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I take up a new job at bartending. Well...Not really new to me, I've done this before, but this place seems like it'll have a lot more story to it. Guess only time will tell...

EDIT:

Uhh...First four chapters are really choppy, but the rest are written recently- when I'm not shit- and are where the story really is. Enjoy!

First Published
2nd Jun 2013
Last Modified
17th Jan 2014
#1 · 72w, 2d ago · 1 · · First day ·

Ok wow this started out great,I like the speed of things,and this is written very well :twilightblush: but don't you think  that you could make the chapters longer ? :trixieshiftright: even just by a tiny bit ?

#2 · 72w, 2d ago · · · First day ·

>>2667154

Actually, this IS the slightly extended version. I promise that the chapters will be much longer than this. think of this chapter as...An introduction. Two things though, one thanks for your compliment and criticism. And two...totally digging you picture. Should I make the second chapter now? ^_^

#3 · 72w, 2d ago · 1 · · First day ·

I'll like this. Very much. I mean, he's just working at a bar. What could go wrong? :pinkiecrazy:

But, this seems like it will become an excellent story! Keep working on it :twilightsmile:

#4 · 72w, 2d ago · 1 · · First day ·

This has some great potential, can't wait to see more!  Also, great to see you writing again, I was wondering when you would get back to it.

#5 · 72w, 2d ago · 1 · · Lack of a Melody ·

>>2667631

Thank you very much for the encouragement. Chapter 2 is up and that's where it really gets started. Enjoy!!

#6 · 72w, 1d ago · · · Lack of a Melody ·

I *really* like where this went. Just a good-willed barhorse doing his damnedest to give out "high spirits" so to speak.

The bartender is just a really cool character. Really down to earth. And smart too! "I'm sure if you saw it half full..." :derpyderp1: whoa...

Right when Vinyl was entranced by Octavia kinda got me too. :fluttercry:

Oh, and would hoves play a cello methodically, or effortlessly?

#7 · 72w, 1d ago · · · Lack of a Melody ·

>>2668650>>2668650

First off..Thanks for the comment. ^_~ It's nice to know that I wrote some deep stuff in there, I was beginning to fear it was just some...wannabe stuff. The part I thought was the coolest waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaas....

She takes it in for a moment, surely she has to know quite a few names like myself. She then tips her hoof over her hair, like she would if she wore a hat. "Vinyl." She gives me a wink and walks back on the stadium. I don't mind that the gentle music stops for now, and instead the bar is whisked by a subtle conversation. I go across the bar, letting them have their privacy.

I thought that showed a lot of his character. Just a real, down to earth dude. and to answer your question...Methodically? Effortlessly? Neither; confidently.

#8 · 72w, 1d ago · 1 · · Lack of a Melody ·

Really interesting Story so far, I can't wait to see how it coninues!

#9 · 72w, 1d ago · 1 · · Lack of a Melody ·

>>2670457

Thanks for the review! ^_^

You guys gotta continue encouraging the story though, otherwise I'll think it lost it's staying power. ;p

#10 · 72w, 1d ago · · · Lack of a Melody ·

Well this did certainly get interesting :pinkiehappy: but I have to remind you that you just did an act of cruelty that Manny other authors do....a CLIFFHANGER *thunder* :flutterrage: :flutterrage: :fluttershbad: :fluttershysad: …………:pinkiecrazy:

#11 · 72w, 1d ago · · · Lack of a Melody ·

>>2670958

Yeah, get used to that. Every chapter of this series is gonna have a cliffhanger. lol

#12 · 72w, 1d ago · · · Lack of a Melody ·

>>2670968 ...........:pinkiecrazy: *a sound similar to a cello string that snapped could be heard*

#13 · 72w, 1d ago · 1 · · Lack of a Melody ·

>>2670979

Oh boy. Relax, I'll be posting chapters very regularly. XD So it won't be THAT bad.

#14 · 72w, 1d ago · · · Lack of a Melody ·

Awsomesauce :twilightsmile:

#15 · 72w, 1d ago · · · Lack of a Melody ·

>>2670995

Speaking of....Time to get on 3. Come back in a few hours. ;p

#16 · 72w, 1d ago · · · Lack of a Melody ·

Pizza sauce!!!!! :pinkiehappy:

#17 · 72w, 1d ago · · · Lack of a Melody ·

It has been a few hours. I do not see any changes.

