average...i really got nothing else

I liked it. A little on the short side but I like the idea of consequences the CMC didn't realize. Also FLUTTERMAC

>>206479206479 Re-edited it if you would like to re-read and tell me your thoughts. Constructive criticism will be much appreciated

upon retrospect... my earlier comment was a bit too unconsidered. The overworked version does help in seeing that. the point of the story slipped by me completely the first time, that it was about the impact thoughtless actions can have, also helped a bit that falling into the river isn´t suicide this time.

solid 3.5-4 stars, sorry bout the other one.

Fluttermac!

>>219958219958 It's okay. I always appreciate constructive criticism on my writing in order to improve my hobby

I liked it alot mate, wish you made it a little longer though.

But i see what you did there with naming his son Cider