This story is a sequel to Dashaloo Days and Scootabow Nights
Have you ever needed to be loved so bad that when you got it, it was painful? Scootaloo has! And when her mom shows back up from deployment for a bit of leave, her idol/big sister Dash faces new challenges with an intense internal conflict, compounded by her meddling friends, suddenly boiling over. Will she be overcome by the new barrage of gut wrenching emotions and insecurities? You bet she will! Will Ponyville still be standing after their spat? Will the barrage of anxiety on Scootaloo ever end as she's caught in the middle?
Chapters (9)
Um, quick word of advice. If you're making a sequel, you have to do more than just point to the previous story and say "Read this to know what's going on." Find some way to give the reader a bit of a recap in the story itself. Not like a "Previously on..." segment or anything cheesy like that, but just a little something to prevent new readers from getting lost.
Also, I have no idea what role Celestia and Luna play in this. Honestly, that scene just felt like a big non sequitur.
Otherwise, not a bad start, and not a bad premise for a sequel. I can kinda see why you chose to make it a sequel instead of just continuing the previous story, because that had everything sort of wrapped up in a neat little bow. Although starting exactly where the last story left off might have people thinking otherwise, but that ties into my previous recap comment.
Also, Scootaloo's sneezing. First the nickname Scootabee, now this. I gotta say; you really have a knack for making Scoot just downright adorable, and I love it.
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Haha, things will all come together. I will be juggling two plotlines in this one, but they will collide with each other eventually I have something fun planned between Twi and Dash.
I wasn't sure exactly how I wanted to lead into it from the last story, and I spent quite a bit of time trying to figure that out. However whatever I wrote really fell flat.
In the end, I will try to pass the bar set by the first one without seeming too needy. This story will most likely be close to twice the size of the last one though and a lot more complicated. It's my next challenge.
Ugh.. It's gonna be. TwiDash ain't it?
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LMAO nononono, this isn't a shipping fic, I promise
Unless of course you count random fits of over sappy sisterly love
No I have something much more traumatising in store for them
This story somehow changed my name....I LOVE IT
2671879 oh thank LUNA!
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Yes! The infection has already begun to spread! Mwahahaha!!
No, seriousely, I'm really glad you liked it that much.
I have no idea what just appended
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I've got a thing for keeping people guessing and slowly revealing truths. So the first quarter will be a big WTF just happened... but by chapter 4 or 5 it will all be very clear and hopefully fun to go back and see it all again with full understanding.
2675282 a bit too much of a WTF
Dash suddenly breaking down and crying, Twi doing some wierd voodoo shit, AJ being scared shitless of said voodoo. Pinkie Pie... Being Pinkie, Rarity being an egotistical dramaqueen. 
it's just a massive
WTF??
Finally! An author who truly understands Scootaloo's flying ability! You have no idea how happy I am to see that.
Although to be honest, I didn't know rocs were such a pest to Equestrian weather teams. Still, points for adding another creature to the Equestrian bestiary.
I also like this new problem you set up for Dashie. It looks like she wants to train with Scootaloo, but at the same time, she doesn't want Scoot to get hurt. I am genuinely interested in seeing how she'll work around this.
The last few scenes involving the rest of the Mane 6 had me kinda scratching my head, though. Did, AJ just see a ghost or something? What does that have to do with anything else going on in the story? I'm guessing it'll be explained in later chapters, but it felt like it came out of nowhere. Honestly, I don't get it.
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Hmm.. maybe I will speed it up then. I will try to get the next chapter out as quickly as I can, and move a couple scenes forward sooner than planned. I should be able to without damaging the timelines.
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I knew what a roc was before I read it, alas I cannot take credit for adding it. I picked it up from The Incredibly Grumpy Life of a Weather Pony
but the dope on a rope is a military ref.
The Twidorable Reading Pose:
pinkie.ponychan.net/chan/files/src/133150564245.png
Oh... and let me apologize ahead of time for abusing Rarity's quirks. I will try to make up for it later at some point by accentuating her good points.
Well, that escalated quickly.
Honestly, I don't blame Dashie for getting upset and not opening up to Twilight. No matter how good Twi's intentions are, she can't just force herself into her friend's mind and expect her to be okay with it.
Not sure if I can say the same thing about Twilight's outburst, though. It's true she might've been caught in the heat of the moment, but consider this. Twilight earned her wings and her crown because of everything she learned about friendship. Not only that, but Dash was with her pretty much every step of the way. Does she really think that RD views her as nothing but a cold-hearted bookworm? I'm beginning to think that the spell Twilight was working on was ripped out of Discord's playbook rather than the spell book of Starswirl the Bearded.
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It's the fact they went through those trials together that elicit the response. Being so close the barriers between them aren't nearly as thick as they would be between strangers meaning that such painful words come a lot easier.
Twilight voiced her own insecurities, derived from the train of thought Dash had exhibited earlier. She expounded upon them needlessly and got caught up in the moment as you said. Dash was at a loss for words, only being able to focus on her own plight because of her already emotional state not being able to make room for Twilight's issues. Overall the end result is they fed off each other.
