Hmmm, not bad, I love the more playful interpretation of Luna. I'm giving it 5 stars

I don't know why this story has a rating of only 2, it's actually pretty good and it's interesting to find out a possible bit of Equestrian (or at least Princess Celestia's) history.

Seems fun! tracking

think I'll track this as well.  imagine Tia freaking out at her big 5-0-0-0.  nice use of Lu's archacic equestrian, too.

Celly's only 5000? I thought she'd be at least 6 digits. All the same, I definately want to see how this plays out.

Good job so far, I'm interested in what angle you're taking the rest of the story. Is Twilight going to have to keep the surprise secret from Celestia? Looking forward to the next!

Five stars and tracking. Keep it up.

Captured Pinkie PERFECTLY!

Lol I love it! :P

Thank you everybody for your kind words It really means a lot to me and I'm glad you enjoy it. If anypony has any questions or notices any mistakes I've made feel free to ask me. Thank you again.

I would say the chapters are a little short, but if you update even half as often as you have so far it will be more than an impressive amount of work. I am liking this quite a bit so far.

Brony of FunnyJunk reporting in.

Just read chapter 5 and I must say that this is very well written.

I cannot wait for the next one.

I really like this, but it just ends at such a...

Can't wait for next one

good chapter. the only thing wrong is you described derpy as blue and not grey.

Sounds like a truely spectacular suprise they arranged.

Epic!

>>243344243344

Thank ya, it took a while to write this bit to tell the truth.

>>243435243435

Thanks! I wanted it to be something no one would expect, I didn't even expect the integration of the Rainboom until I was writing it out So I guess it was a surprise for everypony! Even the author.

Lots of stories use an eclipse, and I think it fits just nicely with yours

Tis always nice to see stories that give Twilight at least one hobby/extracaricular activity not present in the show.

And somepony create that image a desktop wallpaper resolution now.

D'awwwww moment with Twilight .

Great chapter, I look forward to reading more.

>>247645247645

I agree, this must become a real image.

>>247645247645

If I could create art, believe me, I would do it.

>>247846247846

Thanks! Although there's only two chapters left now

Until I have an idea on what to write next of course

>>248145248145

Hopefully someday an artist will read this story and be inspired.

>>248152248152

That would be wonderful

I knew Twilight would totally go the extra mile with her gift

Zap Apple Cider!?

Did anypony else instantly think of Powerthirst when they read that?

Luna sitting on a dolphin. I see what you did there That picture is cute, and its funny to imagine Luna sitting on a dolphin statue in the middle of the royal garden.

Luna got to show off her night.

>>251381251381

Aha! I was hoping somepony would notice

Here, have a muffin as a reward, no Derpy, no!

Image: http://derpyhoovesnews.com/albums/albums/userpics/10001/normal_derpy_muffins.png

Epic

>>251422251422 Great chapter, and that image warms my heart :). Warms it with Muffiny goodness.

I'm glad I tacked this. It was a nice little read, nothing too grand or amazing, but that's what made it really good. Looking forward to seeing some more of your work

>>255674255674

Thank you!

That's what I was going for to be honest, so I'm very glad you like it for what it is

/5

That was brilliant, I really enjoyed this story

Now, of course, one must think: When's Luna's birthday?

>>255795255795

Winter Solstice.

>>255800255800

Eyyyyup!

Epic

lovely, nice, and leaves you feeling good. Extremely enjoyable read!

>>255982255982

I'm very glad you liked it!

Very nice story with a great ending.  Thumbs up (no more 5 stars bah)

This was very nice. Please write more stories.

verry well written.... i think u should submit this to EQD it should pass through there filters with ease...

>>257983257983

Thanks! I'll get round to it when I have some ideas don't worry

>>258262258262

A friend is currently proof reading it and stuff, once she's done that, I'll submit it

>>258347258347

i think it doesnt need any proof reading...... but it doesnt hurt to have some one go over it again ..... some times my eyes miss things

>>251422251422 WHY DERPY HAVE  NO WINGS??

Cool pic though

Make one about Luna's birthday!!

>>259045259045

I would but it'd kinda be the same thing just substituting the name Celestia with Luna. I wanna mix it up in the next thing I write, probably some AppleDash or something

>>259121259121 Hmmmm.... You could make it different. Somehow. It would be amazing

>>259168259168

If I get a sudden good idea, I may write a short bit about it.

