An old Dragon is revisited by a certain Princess who comes to give him something he's been looking for for a long time.
(Yay! My first story everypony ^0^ Enjoy y'all. Since this is my first could you all be kind and give any critique please. Thanks ^-^)
EDIT: I completely forgot to edit this. Sorry everyone, but a while back I hit a total writers block. This was written as a one shot and I couldn't come up with anything that matched the atmosphere of this chapter. That and I went into a bad depression and just kinda forgot about a whole lot.
I am going to edit the story now so that it is a slightly better read and so it will provide some closing. Again, apologies!
Chapters (1)
I wonder how will this turn out?
2604464 Well I'm working on the next chapter, you'll see! Thanks for the feed back
Seems interesting. Will be on the lookout.
One shot?
Love this story already.
2619308 Thank you!
2620103 No problem.
Nice!! a great start. OHH people should look out for this one!!
First off, really like the story, can't wait to see where you take it.
Secondly, a little bit of constructive criticism. Your first paragraph is a big old wall of text, you probably want to break it up into smaller paragraphs. You also need to indent all of your paragraphs, not just the speaking lines or the first paragraph. If that's just FiMFic messing with the formatting, then you'll just want to double check things before publishing. Your grammar, punctuation and spelling were all good, so well done there.
Hope that helps, and waiting for more,
~Jonathon Smythe
2642083 Thank you! I had a feeling I should've broken up the first paragraph, but went against it. Obviously wrong choice. And I'll keep indentation on my mind for the second chapter as well! thanks for the information, though! Helped alot!
2644953 Just doing what I can to help.
O_O spike´s father !!!! ? ma god ,
waaa too short :c , but it is a cool start !!
This is a very good strory
3561847 Still nothing... "Its Dead Jim"
4009304 NNNNNNNNOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!! IT CANT BE DEAD IT JUST CANT!!!!!!!!!!