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Sequel to Moonbeam. Follow along and learn how Princess Luna fares in reintegrating herself back into Equestrian society, and how her friends from Ponyville cope with the changes to their lives that being close to royalty brings.
D'aaaaaw so much sisterly love. This was a great chapter. I love the way you intertwine your story with the actual episodes, but this was just so perfect. This is getting better than Moonbeam in so many ways. Good Job. 
Also, is great to be able to read this here at fimfiction now. 
I'm not liking what NMM might or might not have found in the Mare Orientale. Could it be something to give her control over the stars? Perhaps she can throw off every navigator in Equestria, or worse, pummel Canterlot with giant meteors? I suppose time will tell, if we don't find out next chapter.
And I'm glad Luna has discovered how lonely Celestia is. I can't wait to see what she does to help her!
i'm quite impressed how you've woven the timeline together with the episodes from the show. The Running of the Leaves, the visit with Philomena, the Gala, and why Luna was not in attendance, everything makes sense.
What if the thing Nightmare Moon finds is what allows Discord to awaken? :conspiracytheoryKeanu:
Off to read Chapter 10!
>>238921 I dunno, after all, her aunt and uncle Orange of Manehattan could have badgered the Apples into it, maybe convinced them AJ would be too headstrong to settle down unless it was Arranged for her.
I'm worried about that fallen star NMM found. It seems like it has given her power in the dream realm she would not otherwise have. I'm calling Chamber of Secrets on this one, though I really don't want to see Feather Down possessed at all.
>>240733 Or, Uncle and Aunt Orange have arranged a marriage for AJ without telling AJ or Big Mac or Granny Smith. Doing an end run around their 'hick' relatives is just what I'd expect of Manehatten ponies. Why shoot, they're Oranges in a family of Apples. You know they're the odd ones.
You can not know how happy I am that someone else came to the same conclusion as to what the merging of those two's families would end up as, name wise. Now I don't have to try to awkwardly shove it into the story. 
It also marks the third unintentional pun that comes from my OC's names. (1) The Dewdrop Inn and 2) having the two farmers be (Pine) Needle and a Haystack.) I planned NONE of them; they just happened. It's things like this, and having Princess Celestia tell me to rewrite her parts because they aren't done well enough, that worry and excite me at the same time.
And, of course, thanks to everyone who has taken the time to comment, rate, track, or simply read the story. Your kind words provide me with tons of motivation to keep working as hard as I can to keep the chapters coming out at a regular pace. Thank you all very much!
hey, i understand your going through a block in the progress and stuff in life, and unfortunately when stuff happens some things get pushed back. i really love this story and the previous one made me just have to read this sequel. im not expecting the next chapter or the story to be finished soon at all, or don't know when you may even read this but i wanted to say even if the story is never picked up again, which i do hope it is, thank you for these great stories and i hope life treats you well. i pray that you meet great fortune and happiness, as you have given me with these stories. i love the writing style and the fact luna is given so much love (as we hardly see any of her 
). i am a very happy reader and will check back on this time to time, hoping each time and this hope will not die. be it 3 years from now, ill still check this story and see if there's an update. now im just rambling on, and mostly of all i just want to say thank you so much. i read this during school, had a 30 min study hall each day. i read this for a good portion of those days. so thanks! 
Before reading, wanting to say... First comment on last chapter, posted probably minutes after it came out, was posted 20 weeks and 1 day ago!?!?!?!? Why did you make us wait so long?! 
Good chapter. Nightmare Moon is going to drive ponies insane!
Thank you everyone for the kind words! Next chapter is already being worked on. With Celestia and Luna as my witness, you won't wait that long, or even close to that long, again! (Seriously, I'm a good groove right now, so while I'm always worried that I might jinx myself by making predictions, I will hopefully have the next chapter done by the end of the week)
Oh great... Hold on, got to go find the perfect picture to express my..... Reaction, to that cliffhanger 
Edit: Ok! Found it I think. This is probably the best one.
I Hope Applejack doesn't agree to the arranged marriage, Pine Needle's a nice guy, but personality wise Applejack would just walk all over him most of the time. That and she just seems to stubborn to agree to an arranged marriage that her absent parents set up (which seems like douche-bag parenting to me.)
Never forget murphys law.
Anything that can go wrong, will go go wrong, in the worst possible way.
First sorry for doubting on Celestia in my prev comment
Family reunion and revelations, with wise and right reasoning from Luna and good point to the ones who guessed that Pine Needle's parents were really proposing AppleJack as mate for him! Good Luck! 
I share the point of view of Feather down and Haystack, they all are going into a bit of sorrow but I hope for the best - don't give up Pine Needle
>>pokeplayer984: agree with your last line
So good story and Thanks to Laurence Brown
“Very well, let’s head home. We will have to tell Mr. and Mrs. Apple that the betrothal with Applejack we planned on will have to be forgotten.”
WHAT!? Wait, wait, wait! WHAT!? 
*A few minutes after gathering my thoughts* Life, why do you have to be so cruel? 
