when three travelers come across a legend that lies within one of Europe's largest forests, they encounter ancient relics that ,not only, grants them the ability to do magic ,but also transports them into the realm of Equestria. however, their arrival had awakened a forgotten evil that wishes to bring all worlds into darkness. will our heroes be able to stop this evil and find their way back home, will they be accepted by the inhabitants of this world, and will they be able to solve the mystery of the newly found relics.
WARNING:
may contain violence and harsh language.
P.S. the actual involvement with MLP is in chapter 2
Chapters (19)
Will this author ever learn first grade spelling? Probably not!
Fix:Chapters are eh, but fourth grade spelling in the most on some.
Other than spelling errors, I'm enjoying the story pretty well.
Looking forward for what is to come.
sorry for the spelling errors, this sight (nor does Microsoft) picks them up
ill try my best to keep it at a minimum
.... MOA PLEASE!!!! NOW!!!!
I like this, keep it going please...
Liking the story so far, keep up the good work! Some errors here and there but other than that, very good.
This story needs more views... I like it...
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Agreed.
Errors...so many errors...and all in word usage...Mr. Author, you really need to look over this again, or sit down with a friend who knows English, so he/she can point all of the stuff you missed.
Fix the errors. I like the ideas, but I'm getting tired of dealing with inexperienced English.
Just wondering, are they ever gonna find a way to get more ammo or are they just gonna run out and thow their guns away?
good
~JFK
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well without giving anything away. they do find a way to get more ammo.... but that's going to be further in the story; so for now its just trigger discipline
The word you are looking for is ridiculous. You wanted an adjective where you had the above word, and you placed a verb instead...for shame. For shame.
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thanks did not see that.... i do need an editor but sadly i do not have one
3302256 ...Well...You could always practice proper formatting while you respond to another's comment. Part of excellence is getting it right the first time, another is practice, and the last is correction, at least when it comes to writing. Sadly, the second and last are needed to work with the first, and you need lots of experience to be a good writer. Even more to be a great writer. Just keep reading, practicing, and stay in school. You will eventually come back to this and improve it so much that it will wow you away.
Stay educated my friends,
IkioStar
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Finaly got to reading this! Hope to see more soon!
Rather than using the light colors like red or goldenrod, you might want to use darker colors like that maroon.
Some computers have weird coloring that makes it hard to read some words. Some ponies aren't smart enough to fix it. 
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in the later chapters i decided to stop with the colors ,because im getting tired of it and keeping it traditional just seems more professional.... professionalism + laziness= quick results or a complete disaster
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EVERY STORY I READ YOU ARE THERE! BUCKSHOT IS ALSO ALWAYS THERE!
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Don't forget me!
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YOU TOO! STAHP FOLLWIN ME!
I am happy that I am a bad speller so I cant see any errors and I just had daja-vo in this chapter.
is it just me or is Gilda hard to read.
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Lol yeah I figured using color wasent the brightest idea so I stopped later on in the chapters and sticked with the classic black and white
no it is 40:1
3818280 I never seen you before but
3817370 I see you all the time or in almost all the story's I read.
that was some good fight's you have.
bravo.
good chapter. can't wait for more.
Nice story so far, definitely reading more