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LDSocrates


Just another writer that aims to entertain. Nothing to see here, move along. Though yes, I am very feminist. Don't like it? That's nice.

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Instead of landing in the Badlands after the failed changeling coup in Canterlot, Chrysalis awakes in the Everfree, under the care of a certain zebra. She's in no shape to fly or use magic, so she'll have to tolerate her annoying caretaker... for now. But sooner or later, she'll have to leave to regroup with her subjects, and she can't afford to leave any witnesses breathing.

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Comments ( 37 )

That romance tag... it interests me.

A Zecora that rhymes well without coming across as forced? Sign me up. This is a cool premise, and I want to see where it goes next.

I've always found Zecora to be an annoying character. She rhymes, but unlike in poetry where you are allowed to be vague to fit your rhyme, she has to be literal, which leads to words that don't actually rhyme, improper syllable numbering, and many other issues. While this fic isn't devoid of such, you are managing to keep it in check quite well. Good job.

How a romance will develop from this intrigues me so. I must keep reading so I may know.
Actually, that rhyme came as an accident. I'm doing my best not to think right now so I don't rhyme again. Good story!

ok so
a. i fucking love zecora. always have.
b. holy shit a very well written zecora,that right there is god damned impressive. and a pleasure to read.
c. chryslis is best villain and also fantastically done.
if these two end up shipped i may have to die of happy.
upvoted faved and following. please PLEASE keep being awesome.

fuck me you wrote in the pale moonlight as well!!??! you will undoubtedly continue to impress.

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Then stick around, grab some cider! :pinkiehappy: Not that cider, that's my special cider. :trixieshiftright:

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Hope I don't disappoint! :pinkiehappy:

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I admit, never been much of a poet. I think my minor tone deafness has kept me from really "getting" things like stressed and unstressed syllables. I'll try my best with Zecora, though. :twilightsmile:

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No, I have no idea where this came from or why this was drawn. :rainbowhuh:

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Keep yourself alive until it's done. :rainbowlaugh: And you're far too kind. :twilightblush: Yes I did write In the Pale Moonlight. After the last chapter is posted, this'll be my main romantic project.

2773009 I am impressed someone took the time to say that in a picture. Drawing Zecora is one thing but that is really great,

2773009 i am not being to kind. i am stupidly picky about my favorite charecters. they are luna,zecora and rarity. you have made some great stuff here. and you also do not want to know the lengths i had to go to to get the zecora figure and all three of the luna's. yes im that big a fanboy. i eagerly await more. and i hope my storys are even half as good as yours when i get them up.

Did this update and then un-update? It's at the top of my updated fics list...

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Yeah; I pressed the wrong button before I'd even written anything. :twilightoops: Goddamn thing. It'll be formally updated tomorrow.

once again i am absurdly pleased with your zecora. and the slow build to her cracking chrysalis's carapace as it were. once again i eagerly await more and fail to regret adding a favorite to this tale. though as i said previously if you actually ship these two it may well kill me with happy.

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At least someone does. Thanks to my little mistake, nobody read this chapter. :applecry: Though Zecora doesn't get much time on the show, I see her like I write her here: intelligent, kind, though a bit sly and sassy when she wants to be. As far as Chrysalis goes, I don't intend to fully compromise her villain status like most romance stories do. Any other things you like? :twilightsmile:

2799287 i really like your take on chrysalis's world view and her attitudes and philosophy on her food source. the fact that its not based on anger at her forced expulsion is refreshing to read. the fact that she practically pitys the pretty little ponys is awesome.

your take on chrysalis's physiology is nice as well. not fully comprising her villian status as you mentioned would be a refreshing change and quite a challenge, i look forward to seeing how that unfolds. as i practically gushed before your view on zecora matches my own so good on ya there. the slow paceing is also a good thing,far to many ship fics race to the finish in my humble and reads far to many ship fics opinion.

and the banter between the two is amazing,well thought out and intelligent,also a bit of a rarity with most villains being represented as rather one dimensional.
hope that helps a bit. i eagerly await more dear author.

now this... is going to be interesting. loved the history as well.

This didn't appear in my inbox for some reason. Whatever, got it now.