>>259194259194

>>258651258651

EqD got back to me, they said it was alright, but not good enough to be featured, which is what I expected. I wrote this because I enjoyed it after all, not so I could be on EqD.

>>301843301843

i feel insulted that they said is good enough to be featured

but that EQD for ya

WEEEEEE! Neds moar alcohol!!11!

loller. Awesome story. Full of lols.

Comment section looked lonely so I decided to speak up.

This is a nice story, not too simple, and not extremely elaborate. A good example of a slice of life story if I do say so myself.

Hope it's a good ending, I'd love a happy ending.

>>465289465289

Thank you very much! I'm glad you're enjoying it, I hope you enjoy the rest too!

Just finished it.

Absolutely fantastic.

>>475001475001

Thank you so much, kind sir! :D

I had to stop reading to comment. Twilight hugging Spike just because: bucking beautiful.

Each chapter was like a delicious slice of life. Together they make one wonderful pie.

>>489020489020

Thank you! I'm glad you liked it!

“Why the long face sister?” said Luna, sitting down next to her, laughing inwardly at her little joke.

“Duh! For double the fun!” said Pinkie smiling, back pushing the cannons and box forward.

I see what you did there!

I'm absolutely devastated by the lack of comments! So I'm adding my own!

This is excellent by far and can't wait to read the rest!

Pretty easy to read, and I couldn't stop but just being happy after reading this!

Very well written! Awesome story!!

>>508947508947

That was precisely my aim

I'm so glad you enjoyed it!

>>203004203004 Remember the line where Luna says "it is more of a day to celebrate her arrival into this world"? By all accounts this would mean that, while it was only 5000 years since she manifested in the world of ponies, she could've existed for much longer.

I'm loving this story already. It's got the glorious sweet tone that comes from apotheosis by fanon.

And now I've got a craving for milkshakes.

“GOODNIGHT EVERYPONY!” yelled Pinkie Pie.

Did she kiss her hoof as well?

Brings tears to eyes.

>>649632649632

Thank you very much for your kind words.

Cool cover art!

>>690542690542

I know! Conicer drew it for me, he is super awesome! :)

Omitted word.

“Oh, o’ course! Would you me to get ya a drink for after?”

I believe you meant

“Oh, o’ course! Would you like me to get ya a drink for after?”

Loving the story though, positively mood-making.

>>715640715640

Indeed I did mean that, thanks for pointing it out.

Glad you're enjoying it too.

A good story, with a lovely ending. A bit simple in prose at times, amongst other minor issues, but overall a fun read. Good job.

So does this mean that Celestia's mane and tail are pink at night?

>>793502793502

I'll leave that up for your imagination to decide. :3

Heartwarming

Always nice to have a fic like this to read. Straightforward and to the point. Overall it was a sweet read and all the characters are faithful to the source. Good job mate!

>>236132236132

Derpy is a bluish-grey, so really, either works.

Anyway, DIS SHALL B GUD (spoken in a true royal canterlot this)

>>800328800328

Highlight. Copy. Paste.

Heartwarming

I don't know if this is where you got it, but the title, An Unexpected Party is the name of the first chapter of The Hobbit.

This was a very lovely little read. It's nice to find a story with no real conflict but still have that sweet, slice-of-life climax. It was very heartwarming and touching, and had just the right amount of silliness to make it all the better. Well done. :)

You spelled "organise" wrong (it's "organize")

>>15207031520703

I'm British, where we spell words correctly. :P

I love this story. Part of me wants to edit it, though.

>implying story is badly written

NO NO NO, not like that. I know you had those other two editors, Reevie and Alex, but I feel like I can help make it even better.

If interested, PM me.

>>15207131520713

That is a genius comeback, my good sir. I like you a lot already.

Image: //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Rainbow_dealwithit.png

>>15207031520703 He spelled "organise" British. Just another America/Europe spelling change.

>>15594981559498

THOSE CHANGES CONFUSE ME, DAMNIT!!

I never know if it's a British thing or an actual mistake, so I always just say it.

When Luna got all like omg I need to raise the moon I thought of that sound from the metal gear solid games.

Very nice. I like how rainbow was able to interact with spitfire without fangirling.

That was nice.

I should have mentioned this months ago but whatever, I used the name Cloud Chaser before it became canon in the show.

I could really do with a sausage sandwich right now...

No serously i just have this craving.

Welp time to take out the frying pan (grabs frying pan)

Oh this is gonna be so good (take sausages from fridge, puts on hob)