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    Rainbow Dash visits a university famous for archeology. But will the fact live up to fiction?
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  • T Erase and Rewind

    Two ponies, equally but uniquely flawed, must decide if they have enough wits between them to cobble together a stable family. A story about trust, loss, severe neurological disorder, and ice cream.
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  • E Bittersweet Music

    Fancypants: supportive and obedient husband, or sneaky rapscallion with a heart of gold? You decide!
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  • E The Death of Daring Do: The Engine of Eternity

    Rainbow Dash takes the real-life archeologist Derring-Do on an adventure to heal her broken wing and mend her bitter spirit... but a deadly, unbreakable curse of death pushes them both to the limit.
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  • E Flight of the Magpie

    Equestria's most elusive and audacious thief finally goes up against Equestria's most brilliant inspector: "The Magpie VS The Lens" is a newspaper headline seven years in the making!
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  • Sunday
    Bottle 1: Karrakaz's "In Celebration of a Hundred"

    Author: Karrakaz

    Featured story: "Sizable Differences" (Top Ranked, 18 November, 2014)

    Least viewed story at that time: "In Celebration of a Hundred"

    Completion: Read up to chapter 100, so far. Naturally.

    Half the fun of vignettes is the challenge of figuring out what's going on when you've been thrown into the middle of something that's already two sentences away from being over and done with. I've said it before, and I'll say it again: "short" is always harder to write than "long". You have to wring every last drop of meaning out of every last word, and each sentence has to pull double duty by setting some combination of scene, plot, tone, mood, character voice, and so on.

    That being said. Despite the shortness of each story in "In Celebration of a Hundred", I don't think I would refer to it as a collection of vignettes... at least, not as I'm used to thinking of them. The stories aren't really worried about sculpting a powerful plot twist by using sentences that are tight and controlled as humanly possible. In fact, they feel quite the opposite: light, fluffy, airy... loose and casual. They aren't compact stories so much as "moments in time." They're more worried about conveying emotions, feelings, and average, everyday insights that reinforce the characters we're already familiar with. Any one of these stories could be taking place in between the official episodes. As I advanced from chapter to chapter, I noticed a trend: as soon as I realized which character the chapter was about, that chapter was "over" and the rest of the words were simply part of the climax. I can think of a few times where the answer was given to me explicitly. In chapter 41: Meditation, for example, a single descriptive word makes it plainly obvious after I'd already reached a conclusion on my own. I think I prefer uncertainty, as it adds mystery to an already ephemeral experience.

    If I had one complaint about this collection, it's that none of the stories (that I've read so far, at least) actually surprised me in any big way. I began craving a plot-related twist of some sort, or a sudden BANG of conflicted emotions. Some of the stories do involve powerful emotions and interesting surprise reveals (Chapter 43 contains a particularly clever idea), but little or nothing in the way of complicated storytelling devices... nothing that spins the reader around, forcing them to rethink everything they've previously read (Case in point, Chapter 42: Echo. This story contains a lovely plot twist... but puts it right at the start of the story, instead of the very end. Chapter 48, on the other hand, managed to make me think "Wait. What? Whoa!"). In the end, that's not the purpose of these stories. It takes an entire loaf of "day in the life of", using all the characters we know and love, and slathers on a healthy dose of "Dawww!" If I had to pick one word to sum up this story's intentions, it would be "touching."

    Technical Issues: This is one instance where I can't complain about an author switching tenses. That's a load off my mind. Basic editing errors are sprinkled throughout, which makes me wonder if this is an unedited stream of consciousness. If so, the author might pursue some outside help with spelling, grammar and formatting: being unable to silence your own internal editor can kill the creative process. In the end, though, the errors weren't enough to pull me out of it. Perhaps the rapid-fire pace made me more forgiving.

    Plot Issues: Part of the fun is figuring out which characters we're dealing with in any given chapter. Names are rarely given out at the start, so I often had to fill in the blanks myself. There's a constant sense of weightlessness--a kind of emotional vertigo--as I grasp at straws and search for something solid to stand on. I'd call that a plus in this case. In a few stories, we never even get a full explanation of exactly what's going on. I approve!

