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Applebloom finally builds up the courage to ask our her long life crush. But things don't turn out as well. Hurt and broken, She falls into depression. You decide to cheer her up. but what happens when the filly starts to develop feelings for you?
AN: This does not have any connection to my other stories whatsoever.
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Honest, this one actually made me feel a bit odd, but still good. If she had genuine feelings for me, I would do my best to make her happy.
The story really let me go into a filly's perspective. So grammatical errors, but other than that, nice story. When the next chapter?
continue, it shows promise
This chapter...I like it...it has potential
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I'm pretty sure there was a comic thst was just like this, but still, this is amazing. Even though there are some grammatical errors, I'm loving this story and I can't wait for the next chapter.
This has a hell of alot of potential. I really want this to continue.
I'm all for the continuation of this. DO IT FILLY.
You should continue, I like it!
Oh my. Apple Bloom was rejected? How could they?! How could they say no to this face?
I really want the story to continue. I want to see if Rumble will confess to Scoots, or how will AB like you in such a way. I really want more of this. Make her like me!!!
I mean, please?
More, we want MORE!!!
More! I have officially fallen in love with this story!
I just found your story and I must say that I like where you're going with this. I love the emotion ^-^ I shall be following this.
*claps* good show sir!
I loved this, it's 21% cooler then the last one, it has grammar, and it's just plain awesome!
I really liked the chapter, even with those error thingies. Sweetie's really the intuitive one on the group and it's good to read something with that particular trait on her. Scootaloo, on the other hand, is like Rainbow Dash, a pony who likes to do it head-on. I appreciate those types of personalities on a group.
Anyway, I can't wait for the next chapter!
You sir, have just earned a favorite. Have a moustache
This reeks potential, more!
Only problem is the capitalization and grammar. For example
Pretty sure that should be:
Other than that, ziz iz gut!
Another amazing chapter! And I'm loving where this is going, keep it up!
Slight paragraph mistake but otherwise great faving
Really great story so far. Have a Pinki Pie.
I'm loving the story so far! I can't wait for the next one.
So short gotta let 3 or so chapters go before I read again since I get too hyper for the next one
Thoughts on this chapter:
1) the first phrase "it was now night time." seems unnecessary.
2) at the breakfast table "during breakfast, consisted of ...", could also be " during a breakfast consisting of ..." instead.
Opinions on the story thus far:
I am hooked by the description and love how the story is playing out (I do feel sorry for applebloom though), and am anxiously awaiting how this story will play out.
This is me:
then 
and then 
I love how this story is going. Love the detail you put in as well as switching perspectives from Rumble and Applebloom.
Good job keep it up! 
2630286 No I didn't.
2627415 Haha, Sorry, I'll try and make them more longer!
2627605 Thankyou for your feedback
2630491 and Knowing is Growing
See, I have a problem here, about the story.
THERE ISN'T F*****G ENOUGH OF IT.
Write faster, plz? PLZ? Only um... if you want to
P.S: I'm loving this so much, I'm going to loathe EVERY shipping story until this is is done. Filly X Apple Bloople beats all boats
Ah <3 this story!!
Please write more... Please
Daaaawwwwww
What?
2651729
Whoops! I didn't notice that.
The HNNG meter, it's overloading! It can't take much more cap'n!
This is freaking beautiful. MOAR
This is so bucking adorable!
Please keep it up, this is getting interesting.
This just warms a fire right in my heart. I absolutely adore stargazing and I think it's quite frankly one of the simplest ways to just relax and enjoy nature.
I do have one suggestion. This isn't a huge deal and you can decide whether or not you'd like to do it, but the format of your story would look much cleaner and neater if you didn't indent every paragraph. I know the structure learned in English classes of school hammer this idea that new paragraphs should begin with indentations, but you should realize that writing is flexible.
You aren't writing an essay, where new ideas are clinically and mechanically begun by indenting from the previous paragraph. You're crafting a short story that needs to flow both in the plot of the story itself (which you're doing a great job with, by the way!) and in the presentation.
tl;dr, I think you should ditch the indentations for new paragraphs.
Have a great day!
I wonder what the apple family will think.
This story is really coming together. I LOVE it
HNNNNNNNGG
When will next update be?
Calm your tits dude this chapter came out today>>2870440
I want to see them wake up face to face with each other.
2872831 I just added it today after the update was made how was I supposed to know that it was made today.
Honestly, I didn't know he would update the story so quickly after I edited it.
argh... i love this story, and I love all the warm feels I get from reading it.
and although i want to say that this is a pretty short chapter, i understand the term "short and sweet".
Two words...
CHAPTER SIX!!!
Cute story so far.
This was a pleasant surprise to wake up too.