>>Brony4ever To me, that kinda sounds like asking for permission to make a "Human is transported to Equestria and turned into a pony" kind of fic, and we know there are dozens of them around and no one asks anyone if they can write them. Or all the Appledash, Octascratch and what have you shipping - There's even more of those, and no one complains as long as they are somewhat varied.

I like this more than Ballad of Echo by the way. Definitely waiting to see more.

I'm liking this. Waiting for more!

>>226070226070

You made a good point,never the less its really good, great introduction.

It's good, theres nothing wrong with it, but..it just feels like a copy of The Ballad of Echo the Diamond Dog.

Apart from that, it's a good story! I guess you could give credit in description though..

>>226260226260 >>226079226079 My friend (Who is actually named Lisp on steam, how I met him) suggested this story to me, and we began writing.  I admit to have been reading the amazing story that is The Ballad of Echo the Diamond Dog, which is one of 2 reason I am a DD.  1st, I used to be a wolf-furry (minus the yiff).  2nd, he makes it seem so BA.  And the credit will be given, I couldn't respond sooner due to the fact of school.

Gave the story credit for helping my decision, but my friend was also yelling at me to be it.  (Lisp is a furry/brony, explains why he pushed me into it.)

>>226070226070 Glad to see you think so.  Site is being crap right now, so forced to write on a Googledoc

Whenever a new character starts talking you make a new paragraph. Typically a single paragraph will be detailing a single character. Well, typically. Anyway, this is interesting enough albeit the blocks of text make it a difficult read. Work on paragraph formatting and this will become a lot more accessible!

>>228455228455 Keep forgetting that, still a new writer.  

>>228802228802

Don't you have pony square or something?

>>228827228827 My turn to be the confused one?

Discord? Maybe you should of been a bit smarter but I guess you didn't know it was him. Oh if you didn't learn this from this fiction don't let strangers make choices for you, it's generally a bad idea.

>>229615229615 I chose to humor him, so I thought he was joking.

>>229715229715 Well I'm sure we found it hilarious.

>>229751229751 Heh, just wait until I end up meeting Bumble, and when he finds out that Octavia was tagged already...

By tagged do you mean spray painted?

>>229810229810 By tagged I mean the pony who tagged her basically said "Don't tank that flank."  Bumble...Well, see you in the afterlife...That is if I don't end up in a fight or having to endure Heat with the lot of you.

Wait hold on a second... *contnects the dots*...wait...wha...WHAT...HOLY FREAKING MOTHER OF GOD!

>>229830229830 Eeyup...The way that everypony that is female acts around Bumble, I'd bet another wave of Heat is coming.  I plan on gaining a weapon as soon as I develop a mastery of my claws.

>>229844229844 How claws that different to hands?

P.s Thank you have given me a joke for my HiE fiction.

>>229851229851 The claws come from my...Guess DD's have fingertips

You get Rarity to give you a manicure then.

>>229873229873 Pfft, that whiny mare?  Wonder if anyone would be mad if I 'accidentally' cut a rope during a concert, dropping something onto her...

Well it depends what you mean if accidentally did it i'm sure you would be forgiven. If you 'accidentally' did it not so much. Also what would drop onto her a tone of feathers, bricks, butter, dildos wait forget I said that.

SO AWESOME!

>>230220230220 Just wait till the next chapter.  Need Brony4ever to talk with me so I can get some basic ideas together for the next chapter.  

Yeah brony4ever is either going to laugh his ass off or become amazingly pissed off.

>>230515230515 Right now it's a little bit of both.  Just wait a bit for a twist.

Ok, but I can't understand her lisp very well.

>>232768232768 Lisp is...Odd.  He does what he wants and gets away with it.  Just keep waiting for the next chapter to find out my payback.

You do relise that talking about twist, appleblooms friend?

>>232821232821 You make me so hard sometimes.  Then I laugh about it, and then I harder.

Okay. I have the effect of enriching people's life with laughter or atleast I try I don't even know if i'm funny.

As much as I still really like this story, that drawing... Something is really, REALLY off in it. It might scare people away from reading I think.

>>235219235219 Heh, my friend isn't exactly the best artist, but she took the time to do it.  Which was two days, so I won't complain.  Let me know what exactly is off in it and I could try to modify it.

Sorry for it being a little short, but I do have to work with what my good friend Brony4ever has.

Yes you do...good tension though.

If you want to make it  longer add more description.

>>239394239394 Maybe...Maybe.

>>239420239420 confluzzed.

>>239439239439 Just wait for more...

okay?

Ahaha...I love games, even if Rainbow dash is dead...or is she?

Okay interesting chapter.

>>244954244954 You haven't read anything yet...

>>246522246522 He guessed that's what it was

>>246668246668 mWaht?

>>247043247043 Read snuff

>>247659247659 NO I think i'll read stuff instead.

>>250622250622 Well, if you want an action packed take on some of this (Most of it's to the exact storyline, but XeRom enhanced it.) read this.

XeRom's take

Trust me, this is boss.

Who is Bumble? And what evil side?

>>251998251998 Read the story under your account called Another Chance, it will clear it up.

coolios.