#18 · 72w, 1d ago · · · Lack of a Melody ·

>>2671796

I was just taking a break D; Fine, I'll go into overdrive >:C

#19 · 72w, 1d ago · · · Lack of a Melody ·

>>2671802 :rainbowlaugh: Poor you.

But take your time. As they say, quality over quantity!

"They" are jerks.

#20 · 72w, 1d ago · · · Lack of a Melody ·

>>2671828

i'm trying ya know. Having twenty tabs open, music playing, and peeps demanding for another chapter doesn't help my concentration. Need more orange juice! Alright, I'll go finish.

#21 · 72w, 1d ago · · · Lack of a Melody ·

>>2671849 Twenty tabs?

Your computer must be going slow.

>>2671864

THERE! Now let me rest. lol

>>2672124

God damnit just read it and be content. D:

First! ...Oh, wait...:unsuresweetie:

>>2672290

Technically..You kind of are the first, but whatevs. lol...Hope you enjoyed it though. ^_~

I was actually planning to whore myself out to peeps and ask you guys promote my story, but you know what? Fuck that. If this thing is going to get popular, it's gotta be by myself giving more of an effort in the story itself. I'll get to work on chapter 4! >:)

>>2677539 Whoa... that's admirable as hell....

PROMOTING 'TILL THE END!!! :derpytongue2:

Edit: Ooh! More content!

I'm wondering if I should leave this one on a real cock sucker cliffhanger or not...Hehe ;]]]]

#30 · 71w, 6d ago · · · Mr. B and the 3 ·

Poor B... Poor Mr. B! :fluttercry:

I'm enjoying the life-lesson theme here.

#31 · 71w, 6d ago · 1 · · Mr. B and the 3 ·

>>2678875

Life changes just like your views on it. Stay tuned as Mr. B continues his wonderfulness. ^^

#32 · 71w, 6d ago · 2 · · Mr. B and the 3 ·

I can't fathom why this story Isn't more known to public ....*shares page* :twilightblush: hope u don't mind :twilightblush:

#33 · 71w, 6d ago · · · Mr. B and the 3 ·

>>2679073

d'awww you are the sweetest. Well...I do like my stuff to get a little more known. ^^

I love it when a fan helps out, so please, go ahead! ^^ And f course...Thanks for your support. This is planned to be a pretty long story, so hopefully it'll get a bit bigger by the first half ;p

#34 · 71w, 6d ago · · · Mr. B and the 3 ·

Now that was a lot of Information!

Anyways, nice work on that chapter! Keep up the great work! :pinkiehappy:

#35 · 71w, 6d ago · · · Mr. B and the 3 ·

>>2680826

I'm trying man, this is hard to write chapter every day.

#36 · 71w, 6d ago · · · Mr. B and the 3 ·

>>2680882

I can imagine, just take your time. ^^

#38 · 71w, 6d ago · · · Mr. B and the 3 ·

>>2681625

Oh boy...You might want to move to another continent because the sobbin' doesn't stop there. :p

#39 · 40w, 4d ago · · · Lack of a Melody ·

I am confused:rainbowhuh:, "her hoof" "her hand", which does she have, hooves or hands:ajbemused:?

#40 · 40w, 3d ago · · · Party and Pride ·

So this came in

:twilightoops:

But I really enjoyed it. Hard work and long chapters pay off.

:trixieshiftright:

#41 · 40w, 2d ago · · · Day of the blanket ·

>>3768882 Hey, it's not over yet. I'm working diligently to finish this story. Just you wait! :yay:

#42 · 40w, 2d ago · · · Day of the blanket ·

>>3765365 Hey. Hey...I think I made DRASTIC improvements now, so....shush. :trixieshiftright:

#43 · 40w, 1d ago · · · Day of the blanket ·

wowthatwentfast

but still, :heart:

#44 · 40w, 11h ago · · · Day of the blanket ·

>>3779361 another chapter coming up in an hour or so. BE PREPARED :pinkiecrazy:

#45 · 39w, 6d ago · · · Balls deep ·

;_;

#47 · 39w, 6d ago · · · Balls deep ·

>>3791172 I can't.

I can't handle this, son. :fluttercry:

#48 · 39w, 5d ago · · · Balls deep ·

>>3793722

Enjoying, no?

#49 · 39w, 4d ago · · · Balls deep ·

>>3796664 In truth, yeah.

but slow down the story a bit keep it up!

#50 · 39w, 4d ago · · · Balls deep ·

>>3799604

I have the next chapter ready for read, just gimme a bit to finally submit it. :twilightsheepish:

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