The world sucks, is it any surprise? No one can really argue that.
Such is the outlook of the man who shows up in Equestria, prepared to kill himself when he feels he's done with the world. But he's stopped, and he angrily decides to follow Twilight, to have her teach him a lesson he never really considered before. Perhaps there's more to the world than the world itself.
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Not too much to say honestly, I like the character, though I generally do like the dark and melancholy characters, oddly enough given my somewhat happy disposition. Uh, like the story so far.
This could be good, or it could be bad. Up to you author!
I really like this so far, but be careful as this chapter raises a lot of questions, and if you don't answer them, you'll end up with a lot of gaping holes. You can has three mustaches and Da Magiks for a good first chapter.
Interesting.
Only a few grammar errors (thank Celestia, you have my respect), mainly with dialogue tags and apostrophes. ("It's" means "it is." "Its" is possessive.)
I liked the melancholy, and your use of tropes was remarkably well-justified in my opinion (lead in my head, et al). You're straying a tad close to magic with the whole "if you're here . . . . " sentence (how would he have disguised himself from Spike), but it's up to you.
I'd like to see how this continues.
I can't say much more than what has already been said, so I'll suffice it to say that you got another thumb and fave.
Bananas.
2583539 I believe Spike was asking Twilight who went to the basement.
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I like it. Dark and kinda intriguing. one thing I caught though:
It took no pleasure in the act, but it didn’t seemed apposed to it either.
Should be "opposed" if I'm not mistaken
I am detecting high quality yes in these words.
More plz.
MOAR
I like these kind of stories.
i'm willing to give this a shot
hoooo, shit gonna go down in the future
Interesting... go on.
Angry, suicidal HiE who believes his world is absolute garbage. But it's ok because he meets the mane 6. Where have I seen this...
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I haven't the slightest idea.
Everywhere or nowhere?
it's getting intresting
That powder sure makes this James an interesting character.
I'm going to make some soup now....
The plot thickens!
I'd like to see James counteracting all of Twilight's egghead explanations with simple logic that would leave her dumfounded
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Welcome to my stories where the tropes are cheap, the grammar clunky, and the plot thicker than blood.
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Fantastic! Good to hear.
Love to hear that my stories are appealing.
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So would the soup if he bothered to put in some of the corn starch in the pantry to the left of the stove.
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That made me chuckle way harder than it should have.. Then my dad looked at me like I was crazy, and I laughed even harder.
Well... now that my dad thinks I'm even more insane...
Great chapter N64! Can't wait to see another.
Wish the chapters were longer though.....
hmmmm... i have no idea where this is going... so i think i need to wait for next chapter for now have thumb up
:o
My name was used!
This is quite the odd story you've got here.
I'd like to see how it progresses.
This guy is freaking numb! Punch a mirror, btw got any bandages nearby? Totally not even caring about the fact that he's bleeding all over himself, totally normal and not worthy of panic ...
I welcome you back with pony snores
Ooo, Mr. Crystals is back.
Mr Jerk saved the day! Huzzah!
Wow... You are brilliant at character development.
Keep up the good work.
Yeah, i like what's going on. Even though i have no idea what's actually going on.
"yeah, I just punched a mirror. Got a band-aid for the SHARDS OF GLASS in my hand? Thanks. Oh, yes, I'd love some fries with that."
This is really good so far. But is this dead? I hope not... please update sooner rather than later.
I see what you did there at the last part
I find it redundant to say they were sitting in the library, then immediately follow with a description of their seating arrangement (Twilight's even standing, not sitting). Just a nitpick here.
"The Reason You Suck" speeches are always fun.
Wouldn't wound or cuts or slashes be a better fit?
A little short, but the verbal evisceration of Rainbow Dash was awesome!
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No exceptions.
Thank you for writing this. I love it
Very excellent work, I must say. I do look forward to the next chapter.
This story is fucking great! Can't wait for the next update.
Just read this.
Need more!
Any chance for an update?
Any plans on updating this soon?
Yeah! Surely right "A reason would have changed nothing".
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What if he had told her, beforehand or while stomping the book, that a life was in danger if he didn't do it? Or that someone dear to him was taken hostage, and he needed stomp the book because he was ordered to do so by the kidnapper?
That definitely would have changed a lot.
Sure, Twilight would have still been angry, but not as much angry at him. Her anger most likely projects itself unto the kidnapper in that case.
Saying "A reason changes nothing" is a very narrow view.
Whether his spoken words were true or false, is not the point, but giving her such a truth or lie as a reason for doing this to her book, would have definitely changed her perception of him.
And she certainly would not have thrown him off her book with magic as well.
I don't think Twilight would potentially risk a life over a book.
Silly human!
Especially the 'whys' are what matters for the law. The judge's decision in court is influenced by the reason of the defendant.
Why did the defendant kill the victim?
A. Because they hated them. - Guilty
B. Just for fun. - Guilty
C. No reason in particular. - Guilty
D. In self defense. - Not Guilty
But you already wrote that this guy is suicidal, so no wonder reasons don't matter for him.
Anything hardly matters anymore for such a person.
Wow,what a fucking emo.
Dislike heuheu
Damnit Spike and Rainbow