A guy who did pony stuff at one point.
Rainbow Dash never knew how effective the Equestrian postal service was until she did something wrong. Something you should never do wrong. Something anypony should get help with if they're unsure about it. Something like... taxes.
Spanish Translation by SPANIARD KIWI: https://www.deviantart.com/spaniard-kiwi/art/El-error-en-el-formulario-1000352470
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Heh, that wasn't bad at all.
I liked it.
~Skeeter The Lurker
Tempted to dislike it for an incomplete chapter title. I think it'd be better if it was You Dun Goofed... But that's just me.
Oh god. Oh no.
Hilarious idea. I'll be back once this is read.
Silly, Dash. Just file an appended tax return. Problem solved.
It was alright.
Not much else to add.
Based on the true story of when Alex forgot to do his taxes.
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I literally kicked down the door to the White House to get my tax forms back, and Obama was cool with it so the FBI didn't beat me up.
Noticed some clunky storytelling stuff throughout, mostly in description (so and so did something in something, the athlete, the grey mare, etc) aka the stuff we moon for :V, but I feel like you did a pretty good job with the narrative evoking Dash's sense of hurry. The dialogue also felt nice throughout, so you might consider focusing on it more, or styling the description to match Dash's internal thoughts, pulling the camera closer, making it feel more like her story, rather than just a story about her.
I was a bit confused as to how Dash's suddenly realized she'd 'misfiled' her taxes though. Dash doesn't seem very astute with numbers or forms - did she recall she forgot to carry a one, or just that she didn't attach a document somewhere? The former would probably have been an even more hilarious jumping off point for the premise... it would have also given a better ending, where an accountant could have simply blotted something with white-out and let Dash off with her lesson learned, rather than crushing her with unhappy news.
Good take on the prompt, and with some humourous execution. Lemme know if you wanna polish it up for the site and I'd be happy to go over it a few times.
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Terror.
I admit I didn't put as much effort into this as I normally do, whether it be because I haven't written anything in like, a month+, or because I was just rushing it because I'm bad at doing things on time, so I was expecting some problems like these. (Fuck, did I actually use "the grey mare"? Ouch.)
As far as how she realizes it, it was sorta intended as a "just roll with it" kinda thing. At least, that's what made me feel better about it. I'm sure with a bit of thinking I could add a real reason in there.
But hey, I'm glad I did okay with the dialogue! I feel like characterization is one of my strong points, so dialogue is a pretty big deal when it comes to that. Now I just need to work on the other stuff.
2784025 Are you trying to be the new Regidar or something? So much first!
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Not at all, actually. The first's have simply been a side effect.
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Go for it. What's the worst that can happen?
~Skeeter The Lurker
Uhh...
Nothing to see here. Moving on.
Hmm... well, characterization was strong enough to keep the story moving, and the different angles of descriptions, from inferred by reaction to direct, were a nice touch. The punchline was a bit flat for my taste, but it only took me 3000 words to get to it, so it's not a drastic flaw per se. It's all around decent.
This story is so dumb I feel dumber for having read it. >V:
SO DUMB LOOK AT MY EMOTICON WHAT IS THAT GARBAGE
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An excellent review! I believe I've seen your work on Xbox live...
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Yo this is literally my dumbest fic.
I accomplished my goal.
Rainbow, that's something I'd expect from Twilight.
2852387 Over other things, certainly. I doubt Twilight has ever misfiled her taxes. She probably spends several days over them, trying to figure out what counts as a deduction and what doesn't.
The premise is so stupid, and yet this is...well written.
You have to be really good at writing to take a premise that's stupid no matter how you look at it and still make it work. For that, you get a fave and an upvote.
I know entire wars were fought and continents reformed since this was made, but
Should be alicorn, because
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Huh. I didn't even realize I wrote this post-alicorn. Thanks for catching that.
3500 bits?
has nothing to say on this subject.
Rainbow, you're officially fucked.
This is quite possibly the Worst Possible THING!!!
Goddamn it Rainbow, you've really fucked up now...
Dog bone, rock, microwave. It could be ANYTHING!
Huh. Instead of laughing, all I can really do is sit here and feel bad for Rainbow Dash.
Long live 20% cooler!
JUSTKIDDINGTHATMEMESUCKS