Fluttershy was feeding the chickens when Ditzy arrived, the poor dear smacked her head on the door post of the coop as she flew in. Ditzy seemed a bit more clumsy than usual, and Fluttershy could see why. Her mailbag was bursting at the seams with pink envelopes.
Ditzy shook her head, her eyes spinning for a moment, then they focused on Fluttershy. She reached into her bag and handed Fluttershy a letter.
"Letter for you 'shy, looks like Pinkie invited everypony in Ponyville."
"Oh my, we just had the "Party to celebrate last Monday's party" two days ago. I wonder what this one is for."
Fluttershy tore open the envelope and read the letter.
"Hey everypony! You're all invited to my "I woke up this morning and now I'm an Alicorn" Party! It's going to be at Sugarcube corner tonight at 8pm! Hope you can come!"
"Oh my... I wonder what she's talking about? Nopony just wakes up as another pony, although if they could that might be fun. I've always wondered how it might feel to be an earth pony, or maybe a tree."
Ditzy grinned at that, but then looked a little shocked, something inside of Fluttershy's hair was glowing!
"F-Fluttershy... why are you growing leaves?"
Fluttershy had been daydreaming about what it would feel like to have roots. "What's that Ditzy?"
Ditzy shook her head, thinking perhaps she had hit it harder than she thought. "N-nothing, 'shy I have other deliveries to make, I should go."
Fluttershy nodded. "Oh, of course Ditzy. Thank you for the letter."
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Fluttershy continued tending her animals until it was time to leave for her weekly appointment. She took off for Ponyville.
"Oh my goodness!" Fluttershy was startled, her wingspan far exceeded what she was used to, she was flying much higher and faster than she ever had before! Her wings locked up in fright, and suddenly she was plummeting from thousands of feet in the air.
Fluttershy screamed! Her eyes rolled in panic as the ground came closer and closer. This... was going to hurt.
She struck the ground hooves first, the ground gave and... collapsed in a cone shape around her. She felt the impact but not the searing pain of breaking limbs she expected. She could not believe her luck... Or could she even call this luck? In any case, she believed a nice calming walk was in order, flying suddenly seemed very frightening.
She arrived at the town square and was shocked to see dozens of frogs hopping around a giant pink pillow. She had no idea what to think about this, and as such was compelled to ignore it for now. Her mind, still shellshocked from her somehow-not-fatal fall, regulated this scene to the part of her mind entitled "Somepony Else's Problem." This was not a well used section, unlike "Cute things I want to cuddle" and "Things to panic over" which were quite overloaded and spilling into other areas of the brain.
She arrived at the spa, giving a small squeaky grin to Aloe and Lotus.
"Hello girls, is Rarity already in her mud bath?"
Aloe frowned. "Non Madam, Rarity has not arrived, perhaps she is wrapped up in another ensemble design?"
"Oh my, I should go check on her. We'll reschedule our appointment for another time girls, thank you."
Lotus smiled. "Our pleasure Madam, please send our regards to Rarity, we hope she is well."
Aloe looked at Lotus as Fluttershy left. "I certainly hope she is all right, Rarity accounts for half of our business in this town!"
Lotus grimaced. “We really need to increase our clientele list sister.”
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Fluttershy arrived at Carousel Boutique, but was greeted by a sight she had never seen before. A sign was posted on the door.
"Closed, Fashion emergency,
Terribly sorry!
Rarity"
Closed? Fashion emergency? What was going on?
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Inside, the shop was a flurry of activity, no less than twelve dozen dress designs were being sewn simultaneously, all of them with one common theme. Accentuation of a pair of appendages Rarity had never truly had before, but had dreamed of having again since her visit to Cloudsdale.
"Oh, they are so darling! I must admit I admired the style and sophistication of the magical wings Twilight was able to whip up but these beauties are truly dazzling in their own right."
She nuzzled the wings appreciatively. Now if she could just figure out how to get the fabric to flex correctly. Oh this would be so much easier with a model!
Goodness she would need more gemstones for this set, she needed to ask Spike for his assistance, Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash's dress templates had helped, but she had to account for the sheer size of these things. How to account for the range of movement so as not to limit herself and yet still show off...
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Fluttershy stood outside the door, not quite sure how to handle this, the Boutique was never truly closed, not while Rarity was available anyway. She finally decided she would risk any potential embarrassment (Rarity had a tendency to overreact to things, she may need a shoulder to cry on or somepony's ear to bend) and politely knocked. She heard somepony approach the door.
