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MissSeddieSunshine


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Fluttershy is a shy socially awkward adorkable Pegasus. Dashie is an outspoken, out-going loyal flyer. Can they get along when they are put as room mates in Cloudsdale High Boarding School?
One writes a diary, the other a journal. (Teenage problems & Flutterdash Hinted. Each entry shall have "doodles" In it to make it represent a teenagers diary)

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 45 )

Salutations, good sire. I have read this first chapter, and noticed your pleas for an editor. I'd be willing to offer my services, as well as a like and favorite. You have my best for this story, and I shall do my best to help.

Thank you for your time,

Signed, -Prisoner 24601

Short, but it is Rainbow Dash.
Final opinion once chapter two read.

Hmm. Has good potential, if somewhat short. In any case, will follow this. It looks good. :twilightsmile:

Well that's an interesting concept. I'll read the rest before writing my advice

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-Smiles- Oh eep! That made me smile quite wide! Thank you very much, It means a lot to me. They are quite short, but they shall be updated oftern throughout summer, and the pictures themselves take a bit of time. I just needed a thousand words to publish, and I decided that the introductions could be quite short. I am thinking that there will be volumes of this. There shall be so many chapters in their diaries in a year, but I'm not sure yet.
Thank you for making me smile! -huggles-

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Well hello there! ^^ For now I have just this second gotten an editor who is a mod from the Flutterdash Page here, But thank you so much for your help! But they asked if they could first. I would still really love you to give me all the advice you can. It's so kind of you to do that ^^
And when you said Good sire, did you think I was a male, or was that just an expression? ^^ Only because I'm female but that shouldn't really matter anyway. You made me smile quite wide! ^^

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Oh thank you so much! Please do give me all the constructive crit you can ^^
This shall be updated quite rapidly over summer, I can only improve by having help!

Thank you all for your time! ^^ It means so much!

Lots of potential for heart-stopping, adorable antics. Faved and followed. :yay::heart::rainbowkiss:

Well this has great potential. I dont think ive ever read a Fltterdash story that is set from jornal point of view. Also... pictures are a nice touch :scootangel:

Characterization is spot on so far :rainbowwild::yay: and makes me look forward to more.

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Oh thank you so very much! That made me smile so very wide and made me feel quite happy! Thank you for the encouraging words! <3

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Oh thank you so much! -huggles-
It means a lot to me that you think I have got them in character, I was worrying about that since it comes from a diary point of view! Oh, Thank you so much! -smiles-

I would like to say thank you to every comment I have gotten so far <3 They all mean so much to me, If they are just a nice comment, or a comment that will help me improve in the long run ^^
Thank you all! <3

Before you ask, this isn’t some soppy diary. This is a journal.

Diary of a Wimpy Kid much? :P In fact:

One day, when I’m signing autographs for my fans, they are going to be asking questions like “Were you just a normal Filly at somepoint?” To which I am going to nod and give them a copy of this epic Journal.

:ajbemused:

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I Actually must confess that I have never read the diary of a whimpy Kid, Nor have I actually watched the movies with him in, although I would like to. But you are close, This idea was based on another diary that I do, which is one of my OC's. Which I actually got the inspiration from "Dork Diaries" Which is, as it's said, the girl version of diary of a whimpy Kid. I liked the idea of a diary that has doodles in it, but thats honestly *all* the inspiration I got from that. Wanting to doodle out a diary. I am assuming that someone in the whimpy kid diary must say something along to what I made Dashie say, But honestly that's the only reason I could think of her writing in a diary. For one day when she is on tour with the wonder-bolts. Or at-least that's what she would think.

However, If it does bother you, my goal in life is to make people smile. If something is not making you smile then I have a problem with that. Could you please tell me what parts of this are like the diary of a whimpy Kid so I may change them?

It's cute. I'll be following it closely :3

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Awe! ^^
Thank you very much! It means a lot to me that you wanted to watch this story! ^^
You have made me smile quite wide, Thank you for helping me smile! ^^ <3
I twas a little down today and all the comments here have brightened my day up ^^

For now im loving it ^^ but im hoping to see some flutterdash :yay::heart::rainbowwild:

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Thank you for such kind words! That made me smile!
Oh do not worry. Plenty of Flutterdash Is on it's way!
Although it won't happen straight away. There will be a lot of dragging this out.
But the journey is half of a good fanfic right? ^^
Expect adorable moments between Fluttershy & Dashie in their teenage years ^^
:heart: ^^

Very much like Diary of a Wimpy Kid, good start though.