    Narrative Voice: For the most part, all the third person stories "sounded" the same, like different bedtime stories being read by the same parent. This is fine, because most of them evoked a similar kind of down-to-earthy feeling. The voice only changes when we switch to first person, where the accent, vocabulary or personality gives us a much-needed clue about who the narrator is.

    Final Verdict: If you just want to sit down and enjoy a few quiet, introspective moments with the characters you've grown to love, without any surprises or challenges to jar your expectations, than this is the story for you. I'm glad I started this series on this particular story, because it's made entirely out of casual, relaxing, lounge-in-the-sun fun. The short length makes them easy to digest, and allows us to focus on a kind of story that would get really irritating as a full length epic. I wonder if this is what trashy romance novels feel like to those who adore such simple escapism. Like that genre, this story will not necessarily appeal to everyone... but I'm glad I gave it a try.

    Oh wait, the author uses both indentation and block paragraph formatting at the same time. IT'S CRAP! IT'S ALL CRAP!

    Final Thought: Apparently, Celestia really hates bananas. And here I thought it was just me.

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  • Sunday
    Just for Giggles

    There's a game my brother invented years ago. I'd like to share it with you now. It's called "Philosophy".

    Here's how you play it: Go to Wikipedia and click the "Random Article" link. From there, click the first link you can find in the article. Ignore any links to language or word pronunciation, links to disambiguation pages, and warnings about neutrality or quality disputes: only links in the main body of the article qualify. Once you reach the next article do it again, over and over, always following the first significant link.

    When you reach the article for Philosophy, you win.

    Here, play along with me! Here's my random seed link:

    Slieve Bearnagh (from the Irish: Sliabh Bearna) is a mountain in the Mourne Mountains, Northern Ireland.

    READY!? GO!

    A mountain is a large landform that stretches above the surrounding land in a limited area, usually in the form of a peak.

    A landform is a natural feature of the Earth's surface. Landforms together make up a given terrain, and their arrangement on the landscape or the study of same is known as topography.

    Terrain, or land relief, is the vertical and horizontal dimension of land surface. When relief is described underwater, the term bathymetry is used.

    Underwater is the realm below the surface of water where the water exists in a natural feature (called a body of water) such as an ocean, sea, lake, pond, or river.

    Water is a transparent fluid which forms the world's streams, lakes, oceans and rain, and is the major constituent of the fluids of living things. As a chemical compound, a water molecule contains one oxygen and two hydrogen atoms that are connected by covalent bonds.

    A chemical compound is a pure chemical substance consisting of two or more different chemical elements that can be separated into simpler substances by chemical reactions.

    In chemistry, a chemical substance is a form of matter that has constant chemical composition and characteristic properties.

    Chemistry is a branch of physical science that studies the composition, structure, properties and change of matter.

    The following outline is provided as an overview of and topical guide to physical science: Physical science – branch of natural science that studies non-living systems, in contrast to the biological sciences.

    The following outline is provided as an overview of and topical guide to natural science: Natural science – major branch of science, that tries to explain and predict nature's phenomena, based on empirical evidence.

    Natural science is a major branch of science, that tries to explain and predict nature's phenomena, based on empirical evidence.

    Science (from Latin scientia, meaning "knowledge"[1]) is a systematic enterprise that builds and organizes knowledge in the form of testable explanations and predictions about the universe.

    Knowledge is a familiarity, awareness or understanding of someone or something, such as facts, information, descriptions, or skills, which is acquired through experience or education by perceiving, discovering, or learning.

    A fact (derived from the Latin factum, see below) is something that has really occurred or is actually the case. The usual test for a statement of fact is verifiability, that is, whether it can be demonstrated to correspond to experience.

    Experience is the knowledge or mastery of an subject or event gained through involvement in or exposure to it. Terms in philosophy, such as "empirical knowledge" or "a posteriori knowledge," are used to refer to knowledge based on experience.