"I'm afraid the boutique is closed for the day, please come back tomorrow!"
"Rarity? We had an appointment at the Spa today, are you all right?"
"Fluttershy! Oh my dear I am so sorry, just a moment." Fluttershy heard a locks turning, but then there was a pause. "Oh dear, Fluttershy... I need you to prepare to be startled a bit, I had a bit of a surprise this morning, it may be a bit shocking to you."
"I actually had quite a surprise myself today, I was hoping to talk to you about it."
"Well of course dear, come right in!"
The door opened, and Rarity embraced her friend. Fluttershy found her face buried in a giant white wing.
"Oh my..."
AH GRAVITY!
If Fluttershy is an alicorn now... does that make her 2 times as lovable?
Well done on this chapter, I also loved the portion with Ditzy/Derpy.
I also love the fact that, other then the wing/gravity problem no-one seems to realize that anything is different with Fluttershy.
i want alicorn fluttershy art
i must witness her cuteness
that is all
kthanxbai
Fluttershy, don't you see? We're Alicorns now!
But I don't want to be an Alicorn
229586 Well if the strength of an alicorn is comparable only to another alicorn, then it stands to reason you need to compare Fluttershy's lovability to AJ, Twilight, Rarity, Pinkie, Dash, Celestia, and Luna.
Amusing chapter and reactions. It did seem slightly rushed though. Feel free to take your time if you want to.
229586 yes it does!
229586 yes it does!
I see you invoked the "Somepony Else's Problem" effect I hope you have a flashlight battery to power that (although you shouldn't need one with an alicorn's power...)
"Fluttershy's horn not being visible is a bit of a copeout," - The first thing that comes to mind is "copout" or "cop-out", so I have no idea if this is correct or not
229586 No it does not... It makes her so much MORE than 2 times as loveable!
229712 it was slightly, I may have to go back and repolish it. it wasn't so much the need to get a chapter out (although I have been doing a chapter a day and I'd like to keep that up if possible.) this one was published mere seconds before I had to sleep (night shift is so much fun ). nevertheless I was happy with the direction the chapter went but I may in my haste have slipped too much into the caricaturization trap you spoke of with Fluttershy. She's a difficult one too work with, much more reactionary than the other five... the trouble is I had little for her to react to. All of the others have outgoing personalities, they do things. Fluttershy's strengths lie in her reactions to when things happen to her. Also... her dialog is difficult, she's so soft spoken and understated, unless she's lecturing someone in Mama Bear mode. The phrase "Oh my" Appears entirely too much, but its what she kept saying in my head.
229998 Yes... I think continuity is important, and having placed a giant pillow in the middle of town surrounded by frogs I realized Fluttershy would notice this. Unless I stopped her she'd be gathering the frogs and taking them off to a nice swamp somewhere. She had an appointment to keep however, and let's face it, she was still a bit shook up over the whole why-am-I-not-a-pancake thing.
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Actually the characterization was not bad really at all.
I would say the biggest problem is the scene breaks. The type of abrupt breaks in this chapter are usually used to portray a sequential series of events happening rapidly from multiple perspectives.
In this case it might have been better to use more natural transitions.
It makes the scenes seem too hasty and bite sized.
As for Fluttershy's characterization, I would say focus on personality much more than dialogue. Her emotional state and mental processes are far more pertinent than her dialogue. Her manner of speaking is awkward and mainly adorable in an audio-visual medium rather than prose.
230175 that's actually quite useful, I'll have to rework the chapter a bit.
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Well her landing could have been worse, that's for sure.
229586 No. That now makes her part tree. She was even growing leaves and everything already!
Rarity is attempting to cover her wings with fabric, so they would most certainly become useless for flying. Or has she only ever wanted them for the accentuation they provide?
231092 actually she was trying to figure out how to allow for range of movement while still having fabric around the base of the wing, she could go open back but that limits her choices, its a new problem for her to consider. she's designed dresses for pegasi but not for alicorns, the dimensions are different.
thy cuteness hath been doubled!
"Inside, the shop was a flurry of activity, no less than twelve dozen dress designs were being sewn simultaneously," twelve dozen? thats... alot... 12x12=144
I forgot to post this earlier.
So, somepony set up a SEPG (Somebody/pony Else's Problem Generator) around the pillow and frogs in between the Princesses recieving the report and Fluttershy arriving in town, huh? (Guess what the SEPG is from. I mean, if that's O.K. with you.)
