First Lieutenant John "Aquila" Killinger was on a less than routine patrol flight, when he was somehow teleported to a different planet. Little does he know, he is the last hope for the inhabitants of this strange world.
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UPDATE!
THIS CHAPTER WAS GREAT BTW!
3266674 Good Lord! I just realized that it's been over a month since the last one! That needs to be fixed... WRITING MARATHON COMMENCE!
And I'm glad you like it!
3266693 Check my profile!
3266701 Wow. I don't think you realize what that means to me...
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Yes finally a new update!
This chapter was good except for one part that seemed a little weird to me. He told the soldiers to surrender their weapons in a possible hostile environment. Granted he is a friendly but most of them seemed too eager to 'Give' up their means of defending themselves. In a strange situation like this the best you should hope for is a cease fire agreement. Not only that but Killinger even declared himself as a member of an unknown(at the time) military force demanding cooperation. There wasn't even compromise just full disarmament. I understand he had rank but not enough over the other Lieutenant.
I don't know it just seems very strange that a group of soldiers who aren't under immediate threat would make themselves completely vulnerable to a potential hostile situation. (Killinger) I.E. Note: This is referring to the fact he claimed himself under a different military and non of the soldiers called him out on it.
Baaah... Ignore this ramble. That one scene just bugs me is all. Great story thus far, though. Looking forward to the next part.
~8chill
3267217 I see what you're talking about, but I left out some context (on purpose) that explains most of it. Things should become clearer in either the next chapter or the one after.
Regardless, that scene is a bit wonky in that regard, and I had a hard time writing it, which is probably why it turned out like that. As it stands, I might go back and rewrite that bit, maybe add an explanation or something in before shit goes down
As for the rambling, if nobody voiced their opinion, I would have no idea in Tartarus about what needed to be fixed or what people thought.
I feel sorry for the cadets at the Academy.. I mean, in the episode they looked like they were going to piss themselves out of fear from the shouting.. And Spitfire isn't even that scary.. Now, they have to deal with a Marine Sergeant...
Welp, they're fucked.
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I am absolutely loving this story. Great job, keep up the great work.
couple of things. We are not called soldiers, we are Marines. calling us a soldier is akin to an insult. Also the whole code name thing, no one does that. Lastly, The lance corporal should not be calling the gunny "sir", he may be a higher pay grade but he is still enlisted. The sir shit is just for boot camp, or for addressing an officer. Also ,not going to complain about the female being there because its for story purposes, but honestly the integration of females into the infantry is not going to happen for a while and if it does they will be put into separate all female platoons, mixing us would lead to way to many problems. These are just some small things that bugged me, feel free to ignore them, I just wanted to speak my piece.Other than that though, nice job. I'm really liking this story so far.
3267438 you know i would find it funny if like a teenage was playing Ace Combat with his xbox than got into a plan and can fly it with his contarol lol
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"Soldier": I'm sorry if I offended in any way. The only reason I used "soldier(s)" was because the group isn't entirely made up of Marines, so I wasn't really sure what to use. Any input on that would be appreciated, and I'll change the story accordingly.
Code Names: Yeah, I know. I'm just absolutely horrible with names. Thinking up a code name was easier than coming up with a full name. Eventually, everyone will have a full name, but that's still a work in progress. Plus, I have a plan for the code names later.
"Sir": I was actually just thinking about that, and I'm kicking myself for not recalling it while writing. It should be changed pretty soon.
Female Integration: That will be explained next chapter.
Thanks for the input!
3269765 Oh, it would be hilarious! I would love to see someone with only Ace Combat experience trying to fly a real aircraft. They'd probably last about two minutes before giving up... Or die horribly in a giant fireball
3268126 Thanks!
3270408 ya but just the look at there face at a teenage flying a MiG 31 foxhound with an xbox 360 conterll or a ps2 one lol
More please?
MOAR!
Moar please. I want to see what happens when the Marines get into [EXPLETIVE] up the [EXPLETIVE] of those manticores.
Ah ha!!! Yes the boot butter bar got arrested! if you must know I'm a marine & I was laughing all the way through this chapter! Keep it up.
Hey, I like this story, could you please add it to my group? It's called Air Force, also, will you be updating it anytime soon
3380401 I would be happy to add it. And, yes, there should be an update soon, I've just hit a massive wall made of writer's blocks and I can't find my sledgehammer. I've been chipping away at it everyday for the past month, and the next chapter is nearing completion!
We're not in Kansas anymore, are we?"
in 5TH grade there was a new girl in class the techer asked where se was from she was from Kansas and i said
evryone laghed
YO!!!!!!!! a marine and his name is sergeant Johnson..... HOO-RAAAAAAAH!!!!!!!!!!!
"bat" luck Luna is racist! (Just kidding, I love Luna ^^)
The 'nice leaf' thing made me laugh.
I already love the Seargent
7078694 imma have to use that on new cadets... XD AFJROTC for the win.
I fucking LOVE this guy HAHA!!
bro why is this so fugin funny