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Twilight floated a second fritter up to her mouth when she realized the first was gone. “What is in these things?” “Mostly love. Love ‘n about three sticks of butter.”

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Applejack has brushed her mane, put a ribbon on her hat, and there's a sway in her step. Most ponies just want to know who the special pony is.

Rainbow Dash doesn't buy it. Love is mushy, and AJ isn't mushy. Love means liking somepony more than her friends, and AJ would never like another pony more than Dash. Love means missing a game of horseshoes to go tell a pony that she's in love with them, and if there is one thing Dash is sure of, it's that AJ is not going to miss that game... no matter what Applejack thinks about it.

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Well, yet another welcome AppleDash. Nice story as always!

I'm starting to wonder if I'm ever going to be as productive as you are, pal. :ajsleepy: Good story, like usual from you.

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If you start a hundred projects, you're bound to finish one or two. :ajsmug:

This was fun to read. Really fun.

Seeing Dash panic like that... Nicely done.

~Skeeter The Lurker

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That's it. You win. I can't beat this. Nope. It's over. I gave it a good run, but you were better.

In all seriousness, this was AMAZING! The characters, the situation, I never would have thought to do this is contest in Dash's POV. She was such in character, it's amazing. I love love love it.

I'm not counting myself out, but if you do win I will not be surprised.

Ehehehehehe! :pinkiehappy: Oh man, I am so going to lose now.

That was seriously at least 100 kinds of awesome. :rainbowkiss:

I think Rainbow's imagination scene and the confession were my favorite parts. Applejack felt spot on the entire time.

I love the feed. It tells me when my favorite authors post stories! Then I get to read them :pinkiegasp: and laugh :rainbowlaugh: and cry :fluttercry: and tell the author how much I like them :heart:

To wit: I really enjoyed this story. Thanks for another happy little read! :yay:

Light and laughter,
SongCoyote

2963909 That's super not true at all :D

Yup... definitely a changeling :trollestia:

In all seriousness, I laughed the whole way through. Your RD is perfect

*deeeep breath*
DAAAAWWWWWWWW :applejackunsure:

How kin you be so adorable even when we all know how it's gonna come out?

I swear it makes a pony want to swear off naughty and git real deep into mushy :ajsmug:

This was a great story for sure, however as far as having AJ be the chaser I have to say AJ was a chaser, Rainbow Dash just didn't realize what she wanted.

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I think it's safely within the rules. Dash's delusional little world keeps her safe from mushy stuff until AJ beats her over the head. :ajsmug:

Its 1 In the darn morning. Ill read it in 8 hours...... When im not constantly yawning.

I couldnt stop thinking about the unread appledash. Haunting me. So i went nocturnal and read it.

And that. Was godly, that was perfect, in every. Single. Way.

As obvious as the whole plot was, it was expertly executed. I could easily (and quite happily) see this featured on EQD. :twilightsmile:

This story was AWESOME!!!!!!!!:rainbowkiss:

2964083 great, now I can't make a comment, because you already said everything I was going to.

This. This was adorable. Like, if I was allergic to cute I'd be pushing up daisies right now. It really felt like an episode of the show (y'know, if they were ever going to go into the whole crush between two girls thing). Some of Dash's conclusions and her ridiculous (yet in character) panic were hilarious, as was Twilight and Rarity's little sidebar going on throughout. So yeah, thanks fro another lovely story. :twilightsmile:

I think jealousy and love go hand-in-hand.
Still, I think the degree of obsessiveness RD displays is out of proportion.

Very Very Cute Appledash.
Glad Dash learned her lesson about upsetting AJ on purpose.
:ajsmug: :heart: :rainbowkiss:

That was....
SO AWESOME!

Wonderfully executed in true Bookplayer fashion. :ajsmug:

Very, very good. I loved it. :)

:fluttercry: You sir (or ma'am) have done something that not a lot of stories can do; and that's make me cry. At that spot where RD sees AJ crying and she realizes that it's her fault, that just brought on the feels. I cared for these characters so much. And I give this story a plus for 1. making me cry, 2. being a cute Appledash story, and 3. Giving me something to read whilst I wait for University Days chap 21.
This is a nicely written and cute story with two of my favorite mane six ponies.
Just one tinsy tiny itty bitty little nit pick.
"Dash’s did her best to rewrite every thought she’d had in the past twelve hours."
yeahhhhhh.
Anywho, great story ^^

hehe funny and cute :pinkiehappy: me like

This was great. The only thing I didn't like was that I thought the two scenes between Applejack and Rainbow felt a tiny bit rushed to me, but not excessively so, just like there could have been about 4 more lines of dialog in each scene in between the beginning and the revelation.