234770 well, I hadn't specified what color the pillow was in the previous chapter, and here I stated it was pink, but yes, that was a deliberate nod to the dear departed but never forgotten. "The Somebody Else's Problem field is much simpler and more effective, and what's more can be run for over a hundred years on a single torch battery. This is because it relies on people's natural disposition not to see anything they don't want to, weren't expecting, or can't explain. If Effrafax had painted the mountain pink and erected a cheap and simple Somebody Else's Problem field on it, then people would have walked past the mountain, round it, even over it, and simply never have noticed that the thing was there." Actually though she ignored it more because she had her own concerns, like why she had managed to fly higher and faster than ever before then survive a fall with no ill effects. a couple frogs and a pillow were not something she was prepared to cope with at the time.
235365 I was right. I can't wait fo-WAIT! What's that? Is it... Yes! I think it is. It's a space ship and I do believe that I recognize those symbols and pictures from the show. That's it. Come on everypony. Forget about this and all other fics, grab your Electronic Thumbs and towels and let's hitchhike to Equestria. Hm... I wonder if it would be easier to learn how to break the laws of physics and to fly there. I know that I'm already easily distracted, and Equestria has GOT to be full of awsome distractions for me. I wonder if I'll be able to throw myself at the ground and miss there.
235680 I reference adams alot, his brand of dry humor is just wonderful. For instance: Pinkie in the last chapter "Pinkie grinned broadly. "Okay! Now ask me how I did it!"
"How did you do it?"
"No idea!" Pinkie somehow smiled even more widely."
Having no idea how you are doing it is the best way to break the laws of physics in general. The moment you stop to consider your actions physics will demand to know what the hell you think you are doing and all will suddenly be lost. So long as you avoid these considerations you can continue to blithely do what you are doing and physics in turn will shake its head and continue to ensure that when a pony drops an ice cream cone in Manehatten it goes splat on the ground as it should. Physics gave Pinkie Pie a pass long ago after she threw it a party. How she threw a party for a theoretical notion and who else attended said party is anypony's guess... and now I think I need to write a one shot about this because that notion is too fun to pass up.
235708 It's rather obvious that Physics invited the fourth wall to the party. It probably invited common sense as well but they either got lost or had something else to do at the time.
SPOILER ALERT!!!
"I woke up this morning and now I'm an Alicorn" Party
-A completely legit reason for partying actually, even by non-Pinkie standards. Granted sending out the invitations the same day it happened and inviting EVERYPONY might be a bit much. The second could be covered if she is just going to do a super-massive conjuration and have party supplies appear in every town square in Equestria or something. The first? Well, she and Dash always were pretty impulsive.
It's going to be at Sugarcube corner tonight at 8pm! Hope you can come!"
-Right... so is that just for the Ponyville residence, or is she actually going to try to get the total population of Equestria in there? Granted a with a little hammer-spacing she/they might be able to pull it off.
Nopony just wakes up as another pony, although if they could that might be fun.
-I find it interesting how oblivious they are... actually I am surprised that Sisters didn't detail somepony to go over and hug Fluttershy and explain things before she dies of sheer terror.
I've always wondered how it might feel to be an earth pony, or maybe a tree."
-Nice... also, I wonder if Derpy will clue her in?
Ditzy grinned at that, but then looked a little shocked, something inside of Fluttershy's hair was glowing!
-Oh... so she didn't get super-sized? Maybe none of them did. Also, while I was typing the previous sentence it occurred to me that she is going to transform into one or the other... probably the tree.
"F-Fluttershy... why are you growing leaves?"
-Yep... hope she can figure out how to turn back. Probably just a matter of FOCUSED panic, rather than complete brain-locking panic.
Her wings locked up in fright, and suddenly she was plummeting from thousands of feet in the air.
-Did the leaves leave when she stopped thinking about them? Also, I suspect she is going to leave a larger crater, and walk out without a scratch on her... or maybe Dash will catch her, or Pinkie will make another giant pillow based on her Pinkie Sense (which may have gotten an upgrade).
the ground gave and... collapsed in a cone shape around her.
-Normal crater, did she alter the make-up of the ground subconsciously, or did Pinkie conjure a pillow?
regulated this scene to the part of her mind entitled "Somepony Else's Problem." This was not a well used section, unlike "Cute things I want to cuddle" and "Things to panic over" which were quite overloaded and spilling into other areas of the brain.
-Wow... in 1.5 sentences you managed to sum up 75% of Fluttershy's personality... although I would replace "cuddle" with "care for", since she doesn't actually do much snuggling per se. Or maybe it is implied off-screen cuddling?