    GOOOOOAL!!! Fifteen clicks. Not a bad run.

    Guess what? It's almost impossible to lose this game. Almost every page in Wikipedia eventually leads back to Philosophy. What happens if you keep going? You go to the article for "Reality", and then you have to muster up the courage to click a link labeled "actually exists". What happens if you go deeper? Go ahead and see.

    If you get bored of random links, try starting with an article for something you like. Which is closer to Philosophy: Religion, or Science? (Turns out it's a tie at 4 clicks. The debate continues!) How close is Neil Armstrong? How close is the Empty Set, Norse Mythology, the Aurora Borealis, Pumpkin Pie, Dadaism, or Raggedy Anne dolls?

    I have yet to find any other irreducible destinations or--dare I say it--infinite recursion loops. I wonder if Wikipedia's formatting standards are specifically designed to avoid such loops. If anyone can find one, please let me know. I'm very curious.

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  • 4w, 4d
    How to pace your stories, part 1

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  • 10w, 3d
    Reports off my assassination by crazed gunman are greatly exaggerated

    We've got to stop meeting like this.

    So it only now occurred to me that it's been awhile since I did anything on the site. On top of this, my last blog-post was about the whole city being locked down by a manhunt for a mentally unwell person with a firearm. From what I understand, this was the deadliest attack on the RCMP since the Mayerthorpe tragedy in 2005. I've never been more thankful of the dangerous and risky work the police do, and I grieve for their loss.

    Since I haven't been active on the site for quite some time, I just thought I'd mention that I'm still alive. No melodrama intended. The real reasons for my inactivity are much more banal: life happened. My poorly paying job has eaten up nearly all of my free time, and I've been having a lot of money problems lately. The sad thing is I enjoy my work--except for the long hours--but if things don't pick up soon I'll have to start looking elsewhere.

    As for the state of my writing... I've been pretty sad lately. I work as a taxi driver, which gives me some pretty brutal hours: I get up at three-thirty in the morning every weekday and work about eleven hours. Fortunately, most of that is waiting for the next call... in a sweltering hot parking lot, in a car with busted air conditioning. Thank goodness it's starting to cool off. This leaves me with a lot of free time, and it's all so very boring... utterly, dreadfully dull, in fact. You think I'd be able to get a lot of writing done on my nifty tablet computer. The problem is, It's just not the same as sitting in a McDonalds and staring out a window: I have to constantly listen to the dispatcher, so I can't go into the usual "writer's trance" that allows me to knock off a couple thousand words in a single afternoon. But I have been trying my best, and I have slowly been getting used to my new schedule.

    Here's where things get depressing. Awhile ago I finished a Pinkie Pie fic that I'm modestly proud of, and it's the first thing I've written while "on the job." Finally, I feel like I'm beginning to put all that wasted time to some good use. The problem? It went completely unnoticed. Even after several months, it has no comments and no likes. The only views it has are from me, visiting it to check on the spelling. Being completely ignored might be the worst thing in the world. Even if they hated it, at least you know they read it. They formed an opinion. You got a reaction. But nothing at all? The silence is deafening. It's gotten me thinking about how little attention I seem to get. On the one side, I don't want to seem like a petulant child waving his arms and screaming... but at the end of the day, art is meant to be perceived. Is a little honest feedback really too much to ask?

    I quietly forgot about the story. Just today, I think I realized why it didn't get any attention. I think there was one minor thing I forgot to do: I didn't actually publish the story. I uploaded it to the site, but didn't actually submit it for public display.

    Yeah.

    So I'll be publishing the story as soon as I've finished this blog post. I hope you like it. I'm also working on another story that I've had in the works for awhile, and it's actually been fun to write. I don't remember the last time I had fun writing. Maybe things aren't as depressing as I think they are.