I like it.

YOU GAIN THE MASTER'S SEAL OF APPROVAL!

And, it should be noted, that everyone here is copying someone else's idea when they write fanfiction.  You can't really copy what's already copied, can you?  It's like...  "copyception."  

KEEP IT UP, SIR!  KEEP UP, I SAY!

>>255762255762 Wow, now I know how Noakwolf felt. It always helps when you crossover with a special forces fanfiction

Every post is a repost of a repost.

Also cool Special Forces fanfic guy right here. <<

Shameless advertising.

>>256100256100 Yes, the almighty CSF shall not be unforgotten for their part in this story...But watch out for what happens next, will leave even the princess confused....

Hmm, intresting.

The great and powerful first?

I'm guessing that Bumble will not have presence in this story.

>>258869258869 Sadly, due to the story being cancelled, XeRom and I decided that Bumble met the same end. Read CSF: Celestian Special Forces for what happened.

>>259106259106 I would rather not read about Bumble dying THANK YOU.

>>259124259124 Disappeared. Meaning Bumble may or may not appear. If I decide to bring Bumble back, I know EXACTLY how to do it.

>>259164259164 I still stand by descion .

>>259174259174 Hey, there are plenty of things Zin missed out on that Spade clears up. I actually talking to XeRom about Bumble in the next few minutes, as he went AFK as I posted this comment.

>>259201259201 I;m not going to read the story, end of.

>>259216259216 Fine, but you are the one missing action.

>>259697259697 I find the idea of killing off Bumble offensive to brony4ever's memory, that is why I will not read it.

>>259712259712 We have been discussing on ways to BRING BUMBLE BACK. AKA, not going to let a char with that history go that easily. Brony was my friend too.

>>259719259719 You do that what you do on that story is not important to me, if I choose to read it, it would due the crossover with this story.

Get down with the sickness.

I say: Bravo!

I can has magic power?

>>270398270398 You can't, but I can.

>>270579270579 Fine, I'll just have to use my Pinkie Pie launcher.

>>270584270584 Why would you want magic when you have that?

>>270586270586 Because Pinkie Pie requires cupcakes to have surficent energy and magic is helpful with that but oh well, now where do you live? I'm planning a nuclear Pinkie Pie strike.

>>270589270589 Hmm, hard to say where I am when I teleportaled away. Now if you excuse me, I have to plan my revenge on the Rainbow Factory. I blame them for Bumble's disappearance.

>>270594270594 I'll set it too detect mutt then.

>>270596270596 Now, that's offensive. Ever heard of a spell that stops tracking? Maybe I shouldn't have spent so much time with Twilight, I am becoming an egghead

>>270605270605 Science verses magic, well thats a no brainer, they can't effect each others that is impossible plus I already know where you are...

>>270619270619 Oh really? I just teleportaled again. Are you confuzzled?

>>270626270626 Nope i'm mad you stole my word...Plus I wouldn't worry about me, it's Pinkie. Don't forget you are trying to hide from a multi-dimesional diety.

>>270631270631 Are we talking about Pinkie here? She has only broke the fourth wall a few times. The real pony I am hiding from is Celestia, for she will most likely send Spade or Shadow to come collect me.

>>270640270640 I can only dream...about nothing, what are we even talking about? He live in a completely different universe to these ponies in all fairness.

>>270642270642 Uhhhhh....Wanna go destroy the Rainbow Factory? It will be fun

>>270646270646 What I can't fly...or even walk on clouds even if I where to fire my Pinkie Pie launcher at it then the _SYSTEM32:ERROR_PINKIEMEANA_

would occur and then I would be eaten alive so unless you have a plan I think I going to have to pass.

>>270655270655 Magic, derp. Twilight had a spell that enabled her friends to be up there, so why can't I? Now are you in or out? *Loads his enchanted AK-47, M9, and fire knife onto his battlepack*

>>270656270656 Umm...I just had a rap battle with my friend...but I don't know how you want me to help.

>>270659270659 You make the distraction while I shoot ponies up, what more do you want?

>>270661270661 SO you want me their so that I would get shot at whilst you kill everyone?

>>270671270671 No, you use the Pinkie launcher to destroy the machine and we escape with all the fillies and colts.

We shall be the new heroes of Equestria!

>>270674270674 Unless you didn't understand attempting to use the Pinkie Pie launcher would end up with the Pinkiemeania error and we would die painfully, we need a better plan like throwing cheese at them.

>>270677270677 Hmm...What if I gave you a dual bladed staff? Would that suit your murderous needs?

>>270681270681 What? I don't have muderous needs, really the only thing I need is malteasers in my life...

BOOMSHAKALAKA!  

Excellent work, sir.  My figurative top hat goes off to you!

...I really need to get one of those.

>>271873271873 I am sure Rarity has plenty of them. Glad you like it, now see the mustache of awesomeness

>>271977271977 Do you have a mustache in real life?

>>278042278042 Maybe I do, maybe I don't...

>>278478278478 You should look aat your face or feel it, that should give your answer.

>>278893278893 In that case, yes I do.

>>278935278935 Well good for you!