Aloe frowned. "Non Madam, Rarity has not arrived, perhaps she is wrapped up in another ensemble design?"
-I wonder if she will give it a miss? Probably not, based on the title. If Celestia (Luna?) was right (and Celestia "I'm Batmare" generally is about these things) then she really is making herself a dress... of course, that could take 30 seconds if she is powered up enough... once she decides what she wants it to look like. Granted her performance in "Boast Busters" might have been 50 percent illusion and/or it might have turned back into a curtain 2 minutes later, but with a bit more power behind her... I also believe that she DOES have dreams of designing for Celestia so she probably has SOME ideas about how to make a dress for a white alicorn. The mane colors are different, as are the personalities (and she does very personality-based dresses most of the time).
-And here is where the April Fool's joke kicked in... hope it doesn't cause problems with any stories where Posey and Sparker(form either generation) actually appear...
"I certainly hope she is all right, Sparkler accounts for half of our business in this town!"
-Nice...
Lotus grimaced. “We really need to increase our clientele list sister.”
-Ironic given today's episode.
"Closed, Fashion emergency,
Terribly sorry!
-So Fluttershy has never seen Carousel Boutique has never been closed unexpectedly before? Also, something about that note strikes me as "Very Rarity".
Inside, the shop was a flurry of activity, no less than twelve dozen dress designs were being sewn simultaneously, all of them with one common theme.
-I see her TK got an upgrade, but despite doing without clothing most of the time she feels the need for an entire wardrobe... then again, with a soon-to-be rapidly developing situation where you have a firm lock on the initiative, you want all your contingency plans ready before you get the ball rolling. Or she is just being Rarity.
Accentuation of a pair of appendages Rarity had never truly had before, but had dreamed of having again since her visit to Cloudsdale.
-Heh... i wonder if they are multicolored, and if so if they are butterfly like (but many orders of magnitude more durable than her temporary set).
I must admit I admired the style and sophistication of the magical wings Twilight was able to whip up but these beauties are truly dazzling in their own right.
-So, I am going to guess pure white... or maybe with purple highlights. I wonder if, when she gets her "energy mane and tail", they will look like diamond dust.
Now if she could just figure out how to get the fabric to flex correctly. Oh this would be so much easier with a model!
-I guess her wings aren't quite the same shape as a pegasus's, or is she just comparatively inexperienced with pegasus clients? We don't see any wings on her poniquins, but we also don't see her measuring or Fluttershy (of course both are probably conservation of detail).
Goodness she would need more gemstones for this set, she needed to ask Spike for his assistance,
-She probably isn't thinking clearly, or she means "Spike and Twilight", or she means a BIG favor since Spike by himself would have to dig like a human (strip-)miner rather than discrete holes leading to the clusters of gemstones.
Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash's dress templates had helped, but she had to account for the sheer size of these things.
-Well, that explains that... of course, she has probably done some off-screen orders for other pegasi as well.
How to account for the range of movement so as not to limit herself and yet still show off...
-So she plans on flying. I guess she can FEEL that she doesn't need practice (unlike some pegasi who often need training at the CMC age-range despite some being perfectly capable as infants)?
the Boutique was never truly closed, not while Rarity was available anyway.
-Well, that answers that.
She finally decided she would risk any potential embarrassment
-Very brave of her, but then again she did more than that in "Green Isn't Your Color".
She heard somepony approach the door.
-Is this supposed to subtly imply the changes to her proportions wehre enough to make her not SOUND like Rarity anymore?
I need you to prepare to be startled a bit, I had a bit of a surprise this morning, it may be a bit shocking to you."
-I wonder if she would have given the same warning if it had been Twilight or Applejack there?
a giant white wing.
-Monochromatism confirmed.
the transition from normal pony shape to Alicorn shape is not instantaneous after all.
-Hard to tell how fast it is though... also means that Rarity will have to keep adjusting the fit on her dresses/remaking them. Maybe she noticed her measurements continuing to change after her first test-fitting and that was why she was making multiple ones, to grow into?
And now Fluttershy, i love how no one freaks out at Fluttershy being an Alicorn.
ITS DERPY
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Now imagine this... Derpy, still with me? good. Derpy as an Alicorn shouting "LET IT RAIN MUFFINS!"
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That would be frickin awesome :D
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Well twilight in the show maybe grew a couple of inches if any . It was a few years before she got as tall as Celestia.