Color Scheme was just a lonely old filly, working her days away at her mother's art shop until HE showed up. She hadn't seen him around before, but she knew it was love at first sight. She practically CANTERED to the counter to talk to him, and she was sure she looked like a fool, but she didn't care a bit...
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I find this to be very well-executed. You have first-person emotion nailed. Now I might not be a big fan of stories consisting entirely of OCs, but I'm tracking this one just because I think it's good. The first chapter might be just a liiiittle bit short for my taste, but you have me interested. I might have counted one or two spelling errors (vauge should be vague) but other than that, I like it. Looking forward to more!
I'm very glad you commented. I changed vague, added a new chapter, struggled through a bout of writer's block, and should get my butt moving to make another chapter soon. I enjoy ALL comments and suggestions from readers and heavily promote them. I think that I might move the rating up to teen or adult in the next few chapters if nopony minds...
Finally...
READ ON!!!!!!!!
Two screaming fillies wildly weaved, webbing nets of woe in their paths. Holy shit this is a good sentence, fun to read like a tongue twister.
Sir/madam... please, continue.
Hehehehehehe thank you my faux friend... I was inspired by the story Alliteration. The title says it all.
Sorry, the end of this chapter sounded a little vague. I'm editing.
2 updates in One day? You have have made this terrible day bearable! Thank you
I'm glad you're happy. What seems to be the problem?
Sorry for the cheesiest, shortest chapter you ever read, but I had to have SOMETHING other than boring ol' love, and friend drama was the perfect thing. I didn't go on because it all sounded dreadfully cheesy to me. (So much I blush to think that REAL PEOPLE will ACTUALLY read THIS!)