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A recent plague of freakishly strong thunderstorms has been ravaging Ponyville's borders, and somepony has to put a stop to it. Twilight Sparkle, Applejack and Rainbow Dash must venture into the depths of the untamed Everfree forest, further than ever before, and find the source of these natural disasters... and in so doing, they uncover a being that is beyond all natural law.

Set in the early days of the mane six's friendship, before discord's redemption, and before the King of Shadows or the Queen of Lies were struck down. Don't let the cutesy prologue fool you... this story is a bleak and foreboding glimpse at a fragment of Equestria's ancient history. The story is complete, and chapters will be released every one or two days.

First Published
5th May 2013
Last Modified
11th May 2013

This is actually really good so far! I'm surprised there aren't any comments yet.

Onto the next chapter! Lovin' Dash's attitude!

This is awesome so far, keep it up!

I have a distinct feeling that twilight wasn't the one that saved her...

A Power Greater - Witch Mountain

#5 · 81w, 4d ago · 1 · · Prologue ·

Well, this story has potential.  A lot of it.

However, after reading the prologue, I have two things to say:

One is that there are a few capitalization errors sprinkled throughout the narrative, mostly when a new sentence starts.  

The other is my opinion that it was all going a bit too fast.  You seemed to be jumping from voice to voice without much heed to the overall description and imagery, and without those two elements the newly introduced characters felt more flat than they should be.  They all felt a little too excitable as well.

And that actually brings up another point.  Don't overuse your exclamation points.  I know you want to show emotion and conviction in your dialogue, but exclamation points are better used in moderation.  If written sparingly, a well placed exclamation can come alive and spur adrenaline through the reader, but here, when it seems like you liberally coated it with the symbols (as in, almost every other line uses one), it feels as if everyone's head is going to explode because they had recently inhaled a veritable mountain of candy.

Beyond those three qualms, though, this looks like it'll be a fun ride.  World building, good writing, and interesting concepts.

I'm game.

#6 · 81w, 4d ago · 2 · · Prologue ·

Im so lost right now...but good so far! :pinkiehappy:

Good gravy! Forty favorites in a single day? Is that... normal?

This is the first story I've posted that actually reached the front page. A big thanks to everyone who Liked and Favorited! And, as always, it immediately gets one single dislike. I really want to know what that guy was thinking, actually... that's what I'm most curious about.

>>2532149

Thank you very much for the frank and forthright comment. I'll have to take a closer look at the remaining chapters from here on out: not too late to edit those more carefully for capitalization problems.

As for the hectic speed and saccharin punctuation, it's primarily an attempt to call-back earlier generations of the MLP franchise... but that's still no excuse for poor writing, of course. Also, I cut the prologue by at least a third of it's original length (under the advice of my editor) which might explain the choppiness. I'm curious to know if the problems persist into later chapters. If so, then Houston: we have a problem.

>>2532319

Erm... my first chapters tend to be total non-sequitors, designed to set up the rest of the story in some unexpected way. "The Death of Daring Do" was the same. I'm beginning to think I have a problem.

umm quick question why does it say complete this story doesnt sound complete to me atleast i hope its not complete cause man this is good. so if your readin this could ya tell me if the complete is just an error or if this just leads to another story.

>>2532585

The story is listed as complete because all the chapters are online, fully written and edited, but they haven't been published yet. I'm going to make a new chapter available every one or two days. This way, there's no chance I'll lose interest and leave the story unfinished forever. If this is against the rules, somebody please let me know immediately.

>>2532618

Alright thanks for the info

And so the plot thickens...

Reminds me of the Blair witch project...

>>2532618

I am pretty sure Complete is only for fanfics that have all their chapters online and published.  I'd refer to the site rules if I were you.

EDIT: I see no rules regarding it in the FAQ section. I would think it's supposed to be as I stated above, though. From a reader's perspective, this is not complete. I can not, for example, download this to my ereader and go read it. It is incomplete until I can do just that, in my opinion.

Looks great!:pinkiehappy:

But I'm confused at the complete tag:rainbowhuh:, is this it, or will you be adding more?