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Can you please do me a favor and tell me which parts are like it?
I have never read it, but another person has stated it too, And I would like to change it so it isn't like it.
But I don't know which bits are, so I messaged the other person with the same question but he/she went offline. I understand if its too much trouble but if you could, It really would help me in the long run! ^^
Thank you anyway even if its too much trouble!

I demand more of this!
And your farmlands!
And throw in a few chickens or something, whatever makes you happy.
Oh, and some cookies would be nice.

Is this after both Dash and Fluttershy have their cutie-marks because I'd like to see and reunion of sorts.

how old are they here? for the way they write, they seem pretty young...do they have their cutie marks already?

You know that's Diary of a Wimpy Kid, right? :applejackunsure: It's illegal to take someone else's work and copy it almost verbatim if you're going to make money off of it, I hope.

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The scene where Dash is saying that one day she will be famous and handing out autographs and selling her diary as an autobiography/bestseller is very similar to the opener of DoaWK, where the main character frequently mentions how he will one day be famous, sign autographs, and sell his diary journal as an autobiography. Also, they both are very insistent on it not being a sissy diary but a journal.

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Seriously? Did you actually read the story? Yes, chapter one is similar to DoaWK. Dash also has a very similar personality type to Greg. Chapter two, from Fluttershy's diary, is nothing like DoaWK. Dash's part I expect to quickly become divergent. Plagiarism is perhaps the worst thing you can accuse an author of, it's not something you can just throw around lightly. :unsuresweetie:

I would like everypony to please calm down as I have listened to all your comments and read them, and I would also like to thank the people who told me what is similar, and what they would like to be changed.

I was not aware it was like diary of a whimpy kid.
Eaither way, I shall be changing the first chapter: I am currently doodling out new pictures, and altering the idea of why she wants to write. A journal. Not so she can become famous, but so that one day she might give a copy to the wonderbolts and they might see how awesome she truly is.

Secondly, I would like to keep dashes as a journal, or a notebook. Simply because I don't think she would want to call it a diary.

Anyway, I am fixing everything now. ^^

I really enjoyed this keep it up, you made Fluttershy so cute I just want to give her a big hug!

Awesome. cant wait to find out wht happens
:derpytongue2: Derpy luvs chu.

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Ages aren't canon.
Except that Fluttershy is older than Pinkie.
That's all we know.

It's off to a pretty good start. One question, though: why would Dash be on a train if they're in Cloudsdale?

When will a new chapter be coming out :raritydespair:

Hello there all! Please read ^^. I listened to what I have been told about the first chapter being similar, and I have re-wrote it. Although I would like Dash to still call her diary a journal.
But the reason for her having a diary and other stuff has changed. I think it's better the way I have re-wrote it to.

As for when the next chapter shall be out, I have both new entries written. Yes, it will be a reunion- not a first meet. They are fourteen here (in human years) and haven't seen each other for a year since they went to flight camp together.

I have to doodle everything for it, as well as re-doodle the first chapter, so please be patient! It shall be up as soon as it can once the doodles have been doodled ^^
:heart::heart::heart:

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have you read diary of a wimpy kid
its just coz some of the quotes are similar to the book
no offence :pinkiesmile:

I enjoyed this! Please do continue.

It has been forever, please update

Plz update.

I really like this story. And others do too. So please update it. PLEASE!

PLEASE UPDATE! IM CRYING WITH ALL THE SUSPENSE!!!!! :rainbowhuh::fluttercry::rainbowhuh::fluttercry::rainbowhuh::fluttercry::rainbowhuh::fluttercry::rainbowhuh::fluttercry:

I read these quite some time ago, I came back just now hoping there would be more. I really enjoyed how it started and would love if it was updated:fluttercry:

I can not wait for the next part. Maybe Rainbow comes in and fluttershy is kind of nervous. She can show herself around the room, just making herself at home while fluttershy quietly observes. I dunno I am not the best author. Like I said I am looking forward for more.

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