>158236

This means a lot. You have no idea.

#4 · Chapter 2 · 135w, 5d ago · · ·

~cocks gun~ Okay, hand over the rest of the story and nopony gets hurt. I will be able to read this story and you can go on your merry way.

#5 · Chapter 2 · 135w, 4d ago · · ·

Is this still on hiatus then?   Because the premise behind it is great, and the writings pretty solid as well, so I'm still looking forward to more chapters.  Not a big fan of the gender swap, but that doesn't hinder the story at all.

#6 · Chapter 2 · 135w, 4d ago · · ·

Okay, finally. There should be more fics about the gender swapped selves...And let me guess Rainbow Blitz and Summer right? :pinkiesmile:

#7 · Chapter 2 · 135w, 4d ago · · ·

>>160144

The only rrason its on hiatus is because of the long periods between chapters. And what I'm doing on the side. I absolutely love this story and it pains me when I can't just sit down and write it. Until next break it'll be side work.

>>160174

Yeah there should. This is a Connor Cogsworth approved story

#8 · Chapter 2 · 135w, 4d ago · · ·

>>160252

At least its still continuing. woohoo.

#9 · Chapter 2 · 133w, 2d ago · · ·

Well this was a pleasantly suprising read! Keep it coming!

#10 · Chapter 1 · 133w, 2d ago · · ·

I love how Gigatrot suddenly became her mentor, this is great!

On a side note, you seem to make callbacks to events previous to the story multiple times. To point out that they're separate  from the story, try writing those parts in italics, or some other visual marker to distinguish them

#11 · Chapter 2 · 133w, 2d ago · · ·

I visualised Dusk Shine's face upon sighting Gigatrot for the first time, and damn if it didn't make me laugh! :rainbowlaugh:

#12 · Chapter 2 · 133w, 2d ago · · ·

i like it that you changed everyponies name, Except applejack lol:ajbemused:

#13 · Chapter 1 · 133w, 2d ago · · ·

My first guess for shipping- Summer x Giga :trollestia:

#14 · Chapter 2 · 133w, 1d ago · · ·

really enjoying the story so far interesting to see a idea like this keep up the good work :pinkiehappy:

#15 · Chapter 2 · 133w, 1d ago · · ·

Off to a very good start. Using the rule 63 universe sorta threw me for a bit, but it doesn't seem to hurt the story any.

#16 · Chapter 2 · 133w, 1d ago · · ·

Is this a parallel universe where all of the ponies are gender-swapped and their names are changed? Pinkie Pie must've broken too many 4th walls...:pinkiehappy:

#17 · Chapter 2 · 133w, 1d ago · · ·

Implementing rule 63 had a negative impact on my experience for this tale, however the concepts and storylining so far has me rigged well and quickly intrigued me into this story. In other words, Cool story bro.

#18 · Chapter 2 · 132w, 4m ago · · ·

Interesting, unique and well written. I'm enjoying this a lot, can't wait for more!

But I do wonder: Is there any reason that everypony is genderswapped? Not that I mind, just curious.

#19 · Chapter 1 · 131w, 3d ago · · ·

I find this a little suspect, from a Science perspective.  These desires, feelings, and values systems would have to be coded into Gigatrot, and yet by her own admission Summer doesn't know what the coding she used actually does.  But I guess I can look past it, as it's a major device in the comic Girl Genius as well (one of my favorites).

Sorry to split hairs here.  I think you're a decent writer, with a sound setup for this story.  Keep up the good work.

#20 · Chapter 1 · 128w, 2d ago · · ·

I can't help but read Gigatrot's dialogue in the Fact Core's voice... :rainbowlaugh:

#21 · Chapter 2 · 126w, 5d ago · · ·

>>239324

None what-so-ever.

Just thought it would be fun. Listening to the Colt-versions of the songs from the show very early on when I became a brony, and it just sort of stuck with me.

>>209035

The names were made by Trotsworth on DeviantArt and Cogworth Connor*.

>>253709

I've heard this a lot. I sort of explained it in Chapter 2. It was kind of Copy > Pasted since it was her father's work! Glad someone thinks I'm a decent writer...

>>333013

I always have trouble imagining Gigatrot's voice. I had to look up the "Fact Sphere" and omg he talks fast... I think that voice is going to stick with me. "Pants. Pants. Pants. Pants. Pants. Pants. Pants. Pants." So much for my Old Radio theory.

Anyway I'm popping in. To Say.... Chapter 3 is still being made.  I swear I haven't forgotten it. (I like Summer and Gigatrot too much).:pinkiehappy:

Also next couple of chapters will be episodic and have nothing to do with the plot. I have a whole year to go through!

#22 · Chapter 2 · 126w, 5d ago · · ·

does this mean your going to update soon :pinkiehappy:

#23 · Chapter 2 · 126w, 2d ago · · ·

>>377738

I can't make any promises but I'm shooting for editing to begin in April.

#24 · Chapter 2 · 122w, 18h ago · · ·

>>388161 In 2 days it will be May:twilightsmile::pinkiehappy::yay::rainbowlaugh::trollestia::raritywink::scootangel:

#25 · Chapter 2 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

Plz update:pinkiesmile::pinkiehappy::twilightsheepish::twilightsmile::duck::raritywink::raritystarry::derpytongue2::yay::trollestia::fluttershysad:

#26 · Chapter 2 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

>>540658

so antsy! I have ponies editing it write now. Just like I said I would xD

#27 · Chapter 2 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

>>540908

well it does not mean it is here yet:coolphoto::eeyup:

#28 · Chapter 3 · 101w, 11h ago · · ·

Yay! Update at last!

Also, do I detect a Hunger Games reference?

#29 · Chapter 3 · 101w, 9h ago · · ·

>>1329864

There's a Hunger Games reference? I have not read the book or seen the movie you're going to have to explain that to me O.o>>1330088

#30 · Chapter 3 · 101w, 8h ago · · ·

>>1330089 Oh come on, it can't be a coincidence: most of the first Hunger Games book is set during the 74th Annual Hunger Games. And this is the 74th Annual Rodeo. Get it now?

#31 · Chapter 3 · 100w, 6d ago · · ·

>>1330118 :twilightsheepish:

Well this is awkward... It's a coincidence. 74 just seemed like a good number. I think the last time I went to the Macy's Day parade it was their 74th anniversary. Might have been something related to that.  But het why not. It's a hunger games reference ya got me. *poker face*

#32 · Chapter 3 · 100w, 6d ago · · ·

Wait... Which pony went to war?

(I SEE WAR HORSE REFERENCE!)

#33 · Chapter 1 · 84w, 5d ago · · ·

I feel like the description is incomplete for not mentioning that it takes place in the r63-verse.

#34 · Chapter 3 · 84w, 3d ago · · ·

>>1964938

I can see that but a description of the story doesn't have to detail every character's gender, or even how it's relative to the story to mention that this is a 63 universe. I normally don't like tags but there is one listed as "Alternate Universe".

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