Edit: Ah, just reread the description, all good now.:twilightsheepish:

Love the vibe those figures in the tree are giving off, SPOOOOOoooky:pinkiecrazy:

And I would like to imagine the homemaking scene was done in a montage.:moustache:

Can't wait for the next release.:pinkiehappy:

Where the hell is Rainbow Dash? How has she not found them yet?

>>2533718 Your second sentence doesn't make sense. I'm sure you mean 'confused'?:unsuresweetie:(sorry)

>>2533583

As some may have already guessed: Yes, this story's original title was in fact "The Mare Witch Project." But then I noticed somebody else already had a fic by that name. Ah, well.

>>2533604

Hm. There does seem to be a lot of confusion and/or frustration about this, and it does seem vaguely deceitful on my part. I have sent a PM to one of the mods requesting clarification.

>>2533604

Update from a Moderator: The "Complete" tag is, indeed, for stories that are fully published: not just fully written. The story has been set to Incomplete. Terribly sorry, all.

Blair Witch Project

... what the devil is going on? I MUST KNOW!

Keeps getting weirder and weirder. Hope Applejack doesn't lose her nerves.

wow the ponies lack lots of knowledge of how natural weather works :twilightsmile:

Well thats what you get when it can be manipulated by pegasi

This is so interesting!:derpyderp1:

This is really heating up.

MOAR!

I'm suspecting that their's more to the stick figures than one would think . . .

"An it harm none, do what ye will." (the Wiccan Rede)

“Lions, tigers and bears...
Oh My.:trollestia:

Another nice update :pinkiehappy: You do masterful suspense writing:moustache:

Is the centaur a vision of a future encounter, or just a dream I wonder.

Can't wait for more,:pinkiehappy:

For some reason, I keep expecting Mr. Jiggles to show up... wouldn't that be perfect? :pinkiecrazy:

Edit: Bitter... almonds. I see what you did there. And, utterly mundane as it is, that had me spooked for the whole chapter. Well played, good sir... well played.

>>2542445

You get a gold star! Unless you just Googled the phrase, of course.

>>2543212

You have no idea how happy I am that you recognized it as being centaur shaped, even though I never actually used the word "centaur." The ponies wouldn't have such a word: it's half horse, and half... what?

I suppose that didn't stop them from having a minotaur.

>>2543413

But Mr Jiggles has appeared.

Look behind you.

>>2543557

Renard Leblanc turned around to look at Mr. Jiggles.

~Fin~

>>2543557 My pleasure to sooth your fears:twilightsmile:

Though I'm still confused at the "Bird-like head" part.:rainbowhuh:

I've got 2 theories:

1) The centaur has some weird, horned bird head:twilightoops:

2) The centaur was wearing a helmet:moustache:

I have most believe in the second one, but if it's the first one, because you mentioned GW1, I suspect Tirek:moustache:

>>2543835

I do so love fan speculation! I will say this: My primary concern was to take inspiration from G1, but I didn't use any canonical characters. The named characters in the prologue are, as far as I know, my own original creations.

The dream monster certainly resembles Tirek, though... doesn't he? :trixieshiftright:

Hmm... An axe next to the chicken coop? Looks like we're have Scootaloo tonight!:pinkiecrazy:

Good thing they didn't see a headless chicken running around.

I am so glad I decided to read this.

YOU ARE SO DAMN GOOD AT DESCRIPTIONS!!!!:flutterrage:

:heart: it!:pinkiehappy:

Also a big fan of your characterization, how long did you spend writing this story?

My first thought was hobbit hole, but based of the reading (and the prologue:moustache:) I'm getting more of a Baba Yaga vibe:yay:.

I'm just WAITING for the stick men to become animated, it's just screaming at me.:coolphoto:

Can't wait for more:pinkiehappy:

Edit: Quick error though.

“Maybe,” said, “but we don’t have to.

Forgot the "she".

Damn, this is good. I can picture it all.

oh no applejack cannot unsee

And thus, Pinkie Pie struck again.

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