Hmm intresting track? Possible potential time to see where this goes

This has good potential, I like it save for a few spelling errors. Also, try not to state exactly what's happening verbatim. "Show, don't tell." A phenomenal example of that is "Number One", take some hints from it's writing style and conversations, and apply them to your story.

sorry this chapter took so long, not only did I get writers block, the past few months have been really busy for me. Sorry about this takeing so long I'm going to start updateing more. Again sorry for the wait.

yay another chapter!!!!! Wait......what? PINKAMENA KILLING PONIES WHO WOULD EVER THINK THAT SHE WOULD DO TH- just kidding. For some reason Pinkamena is always the killer in stories.

But anyway heres a hint about what next storry will be about.

  My next story will be another Flutterdash story!!!!!!!!!

yay!!!!!! Finally finshed it!!!!