Damn cliffhangers, always right when things are about to get really good.

Wow, ponies suck at research when it comes to anything but their own kind, don't they? For a culture based on harmony, they're surprisingly close-minded pricks sometimes.

You know, if all this talk on mind rape, torture (that Chrysalis implies she has plenty of experience in doing), and mass murder keeps on happening I think you should slap a Dark tag on this. Shit, both parties (changelings and ponies) are pretty damn bloody.

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Thank ye! And thanks again for being such a good commenter. :pinkiehappy:

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Friendship is Magic. It says nothing about horrible xenophobia. :trollestia:

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You know, I probably should, though to be fair the more you think about the series' mythos, the more you realize that the show should have a Dark tag. :twilightoops:

2808332 heh. no problem. but trust me soon enough you'll see my cutiemark tattoo and tag name shiver think dear god again he comments and block me.:pinkiehappy:

You made that history,pretty damn good.
Why,does it have to end so fast?
I should read slow...didn't work.

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Kinda doubt it. :rainbowlaugh: I'm usually a friendly guy - unless politics get involved. Then again, throwing politics into anything is like tossing a lamb in a den of wolves when it comes to the internet. :trixieshiftright:

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I accidentally clicked "publish" instead of "edit" one time when the second chapter wasn't finished yet. :twilightoops:

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I actually counted the syllables several times to figure out if that was haiku or something. :rainbowhuh: Well played. :rainbowderp:

A few minor hiccups here and there, the 'rhythm', "Speaking with your children is well and good, but sometimes you need to speak with someone outside your brood." was the only massive problem I had, that line is almost offensively bad. but they're few and far between so I can forgive them.

I really like it so far, I love it when it's a slow build up to cracking a character like Chrysalis' shell, and having it be Zecora, another 'outsider' type character along with one of my favorites, makes it even better. I look forward to future chapters.

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Yeah, that one line just... ugh, I tried reworking it over and over again and couldn't come up with anything. :ajsleepy: As for the rhythm, as I've said before, not especially talented at poetry and have been diagnosed with minor tone deafness. I still try my best though. :twilightsmile:

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That's impressive, I can hear just fine and I can't rhythm half that well. Really looking forward to more.

Well, yeah, except that one time, but still, I’ll keep the other girls in line!”

Careful Applebloom, you may have been hanging out with Zecora too much.

Well, your set up isn't bad, though Chrysalis seems almost suicidal in her urge to repeatedly talk about how she does bad things to her caretaker and some of Zecora's rhymes grate a little (though most of them aren't bad).

ive said it before and ill say it again.
fuckin love this story, thanx for brightening my day dear author.

Well, this has to be the most crackiest crackship ever cracked open in any story I've read so far. And I love crackships, they're like crack to me.
AND it is also well written. I like your writing style, and I really like the slow story development, none of that instant-fall-in-love-lets-kiss-business.
Although I am currently pondering whether or not to start lobbying for a happy ending, I shall be very excited for more. And probably should stop experimenting with the English language.

Huh. Good crack. Well, that's a nice surprise.

I like the detail of Zecora having to stop and think of a rhyme from time to time.

I love stories like this one, interesting, original and... romance? I have NO freakin clue, how you will push Zecora and the Big Bag Bugpony into romance. Thumbs up. :twistnerd:

Awesome story, This is gonna be good once Chrysalis opens up a bit more. Can't wait for the next chapter.

This story is really fun. It's not the first "injured changeling being nursed back to health by their enemy" story that I've read, but it's got the makings of a good one. One thing I'd wonder about more is Zecora's motivation. Sure, she can say she's just being good, but what she's doing is perhaps putting hundreds of ponies in danger. I have to wonder if she has some hidden safeguard or motivation.

I look forward to reading the next chapter. :twilightsmile:

"Я не был!" Scootaloo раздраженно. «Кроме того, вещь о кустах была глупой идеей Свити».

«Это все время работает на телевидении», проворчала Свити, обводя контуры копыта на мосту.

it was necessary to use a cardboard box instead of a bush. :D. -Solid Snake

Me as I read the story: Wow! This is really well written and the pairing tickles my crackship bone.

*Sees the date of release of the last chapter*

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