I am very confused.... His parents are basically taking his freedom away, in front of both princess', and it isn't against any law in any way? Are we sure this is a land of peace and happiness ruled by 2 kind princess'? Also why does that ruin his chances with applejack? His parents mentioned her once and bam, all hope is lost? Also how did they even know about applejack?, since they didn't know who he likes and as >>976017 pointed out, no mention of her parents before this, and no explanation of them makes it very very confusing.
>>976397 It kinda is actually... Rarity, Fluttershy, and Rainbow Dash were away from home in their cutie mark stories, so parents wouldn't show up. Twilight's parents were there for her exam. Pinkie, and AJ are shown at their home. AJ for a bit at first, but still there. Pinkie's family is shown, and AJ's family waves goodbye to her. AJ's parents weren't there tho. Only Big Mac, Granny Smith.
His parents DIDN'T know of his feelings for Applejack. The fact that they'd intended to set him up with her was purely coincidental.
Also, he's worried that the situation ruins his chances with Applejack because: What happens if he manages to win her over, and then she finds out that they were to be betrothed? Applejack would immediately be suspicious about his true motives towards her, and she likely wouldn't take kindly to that. Pine Needle also doesn't have the strongest backbone where Applejack is concerned, as we have seen, so he'd rather she simply ignored him than risk her being truly angry with him.
And despite the possible evidence, the situation with AJ's parents have never been fully addressed. Perhaps they're travelling salesponies for the Apple Farm, and aren't around very often? Which might explain how they met ponies in Stalliongrad, and why they weren't there when AJ took off. Of course, this is conjecture, but hey, it's possible...
Correct (as should be expected from the one who does the pre-reading).
Also, regarding Applejack's parents: As it has been stated by several, they're still up in limbo, show canon wise, as to where they are and what they do. However, there have been two times when, one would think, that they would have shown up if they were halfway responsible parents; the aforementioned Cutie Mark Chronicles episode, when AJ leaves the farm to go to Manehattan, and the series premier, when the Apple clan is having a big reunion during the Summer Sun Celebration. To me, there seems to be two main possible explanations; either they're dead, or they're simply irresponsible enough to go and do their own thing and not give a buck about what happens to the other Apples. I prefer the latter because, you know, death is bad (and the moment I decide to deadify them the show will most likely decide to show them alive after all), and it makes for a much better Apple Bloom origin (parents dropped her off after she was born, instead of giving birth to her and then dying, which is what prompts AJ to leave the farm for Manehattan, because seeing the newborn Bloom is too much for her to handle. Although that would make for a decent start for a sad fic I suppose, if it hasn't been done already) (and no, I won't write that, so feel free to grab it for yourself if you want).
So, that's my take on AJ's parents; irresponsible travelers/ adventurers who wander the world, and who are easily enough swayed by Pine Needle's parents to hook up a daughter they barely know to some other pony they don't know at all. Not a good example of parenting, I know, but I think it also goes a good ways in explaining AJ's maturity and stubbornness.
Oh no no no. You can't have Pine Needle just give up like that, just because of his parents' superficial accident. That's just too cruel. And nopony among his friends is supporting him as they should be. If Pine Needle is really after Applejack's heart, then a simple awkward truth is not something he should be afraid of. Is she not the element of honesty?
The wording in this chapter sounds too final and conclusive. I reread it twice to try to find a hint, a suggestion that it's not over yet for poor Pine Needle's heart. It broke mine.
Gah, I didn't even know I was shipping those two until just now. Perhaps I'm relating to your characters a bit too well.
Eep! Good catch, thank you sir! The changeling menace has been halted due to your diligence. Also, check out the fan art section for the story on EqD, (http://www.equestriadaily.com/2011/04/story-moonbeam.html) you'll see Heatwave's rendition of earth pony Twilight Sparkle
>>980967 Wonder why I didn't get an alert about this.... and Twilight batched the spell again and moved her forelegs back a foot. 
Silly Twilight.
Everyone saw the "matched up with AJ" thing coming.
Why was it obvious? Simple, it was the funniest and trolliest possibility!
"We will have to tell Mr. and Mrs. Apple that the betrothal with Applejack we planned on will have to be forgotten.”
I have a sick friend sleeping in the room next to me and I shocked myself by making a spirited attempt to eat my own fist to stifle the laughter that welled up. Seeing as he's still asleep, i think I succeeded 
This story just keeps getting better and better. I love the character development and how well it's handled.
Actually, "pardner" would be technically correct due to her accent making it sound that way. Just watch a few episodes where she says it and you'll hear it quite nicely.
Okay, so let's see what happened with this chapter...
Haystack is asked by Derpy to take over her job for a few weeks. That should be interesting, to say the least.
Luna gets invited to a celebration in another town and will be inviting her friends. Well, that puts Haystack out of the picture, sadly.
Finally, Pine Needle confesses his feelings to Applejack. About bloody time! Then again, take it from someone with plenty of experience. Never easy to confess your feelings to the one you love.
Also, there should be more fanfiction with Granny Smith. She's just great to have in the scene.
Will wait patiently for the next chapter.
See ya later!
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