Rarity is well practiced in patience nowadays...
She is waiting.
-Rarijack-
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Could use a bit more spacing, a few minor misspell errors, but I like how you worked this so far. Almost cliffhanger like, with the giving of small tidbits of info, but leaving others out. I will hope to see more.
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Many thanks for the comment. I'm glad you like it so far and I'll be sure to continue this soon
I think I have an idea of what's going on. Seems really good, looking forward to more.
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Thank you for the comment and the favourite.
I'm glad you like it.
..So, before you continue.. even though I don't predict movement or pattern of a fiction. Perhaps, you will add background as to what started the war?
I knew it was a war! Good chapter, but Lucas is right, it would be nice to see more back story told in the form of flashbacks.
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Don't worry, that will all come soon, I assure you.
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Backstory will certainly be on it's way in future chapters.
Um, sorry but how should we read the accompanying story.
As in should we read this then read the other (Consecutive Updates, In Sync updates)
Or, should we read this to the end then read the accompanying?
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My apologies for not explaining properly.
They should be read at the same time, though this one will be considerably shorter and so the other should continue on after it. The ending will likely occur on this story after the other is finished.
I hope that makes sense. Do let me know if it doesn't and I'll try to clarify as best I can.
This needs to be continued!
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My apologies for taking so long to get back to you but thank you very much for your support. I'd love to continue this and I hope in the future I am able to. This is one of my more ambitious projects but with a fresh interest in both writing and pony, I hope to return to this one eventually.
Thank you again!
So Applejack and Rainbow are off to war?
Very well written; the description is sparse but effective, and a tangible sense of exhaustion pervades the piece. I hope Applejack gets home okay...
Oh, and there are more chapters! Excellent!
Well, that escalated quickly!
A minor edit could be used here: 'She'll keeping waiting as long as she must.' should either be 'She'll keep waiting as long as she must.' or 'She'll keep on waiting as long as she must.'
And also, a semicolon could be used here: 'She waits a while longer, lost in thought, then she makes her way down the street towards her boutique; after all, those influx of orders she got this morning aren't going to fill themselves...'
Other than that, this story doesn't seem to have many issues, at a glance.