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Stories (5)

  • Going Different Ways
    Princess Twilight can't get to sleep but Applejack comes to keep her company

    2,706 words · 1,489 views · 72 likes · 4 dislikes
  • Can't You See What You Mean To Me
    After Applejack looses her sight she finds comfort in a meak kind pegasus
    4,231 words · 1,104 views · 53 likes · 4 dislikes
  • Ah'll Kidnap Ya Heart
    Applejack's infatuation for Rainbow Dash leads to an unconscious pegasus tied to a chair
    5,340 words · 2,416 views · 79 likes · 11 dislikes
  • Can I Hold You?
    Rainbow Dash sneaks into Applejack's room one night to watch her sleep.
    2,435 words · 771 views · 46 likes · 10 dislikes
  • The Grass is Really Green
    4,119 words · 191 views · 10 likes · 2 dislikes

After an incident causes Applejack to lose her eyesight, she's stuck in a rut trying to figure out what to do with her life. The only friend that's there for her non stop is Fluttershy, and the two grow closer to each other because of this. But what will come of this new bond? Romance or just despair. Will Applejack ever come around to accepting her handicap?

First Published
4th Jul 2013
Last Modified
4th Jul 2013

Comments ( 33 )

#1 · 58w, 6d ago · · ·

By any chance you have seen the M*A*S*H episode, Out of Sight, Out of Mind?

#2 · 58w, 6d ago · · ·

>>2822911 No. But the blind thing has been used on a number of other shows I've watched.:twilightsmile:

#4 · 58w, 5d ago · · ·
#5 · 58w, 5d ago · · ·

Oh and yasturo, what the he'll is your freaking profile pic because I think it just scared me for life, that's nasty.:fluttershbad:

#6 · 58w, 5d ago · · ·

>>2824509 Applejack being speared with a Triangular Ruler.

:twilightsmile:

(And yes, I like Applejack, but I also like Grimdark.)

#8 · 58w, 5d ago · · ·

>>2825870

No, you're not. But that story isn't this story, is it?

#9 · 58w, 5d ago · · ·

>>2825981   But it's WAY too similar!

#10 · 58w, 5d ago · 1 · ·

Oh my god, Applejack's friends are complete, ballmunching dicks. Seriously, what the heck? Are they they that confident they'll fix her eyes? I'd understand the jokes and teasing if she broke her pelvis while doing a tango, but this?

#11 · 58w, 5d ago · 1 · ·

>>2825995

'Shut the Blinds' had Dash rescue Flutters, and get blinded by dragon fire. Her friends are supportive throughout, and feelings bloom between Twi and Dash. This story, Applejack gets zapped in the face in a freak lab accident, no heroics or anything. Her friends are complete asshats about it, and feelings will bloom Between AJ and Flutters. I don't see the similarity, other than the blindness. By that logic, all shipfics are clones because they all have two characters in a relationship. Sometimes three. Sometimes six.

#12 · 58w, 5d ago · · ·

>>2826024   I was only going on the description and the cover art for each story.  If I didn't know better, I'd say this is a parody to StB.

#13 · 58w, 5d ago · · ·

>>2825127 well it's really creepy, I personally think Apple Jack is cool but you picture makes her look like a hairless cat that's dieing of starvation.:ajbemused:

No offence.:fluttershysad:

#14 · 58w, 5d ago · · ·

>>2825870 I didn't know about that story, I only got the idea from TV shows like Desperate Housewives and Neighbors. But stuff like this is bound to be repeated by mistake. I actually looked up online to see if there was already a blind pony story and could only find a 1,000 word one on fanfiction about Rarity. But you could say that it's copying to do a zombie pony fic because someone has done one, or one of the mane six being changlings (which has been done several times) I'm afraid that hardly anything hasn't been done so there would always be stories with similar core themes by accident:twilightsmile:

#15 · 58w, 5d ago · · ·

>>2827190

1. I was only going on the description and the cover art for each story.

2. Why why do you like Applejack so much?

#16 · 58w, 5d ago · 1 · ·

>>2827330 because she is AWESOME, nuff' said.

She's just my favourite character in the show and in my top 5 favourite characters of all time along side Norman (Paranorman) Chris (Stand By Me) Marty Mc Fly (BTTF) and Link (Legend of Zelda)

I could give a million reasons why she is so awesome but I'll narrow it down to this.

