Twilight's brash accusations cost her everything; her friends, her family...and her life. In the midst of her own despair, can she bring happiness and salvation to a doomed world? Only time will tell...and the clock is ticking.
A Legend of Zelda: Majora's Mask crossover inspired by Wandering Quill's story, A Link To Equestria, and my own lack of sleep.
Like it, Love it, Hate it? Tell me what you think!
Thanks to the talented ChaoticYume for taking the time to draw a cover piece for the story. Check out her page for more amazing art!
11/16/2013: Speaking of more amazing art from ChaoticYume, check this out
Chapters (5)
I like your thinking. It's a bit like the classic LoZ, but slightly varied. I will watch.
Well you certainly picked a good spot to end the chapter!
I look forward to seeing how you handle this
Was half-expecting a timberwolf down at the end, but I can see how that wouldn't work in comparison with Deku Link. Will follow!
2587525
I second this statement.
2593198 i second this statement and why no a Link to Equestria
2597711
He just recently updated his story...
2597777 wait
i missed it
Star Swirl in Termina!
... Wait. It is still called Termina, right?
You seem to have mixed up "ceiling" and "roof"
2614993
Fingers? What Fingers? I didn't mistake 'fingers' for 'hooves'!
Anyways, thanks for pointing those out.
And as for what this world is actually called...that would be giving away spoilers
"Amazing! Oh crap, got to run."
"Get back here!"
2619268
okay weird but now i know how link felt when he entered termina
I... don't think you want that there
This should be a new paragraph
That's a little redundant
That... shouldn't be a new paragraph
And, uh, you might want to consider changing the name of either this chapter or the previous one, unless that's going to become a "thing"
2685217
Thank you for pointing out those mistakes. I'm going to slap my editor when I see him again.
Also, the naming scheme, at least for the first three days, is intentional
WOW, I really should have read this when I first saw it. This is really good. Aside from a few grammatical errors, I see no problems. I shall continue to read on!
2685225 Oh, okay then
It's certainly nice to see this crossover. But just wondering, will you have her getting all the masks? Because I would be interested to see what you would do with the Fierce Deity's mask.
"You've met with a terrible fate, haven't you?"
encrypted-tbn0.gstatic.com/images?q=tbn:ANd9GcSTmbYu2aSZGA_6p1sFqNww4XYIjEq6cx1PdKRMbENFl1E6-4omUR8afe55
(I have to put up a BEN pic on every Majora's Mask crossover)
My favorite Zelda game? In a crossover fanfic that doesn't suck? Formula for success right here! Why did I have to find this right when I have to leave for work? I'll be back to read it later.
2703393
I hope you enjoyed it!
2700956
Speaking of BEN, would you perchance happen to know where I can find MLP related art of him?
2689963
I do have plans for every single transformational mask, including the Fierce Deity. As for the non-transformational ones, I have no real plans for those who don't contribute any sort of utility to them.
Okay, now that I actually had time to start read, I can say.......You need to look this over again. There are a few few glaring errors here and there(that I will point out in a moment) The chapter was VERY rushed, something that can be avoided easily by adding some more actions and descriptions. A lot of the people I talk to on this site tell me this; the first chapter is the most important. If you can't get the reader's attention very quickly, or accidentally scare them away with grammar or spelling errors, then you lose many potential readers.
Some errors I mentioned earlier are as follows,
you have heart shaped one too many times.
While this isn't exactly an error, it is confusing
Fell down what exactly? Did the ground crumble away beneath her, did she walk off a cliff? Its impossible to tell what you mean from this.
Another thing, don't actually say that she is having a flashback like that. Instead, use a line across the page, and Italics for the thoughts. (There is a word for doing that, but I don't know what.) Also, be more clear on what happened with Twilight and Cadence. Was she turned into a changeling? Was she a changeling from the very beginning? Just add some more dialogue or something to spruce it up a bit.
You also forgot to have a link to majora's theme when Twilight met the foal.
In general, this chapter was rushed faster than a woman in labor to the emergency room. Just work on it a bit. I see your word count for the next two chapters, so this is definitely within your abilities.
I think that, during Twilight's travels through town, you should show the town in greater detail. In order to get to the observatory, Link had to learn the password from the bombers, walk through the sewers, THEN he could use the telescope. Why does Twilight get to skip all this? Its important, and adding it would make the chapter feel less rushed.
2708962
Well...I definitely agree that I should go into more detail with the town and what not, but I have to disagree with you on the bomber's whole hide&seek game.
I didn't want to make this one giant rehash of Majora's Mask, and just make it so that its Twilight who runs through the event, and not link. That, in itself, just doesn't well with me. (Admittedly, I am following the events as how I remember them...) I'm trying (and probably stumbling quite a bit) to go on an original path, which is why I introduced the Bombers (as well as many other characters), but haven't done anything with them. Basically, you can think of these first three days as a giant introduction of who is who and who will be relevant later on in the story.
That said, as a small announcement to everyone else, after the next chapter is posted, the previous 2 will be getting a small re-write and more editing. Hopefully, THIS GUY will be awake by then. (Yes, he's my editor.)
So is Link involved in this in any way?
2712959
...perhaps
2713001IS a human Link going to appear during the story? Straight answer please?
2712713 Still, the observatory is outside of the town. There is no other way to get there besides the sewers. Maybe she could see the foal with the mask run down an alley, chase after him, lose track of him, stumble around in the sewers for a bit, and end up in the observatory. Or whatever, I'm not your boss.
2713034
There will be no humans in this story.
assets.diylol.com/hfs/154/7ab/1a9/resized/ilikewhere-meme-generator-i-like-where-this-thread-is-going-3c675a.jpg?1305219952.jpg
my god, an update! woohoo!
3500325 *gasp*
that makes sense even though Link didn't have one in majora's mask
The dot product of two vectors is a scalar, while a cross product requires two vectors. You cannot take the cross product of two dot products.
3500886
One what?
3501185
...aargh...this is what we get for trying to do calculus at 2am...our apologies
3501287 twin majora's mask you do not even get a hint that link has a twin in termina
You've met with a terrible fate, haven't you?
I really liked it. Oh my Celestia I loved it. But you could have made the first chapter a bit slower. I also like the creativity of Twilight being a changeling, and linking this story to the wedding. I really like that creativity. Good job!
Do you watch Game Theory? Because when I read Twilight commenting on Star Swirl's math and the moon being that close would have ripped the planet apart... It mentions that on Game Theory. Anyway, you are still doing good!
OMG it'sthedoctoricantbeleiveit. ItsacrossoverofMLPandMMandtheresDoctorWho! To sum it up, I like how you put Ditzy Hooves. To make the arguing bronies about names to not argue. And the female Doctor is awesome. So FANTASTIC. Except when she left, I don't know if you meant for her to be 11 or 10, but if so, you could have made her saw Geronimo, or Allons-y. #mareDoctorissecondbestDoctor #10iathebestandsexiest
well i hope you continue soon this is getting good ^_^
Are you going to continue this story?
oi62.tinypic.com/2m6l2yv.jpg
Great story, looking forward to the next chapter. By the way in the sky area will she gain a Pegasus form. Also on the moon in Zelda canon Link got the Fierce Deity's Mask, in this one will Twilight get a mask that let's her become an Alicorn, I am pretty sure if after she gets back she uses that form on Chrysalis it would be quite a shock for her, and the Pegasus form would let her know how to fly. Can't wait for the next chapter.
YEESS! Love these Nintendo spin-offs.
Keep em' comin.
Insert "IT'S ALIVE!" meme image here.
Yes you live! I haven't been on the MLP site for awhile so this was nice to see when coming back