The idea (in the intro) looks interesting ... but the grammar and some of the words being misspelled is what's stopping me from truly appreciating this fic...

I think the 'alternate universe' tag should be added. It seems interesting but I'm not too crazy about first person perspective.

This one looks promising.

This is a really interesting idea and I think I could have a lot of fun reading it but just as >>TheMyth said, the spelling and grammar errors are keeping me from fully enjoying this. Never the less, this looks like it will be a good read and I look forward to further chapters.

This looks as a promising fanfic, there's a nice idea behind it, but some of the grammar errors make it annoying to read. You should get a pre-reader that would help you with your writing. Sadly, I'm not the right guy for that job, but I'm sure it's not that hard to find someone if you ask around.

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Don't worry i have found a Proof reader.

The idea intrigues me. I think what you have written is good, albeit with a few typos but I have somewhat of an inner grammar nazi. I'll give you a track but I'm also going to have high expectations.