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Everything Dark and Grim1,789 stories ·932 members

"Loyal Until Death"

"People like me, we don't have a place. You do Princess. All I ever wanted was to protect you."

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mikemeiers

mikemeiers #1 · Jun 27th, 2013 · 1 · ·

Well I liked it. As a very quick one-shot that explains its self in 1,000 words, it does its job, it does it well in fact. The only problem I have with this story is the grammar/spelling errors. If you are going to continue writing (which I hope you will), I suggest you get a pre-reader or editor. Just someone to look over the words and flow of the story. Keep it up.

Comment posted by thesilentpony deleted Jun 27th, 2013

MatthewAndrews

MatthewAndrews #3 · Jun 27th, 2013 · · ·

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To clear things up, the guard at the beginning was the colt Celestia saved only in the future.
It was the "end at the beginning" sort of thing. The flashback part hasn't started, since I doubt anyone remembers there youth that well.
Hope I cleared any confusion c:

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