True heat of the moment arguments happen chaotically. I dislike the idea that seems to permeate almost all fiction I've ever read that a character will voice exactly what they mean in exactly the way they need to for it to come across exactly how it should. In a true argument, things are said without considering old ties, and without thinking. There is truth in all the words spoken, whether they are meant to hurt, meant to release ones pain, or meant to convey meaning. It's the emotions attached to them that truly matter though. But all that is for future chapters. Think of everything Twilight just said as, "Please let me help, it hurts that you won't let me help you. I fear you don't trust me. Am I not good enough? I can't handle this! It hurts too bad! Go away!"
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Touché, my good man. Touché.
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And now I have to accurately exhibit that in the following chapters in an interesting and intriguing way without diluting the focus: Emotional advancement between Dash and Scoot.
Hehe...hehehe....
Oh crap!
Ohh God why!
I forgot to change Hat Trick to Splash Attack! The Pokemon ref is ruhuhend...
Fluttershy just kicked the shit outta Dash didn't she?
why am I laughing at that? Dash could be dead! 
Also
Spike has hooves?
I know what Dashie's trying to say here, but the way you phrased it makes her come off as cold. Of course Scootaloo means more to her than any other cadet, but saying that she didn't care about those other ponies doesn't seem right. She is the Element of Loyalty, after all.
Otherwise, wow. There is truly a lot of emotion packed into these scenes. Twi's guilt, Dashie's uncertainty, Scoot's stubbornness: All of them truly resonate here. I-I hope they'll turn out alright.
Although, what exactly happened between Dashie and Flutters? You mind showing us that scene, please?
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Hoof to claw... thanks for the catch
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I will concede that point... hmmm... I will think up a rephrase.
I'm glad you liked the chapter. I spent an extra couple days to make sure it came out right. It's a really important transitional chapter. I was actually nervous as I wrote it because I wanted the thoughts and reactions to come off perfectly. The next chapter is just about the same level of difficulty so it may also take a few days to see an update.
The FlutterDash confrontation is next chapter. I am throwing in some extra effort on this one too. I want it to be perfect.
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OMG, her power levels over 9000!
We're all doomed!
2702003 don't make an 'over 9000' joke, I had fave guys bitching to me about how it wasn't funny....
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Hahaha!
No but seriousely
Troll them 
2703427 I tried
they bitched harder
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Well I like the joke and if you made it then I respect you more for it. Just because it's been overdone doesn't mean it's not still fun if applied at the right time.
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as if I made that, I don't even watch DBZ!!
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Okay now I am really confused...was I just trolled?
2704405. I dunno, were you?
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Soo deliciousely confused
Okay! Time for writing
Fluttermad!!!! FLUTTER CUDDLE!!!
So, Scootaloo's mom is part of another branch of the Equestrian Navy, huh? I've seen stories where her dad served in the armed (hooved?) forces, but not one where her mom does. She seems like an interesting character.
I'm, still not sold on this "Cheeriloo" concept you're going for, but hey. Your fic, your canon.
Also, I'm not sure why Dashie is pushing all of her friends away, and yet, it doesn't feel too out of place. She doesn't know what's wrong, so she can't express it. And thus, her friends can't help. Maybe it's because I sometimes have this problem, but that really resonated with me.
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iddqd: SNUGGLEBITCH ACTIVATE!!
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You mean...the 30 something hours I put into this chapter were actually worth it!? I'm so happy!
Wait, oh Celestia, I have no life!
this is adorable ^-^ ill read the rest tomarrow fnornowwwwww zzz
Man, by the end of this story there is going to be a lot of things that need to be fixed with feels. MOAR!
That ending to this chapter was just so epic
I'm Pinkie sad in a happy way lol. You made "feels" original 
MOAR! 
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Glad you like it! I'm still horsin' around with the next chapter but it should be down by tomorrow.
So there will be MOAR!
Including forced pony snuggles! 
This would ruin the story, but someone should try and sue Fluttershy over forced cuddles, you know the same way someone might for rape...
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Adorable! Yay
I was goin for that. Don't worry though, it won't stay too sweet for long.
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That would be an interesting court case one shot story
Sweet Celestia Luna and Twilight on a pogo stick, Flutters! You are downright scary when you're mad!
Also, Twi? Stop. Just, stop with this soul-seeing spell before it gets you into more trouble.
Again, there's an interesting quandary posed here. Dashie wants to handle this on her own, but her friends can't just leave her alone to suffer. So, what's Dash to do? I don't think she wants to jeopardize her friendships, but her friends can't help her. I-I hope she figures out something soon.
My only point of contention with this chapter is this:
You, don't typically have a character think something just to have them say the exact same thing on the next line. It's kinda redundant.
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Glad you liked it. Look forward to the next chapter, Dash works out a bit of frustration
I know, it was the theatrics of it. Like she thought it, mulled it over, and then literally just laid it out just as she thought it. I've done that before so I thought it was interesting. Though if it's distracting, I could easily change it up.
MOAR!
Um, I think! 
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Afraid to read on?
(guess the reference
Now you fucked up
Now you fucked up
Now you fucked up
You have fucked up now!
Now you fucked up
Now you fucked up
Now you fucked up
Now you have fucked up!
Also
Scoots mom, she's awesome!
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Oniichan!
Just wait