But really, this was good. I'm gonna go add the rest of your stuff to my read laters. :twilightsmile:

A nice AppleDash fiction, with some fluff and a good overall moral. I really enjoyed that considering I never did care for the two being paired up, even with their similarities.

You nailed Rainbow Dash down perfectly, I commend you there as most of her thoughts and lines felt like things she would say.

Overall, nice work! :twilightsmile:

wait a second......in never stop smiling pinkie died before aj and rd got together.....:rainbowhuh::applejackunsure:

Le me trying to find this story after hearing about it.
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2965926 ....is pinkie teaching flutters to give a BJ?

Seeing as this is for a contest, I'm rather hoping you'd win. I love how RD is written, and how closer to canon her personality is - and I'm sure there's a subtle jab at the whole "ship RD with everything" precedent in the fandom, by having her be the clueless one. Laughed a couple of times, the whole thing was very feel-good, and the moral just brought it all together. I honestly can't think of anything that might improve it; very solid piece, and thank you for the read.

This story is 50% sweet, 50% awesome and 50% hilarious.

That's 150%, motherfbucker!

(And it's strangely adorable how Rainbow keeps obsessing about the horseshoe thing.)

I seriously think this is the most Rainbow Dash fanfic I have ever read. :rainbowderp:

Now we're just waiting for Tchernobog to show up...

AVJ

Wow, Rainbow has the density of a fucking dying sun

This was so drippingly sweet it would've given Pinkie Pie diabetes. Loved it!

Also, Rainbow Dash's thought process was most amusing. Got a good chuckle out of it

*sighs*:fluttershysad:

This would've been so much better if you had tried to keep the ending a surprise. Maybe tried to make the reader think that Applejack really was going on a date with some strange pony whom Dash had never met. The tags really ruined this.

I don't have words to describe how awesome and totally "not mushy" this was. I'm just... I'll just HNNNGGG
:heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart:

:moustache: It was cute how RB as just freaking out a bit over he whole thing and wouldn't step outta her Rainbow Dash way of looking at things.:rainbowkiss:

Okay, you got a snort or two out of me. Plus, RD's obliviousness fit her so perfectly.
Not much else to say. it's 1 AM. Why am I even still up?
because ponies, that's why

That was beyond adorable. I just love oblivious Dash. :ajsmug:

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Believe me, the entries are read within minutes of posting. I just don't comment on them until after the contest. This post doesn't count as it's just an answer to you :rainbowwild:

Looking back, the only thing I don't like about this story is the title. It's kinda bland and doesn't really fit the concept - Dash does end up having to apologize but that's not really the central theme of the story. I almost passed this one up because the title didn't do anything for me, and that would have been a tragedy.

I'd have gone with something about horseshoes, myself.

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Tags schmags, you can easily tell it's Dash just from the subtext. The suspense here is in the fact that she just doesn't get it, not that AJ might actually be in love with someone else.

Also, not all stories need a surprise twist. The story isn't "ruined" just because we can figure out how it's going to end.

Adorable! And Dash's general obliviousness seems like a good fit. :applejackunsure::rainbowkiss:

That was a very cute story I loved it :pinkiehappy: Also what RD did was so Rainbow Dashish, perfect, well done. :twilightsmile:

Made me a bit feely and had a good chuckle here and there. Goodjob! :pinkiehappy:

This was an adorable, feel-good story. First, kudos on the story summary, as that's what drew me in and I feel like summaries can be difficult to draft. It was obvious that Dash had feelings for AJ and that AJ would end up asking out Dash, of course, but that didn't matter. The suspense wasn't in "Who does AJ like?" but in "How much will RD screw up before she makes amends?" Rainbow Dash's entire presentation here was lovely, I thought, self-centered but not too much, oblivious, stubborn, etc. The constant referring back to horseshoes, as a shorthand for "Applejack wouldn't stop caring about me," was an especially nice touch. I really liked that, in the end, Dash ended up apologizing and making amends before finding out just who AJ fancies--I think it would have almost felt like Dash didn't actually deserve AJ if it hadn't happened that way. The moral at the end gave the story an overall show-like feel, too, which isn't something I encounter much in romance stories but seemed very fitting. The story's just as much about friendship as it is about romance, after all.

In terms of criticism, anything I'd have to offer is so minor that I'd feel churlish to mention it. I think perhaps the overall pacing could have been slowed down just a tad and that it might've been nice to have it take just a bit longer for Rainbow to do the turn-around from Must Stop AJ From Confessting to Oh No AJ Is Crying I Should Apologize, but I really do think that's on the nitpicky side of things.

Thanks for writing and for sharing this, and good luck in the contest!

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