You bastard. I cried manly tears at tears at the ending.
Well then. Nice to know Spike is around a quarter of a pervert as the average male on the internet.
This is so messed up..... Yet so awesome.
This is just my opinion, but y'know what this needs? An alternate ending. Preferably splitting off after chapter 3, where maybe Twilight catches on to Spike's odd behavior and they have a really complicated talk about it all to figure out how to solve this problem, leading to a happy end. Or at least happier than this.
>>80338033 You mean a wussy ending?? :P ...tell you what, I'll think about writing one. I won't promise an ending that's all candy and rainbows, I'm not even promising I'll write one at all, but if something comes to me...
>>80368036 I agree. Some people are hatin' on the grimdark aspect, which really only comes in at chapter four, i think. Spring for a somewhat happy ending, and everyone'll be happy. Also, add a link in to the altered ending at the top of chapter four, and warn that the ending below is grimdark, and nobody can complain.
Holy sweet Luna.. goddammit Spike. Why'd you go and do that? ;w; but I loved the story. Well written. Definately and easily one of my favorites.
Not sure if I should be mentally traumatized by pure disgust or if I should be crying horribly.
Huh. I read the comments and thought it was really bad, but then I read it and it wasn't that extreme at all XD
And wow, that probably means I'm really desensitized and have been on the Internet too long :) Anyway, you should never be afraid to write what you want :p
Reading this makes me wish there was an alt ending.
Wow I can't believe Twilight didn't feel anything. She must've been enjoying it and pretended to stay asleep
I wouldn't so much want an alt ending as much as an epilogue following Ch 4's events. Just curious to see how everyone else took it. Especially Applejack who was last seen furious and probably planning on beating the crap out of him.
totally agree with metaxzero, it would be great if there was an epilogue
by the way just love the way you describe everything on the most "disturbing" scenes, makes them feel lively (don't really know if I'm using the right term for this), and I really got high expectations on you as writer
this is the kind of story with the car wreck logic
the "worse" it gets the harder it is to look away
keep up the grat work
>>86178617 I much appreciate it sir!! An epilogue is an idea that does intrigue me, a lot more than the alt-ending everypony keeps clamoring for. People should know how the others reacted and what happened in the following days. School is pretty busy for me right now and I'm busy conceptualizing my third fic, but I might have to make some time to write an epilogue. Thanks for the idea metaxzero, and thanks to you as well Gsbrill!!
I look forward to the epilogue I hope you write. It's an opportunity to flesh out your characters more on their feelings for life in Ponyville. For instance, not that you feel the same way, but I don't feel as though Twilight has the kind of personality to move on from something like this.
It may very well halt her emotional growth and leave here in a permanent stage of self-pity and blame for what has happened.
Hope to read you interpretation!
Not the friendship report I was expecting... This is Equestria, where ponies and dragons talk out their problems...
Imma cry now...
The only thing I can bring up is pretty asinine, but Twilight's screaming "Oh my God" doesn't really make sense, you know?
My feelings on this story
the epilouge would be an excellent touch. :)
The Ending Reminded Me Of School Days Don't Ask Why
So I read this, all the way through, and I think, "Yeah, that's sad, but it didn't really hit me that hard."
2 hours later I still feel depressed and all I can think about is Twilight sobbing uncontrollably. Y-Y And then I cried. I also want to add my vote for, yes, we need some sort of follow up to this. Especially as regards how this effects AJ and Twilight's relationship.
Ah. You took the epilogue idea eh? You're welcome for the idea.
Can't wait to read it!
Although i did not have a single boner throughout the entire fic, MANLY TEARS WEAR SHED MAN.
You're story was amazing, it was more psychological then smut (to me anyway) and i think you did a good job. would like an epilogue.
thedood64. That sounds like it would shift the tone of the whole fic into a dark and sadistic comedy or just an anti-Spike fic. An epilogue could do the same thing without beating Spike further. Unless what you want is Spike getting kicked when he is down more then the reactions of everyone else to Spike's actions.
When I read, “SPIKE!! WHAT IN TARNATION ARE Y’ALL DOIN’ TUH MY DOG?!?!?!”
I wasn't that impacted by the ending perhaps because of the lol that broke the tension for me, and I read a comment that spoiled the story.
Interesting read regardless.
Is it wrong that I got aroused by this?
Somehow I as soon as I saw the title I knew I would regret reading this... But the description, the title, and the comments make it so horrifically compelling that I must!
LIKE A BAWS
I like the whole grimdark genre, but I just wish that the ending wasn't so abrupt. I'd've liked to have had the characters figure out why spike suicided, and come to terms with his problem.
Wow. That's all I really can say as a reaction. That and "Dang." Excellent story. Ending was spoiled on another site for me too but I just had to read it. Kinda sad that Spike died considering he's one of my two favorite characters but since it's just a story and not real I'm not super sad. 5/5 from me for emotional-ness and great writing
An epilogue is being made dealing with how the other characters viewed Spike's suicide and his actions before then. Just letting you know.
>>78667866 well if woud be funny of you made an Alt ending, in where applejack dit not showup.and spike thinking that he got waywith it...but then fines out that Winona is pregnant ehehehe
: F* yeah!
YOU KNOW, IDEA! maybe insted of doing an alt. ending or somethin like that... you can make an epilouge of something btwn twilight and applejack...maybe even rarity. twilight must make applejack feel sad
The manly tears, they have flowed.
I hate your guts for this....i hope you die. That being said, the story was amazing. Not many stories make me an emotional train wreck. Keep up the good work.
You have no idea how much I loved your comment!
This was the 2nd fanfic that has ever made me cry.
I've never cried for something except pony fanfic named "My Little Dashie".
Spike is my favorite character, he reminds me... of me...
Great work on it... Even if it was one of those weird clopfics....
when i fist read chapter 1
i was like ahh man Spike don't
then the end of chapter 1
i was like it kind of dose Spike
then in chapter 3
i was like don't think of Sweetie Belle that way
then in chapter 4
i was like OH HELL NO you better not be going to see Granny Smith
but when i fond out what happen to spike i was like: oh god no spike
>>4325143251 have you ever read the story "A Summer Twilight" that is one sad story.
Well this was .. Interesting.. But still though , Spike being the only dragon in ponyville , I feel sorry for the little guy.
oh lulz the ending....I laughed and felt sick at the thought
when I read chapter 4 and instantly read winoa, I pretty much TeaL DeeR'd it all the way to the ending which was to say half-assed. I call Rewrite.