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After a mishap with sabotaging a reactor core on a Corpus ship, Sonic Boom and her team had to go into cryo to survive. Where did they wake up? You guessed it, a world of talking ponies. Sonic Boom, Sub Zero (original name right?), Nano Spark, and Rock Raider now have to prevent the Grineer, Corpus, and Infestation from wiping out the population and taking their power to use against each other and the Tenno

So, this is my 2nd try (1st try wasn't going anywhere). Judge me however you feel is appropriate. Constructive criticism, don't hate please, I know I have a bad sense of humor. Enjoy, or suffer, whichever one comes up 1st. Posting as teen for the whole killing thing. Likely will upgrade to mature later.

So, i was curious what would come up on google, and I found this:
Warfrane: weaponized wubs (chapter 1)
Good job to WaywardRadio on your first read.

Chapters (9)
Comments ( 22 )

make the chapters longer please:pinkiehappy:

2784499 I was planning to start doing that after the wake up calls for the team. I will also have more content per chapter. the intro and Sabotage were just there to set a base of the characters. So yes, I will make the chapters longer.

Huh, so I wasn't the first to think of a Warframe crossover. Sweet.

Awesome. I only just learned of Warframe recently, it looks like an amazing game.:derpytongue2:

Oh boy, The Stalker and friends.

Yeah, Lotus really needs better scanners..
Lotus: "My scanners detect no further life forms on this vessel"
*10 seconds later*
Me: *Runs into more enemies* "ARE YOU FUCKING KIDDING ME?!"

I find your lack of volt... disturbing :ajbemused:

Good Story but the chapters needs to be a little bit large. :pinkiesmile:

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Then you'll be happy to know, my other partly written story has Nekros, Trinity, Volt, and Nova :scootangel:

3536138 Volt owns all the warframes! <---- Proud Volt User :rainbowdetermined2:

3536138 if you add an pervy ember or an Insane one to the mix I'll love you (no homo) forever and ever. :pinkiehappy:

I never suspected I might find Warframe/MLP crossover... Too bad it's on hiatus, but well...

Time for me to dive in!

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If you check my profile, you should find a WF group.
There's a few more stories and its where I found a clan.
All heil Sadisticnerd; the guy who got me an active clan.

4200564 I'm in Asuro since Closed Beta, so I'm not really looking for a clan right now. Though I'd join the group when on my PC, even for the fics only :)

Have like+fav, maybe it'll make next chapters come out sooner :P

on Haitus? meh, that's just a temporary hold. I will read this, and enjoy. I so far found only three Warframe crossovers I may like, and this is one.

Good luck, Tenno. I will see you in the fields of battle some day.

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Welp, I'm caught up now. So far, I like Nano. His personality reminds me of me, trying to sneak up on whoever, just to make them jump.

Time to play the waiting game, I will not hesitate to read the next chapter when I notice it comes out.

The Grineer want the artifacts power

Needs to have an apostrophe at the end, should be artifacts' instead.

Then there is Corpus, the high tech, and slightly lazy scavagers.

"the high tech" is an awkward description and needs to be worded better, and "scavagers" should be "scavengers."

Those are known has ancients, some have powerful regeneration abilities, whereas some can drain a warframe's energy and shield.

Should be "Those are known as ancients. Some have powerful regeneration abilities, while others can drain a warframe's energy and shields."

Now, enough about my enemies, how about I tell you about my team.

Awkward sentence. Could be worded as "Enough about my enemies. My team, the Tenno..." but that's a guideline, not what needs to be put there.

My team of four, including myself, comprises of a Rhino...

Wrong tense. Should be "is comprised of," not "comprises of."

~Nitpicking from Your loving Discord~

"The MOAs are easy, it's the leaches I'd love to see gone"

Should be "leeches," not "leaches." There should also be a comma at the end of that dialogue.

"Guys, we've got a job to do, so let's just get to it" I chimed in. "Nano, check out what kind of resistance we've got"

Good grief, I checked ahead and realised the chapter is full of this. Needs to have a comma at the end of the first bit of dialogue and a period at the end of the second bit.

"On it." He said, turning invisible.

Here's another example of bad dialogue practices. Comma, not apostrophe, at the end of that dialogue, and the H in 'he' should not be capitalised. Don't ever do that unless it's a question mark, an exclamation mark or the word following the dialogue is a proper noun.

"Well then, this'll be an easy one. There are 3 crewmen with prods and about 5 or 6 shockwave MOAs."

That's another no-no. Don't put numbers in your writing as numbers unless it's a big long number like five thousand seven hundred and forty-three. Write it out in words instead.

Can't be arsed nitpicking this story any further. Get yourself an editor.

If I remember correctly, the Frost Warframe is colder than space. So wouldn't that mean anything within a certain distance would be cold?

Subtle fighter's respect I like it. I have yet to see someone use this in fan fic before, if that's what you were going for anyway.

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Oh right... plot armor...got it

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