She has the morality of Jesus Christ. She'll try to never let you down. She has a fun sense of humour. She's had the hardest life (death of her parents) but still always tries to look on the positive. She's honest, kind, loyal and I find writing about her is the hardest out of the others (because she's so complex to me) but also the most rewarding. If she was real I'd want her to be my best friend. She's the type of person I aim to be.

Does that answer your question? :ajsmug:

#17 · 58w, 5d ago · · ·

>>2827449

1.

She has the morality of Jesus Christ.

I can't say that you're right on that first one.  She has flaws.

2.

She's had the hardest life

We don't know much about the past of each of the Mane 6.

3.

Does that answer your question?

Yes

4. You for got about this:

5. This should go nicely as a cover art to a future story:

#18 · 58w, 5d ago · · ·

>>2827571 Whatevs, Applejack is my messiah!:scootangel: I've met very few people in real life who are like her, and thinking about it I can only think of one who comes to mind- who I had a total crush on. But you think I'm bad with my Applejack praise, you should see my Marty Mc Fly stuff (He was my first fictional crush)

And I know she has flaws, but they just aren't strong enough to go against her:twilightsmile:

So leave me be.

Or I'll get Applejack to buck some sense into you:ajsmug:

#19 · 58w, 5d ago · · ·

>>2827598

1.  I never meant to insult you.

2. Do you mean Marty from the movies, game, or show?

#20 · 58w, 5d ago · · ·

>>2827619 Movies and games, and no you didn't insult:twilightsmile:

#21 · 58w, 5d ago · · ·

>>2827872   Alright, then.  I have to go now, I have stuff to do.

#22 · 58w, 5d ago · · ·

>>2825870 I know it ;D

#23 · 58w, 4d ago · · ·

love the story so far and with AJ being my favorite it really gets at you :ajsleepy: keep it up though can't wait to see more. :ajsmug:

#24 · 58w, 4d ago · · ·

>>2825870 that picture looks vageuly familiar. what's the story called?:rainbowhuh:

#25 · 58w, 2d ago · · ·

>>2832377.  Shut the Blinds.  

#26 · 58w, 22h ago · · ·

>>2842186 every time I read any of your comments, I chuckle to myself, picturing Bain saying everything you say. . . . . nice profile pic there :rainbowlaugh: :rainbowlaugh:

#27 · 58w, 18h ago · · ·

>>2850553   *Bane

#28 · 57w, 5d ago · · ·

Having written a story about a character going blind (though only temporarily) myself, and also having a generally receptive stance toward Appleshy, I am intrigued by the premise.

I do hope in future chapters you use the blindness to experiment with focusing on the other four senses in your descriptive prose. It makes for excellent writing exercise, really gets you to challenge yourself in describing a scene.

Some of the other commenters have mentioned it already, but AJ's friends do seem unusually insensitive about all this, especially Rainbow Dash and Pinkie Pie. Pinkie's behavior could almost be explained as her aiming for a 'laughter is the best medicine' sort of thing and not quite getting that she's overdoing it, but Rainbow was being just uncharacteristically nasty at some points.

I'll be interested to see what you do with this.

On a side note, in regards to [This comment >>2827190], I wonder how you went about searching for other pony stories with blindness in them, because I would have thought mine would have come up in such a search...

#29 · 57w, 5d ago · · ·

>>2862612 I just searched in Google "Pony Blind Stories" and looked at what come up in the first page. I'm sure there's tonnes of Pony blind stories, but that doesn't really bother me. I just love the idea of blindness and would've written about a character going blind no matter what. And yes, I will try to incorporate the other 4 senses into the story.:pinkiehappy:

#30 · 55w, 1d ago · · ·

im not shore if its been said in earlier comments (too many for me to bother reading) but this reminds me of a raitwi story where twilight becomes bind, also do to a magical mishap

i forgot what it is called i find it very good

#31 · 52w, 3d ago · · ·

so, just wondering, I have been dying to know what happens since I first favored this, but I think it has been about a month since I read this, I do not mean to sound impatient but when is the next chapter, I am dying to figure out what will happen, but it has been so long :fluttershysad:

#32 · 34w, 5d ago · · ·

I am evil, couldnt stop laughing at all the things Pinkie said. I know it is wrong to laugh about it but COME ONE it was hilairious :rainbowlaugh: jajajaja

I wonder if theres going to be a next chapter, I really want to "see" whats next jejeje

#33 · 27w, 4d ago · · ·

Why did best pony go blind? Why u do Dis? :'(

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