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  • E Nothing is Scarier

    Applebloom doesn't believe in monsters. She knows.
    1,456 words · 1,413 views  ·  116  ·  0
  • E Biased and Incomplete

    Rainbow Dash visits a university famous for archeology. But will the fact live up to fiction?
    11,414 words · 3,483 views  ·  192  ·  3
  • T Erase and Rewind

    Two ponies, equally but uniquely flawed, must decide if they have enough wits between them to cobble together a stable family. A story about trust, loss, severe neurological disorder, and ice cream.
    11,118 words · 1,104 views  ·  156  ·  2
  • E Bittersweet Music

    Fancypants: supportive and obedient husband, or sneaky rapscallion with a heart of gold? You decide!
    12,619 words · 910 views  ·  114  ·  2
  • E The Death of Daring Do: The Engine of Eternity

    Rainbow Dash takes the real-life archeologist Derring-Do on an adventure to heal her broken wing and mend her bitter spirit... but a deadly, unbreakable curse of death pushes them both to the limit.
    80,538 words · 825 views  ·  90  ·  2
  • T Appletheosis

    Just your average, garden-variety talking snake. In an apple tree. What could go wrong?
    18,225 words · 768 views  ·  87  ·  3
  • E Nothing to Say

    A young Pinke Pie discovers a spooky neighbor she never knew about, and just can't leave well enough alone.
    11,442 words · 208 views  ·  39  ·  1
  • E Flight of the Magpie

    Equestria's most elusive and audacious thief finally goes up against Equestria's most brilliant inspector: "The Magpie VS The Lens" is a newspaper headline seven years in the making!
    31,852 words · 251 views  ·  27  ·  1

Blog Posts21

  • Wednesday
    Welcome to "Lightning in a Bottle"! Or something!

    8 comments · 42 views
  • 3w, 5d
    How to pace your stories, part 1

    1 comments · 56 views
  • 9w, 4d
    Reports off my assassination by crazed gunman are greatly exaggerated

    We've got to stop meeting like this.

    So it only now occurred to me that it's been awhile since I did anything on the site. On top of this, my last blog-post was about the whole city being locked down by a manhunt for a mentally unwell person with a firearm. From what I understand, this was the deadliest attack on the RCMP since the Mayerthorpe tragedy in 2005. I've never been more thankful of the dangerous and risky work the police do, and I grieve for their loss.

    Since I haven't been active on the site for quite some time, I just thought I'd mention that I'm still alive. No melodrama intended. The real reasons for my inactivity are much more banal: life happened. My poorly paying job has eaten up nearly all of my free time, and I've been having a lot of money problems lately. The sad thing is I enjoy my work--except for the long hours--but if things don't pick up soon I'll have to start looking elsewhere.

    As for the state of my writing... I've been pretty sad lately. I work as a taxi driver, which gives me some pretty brutal hours: I get up at three-thirty in the morning every weekday and work about eleven hours. Fortunately, most of that is waiting for the next call... in a sweltering hot parking lot, in a car with busted air conditioning. Thank goodness it's starting to cool off. This leaves me with a lot of free time, and it's all so very boring... utterly, dreadfully dull, in fact. You think I'd be able to get a lot of writing done on my nifty tablet computer. The problem is, It's just not the same as sitting in a McDonalds and staring out a window: I have to constantly listen to the dispatcher, so I can't go into the usual "writer's trance" that allows me to knock off a couple thousand words in a single afternoon. But I have been trying my best, and I have slowly been getting used to my new schedule.

    Here's where things get depressing. Awhile ago I finished a Pinkie Pie fic that I'm modestly proud of, and it's the first thing I've written while "on the job." Finally, I feel like I'm beginning to put all that wasted time to some good use. The problem? It went completely unnoticed. Even after several months, it has no comments and no likes. The only views it has are from me, visiting it to check on the spelling. Being completely ignored might be the worst thing in the world. Even if they hated it, at least you know they read it. They formed an opinion. You got a reaction. But nothing at all? The silence is deafening. It's gotten me thinking about how little attention I seem to get. On the one side, I don't want to seem like a petulant child waving his arms and screaming... but at the end of the day, art is meant to be perceived. Is a little honest feedback really too much to ask?

    I quietly forgot about the story. Just today, I think I realized why it didn't get any attention. I think there was one minor thing I forgot to do: I didn't actually publish the story. I uploaded it to the site, but didn't actually submit it for public display.


    So I'll be publishing the story as soon as I've finished this blog post. I hope you like it. I'm also working on another story that I've had in the works for awhile, and it's actually been fun to write. I don't remember the last time I had fun writing. Maybe things aren't as depressing as I think they are.

    3 comments · 73 views
  • 24w, 2d
    [no title]

    Taking the day off. Not exactly a good time to be a taxi driver.

    Hopes and prayers, people. Hopes and prayers.

    0 comments · 35 views
  • 35w, 3d
    Reports of my orbital bombardment have been greatly exaggerated

    So I'm a taxi driver. I just got back from work. I work the day shift, which means I get up at the ungodly hour of two forty five ante meridiem... but if you want to catch a few airport calls right off the bat, you gotta get up pretty early in the morning. That's just the way it is. Anyways, I was lucky enough that I got a call to go pick up a bunch of pilots from a local hotel and transport them to the airport. I love pilots because you never know what part of the world they just came back from, and they have the most amazing stories. They also tip using all sorts of foreign currencies, which I set aside for posterity. Before we go any further I'd just like to point out that these were intelligent, responsible, and highly skilled men and women who are not given to exaggeration or palaver and every last one of them was stone cold sober as a judge (well okay, they'd gotten totally tanked the day before, but not the day of. We can't expect them to completely miss out on St. Patrick's day, after all).

    It's about five or six o'clock. The sun has yet to rise. The sky is still midnight black. Just as I begin driving onto the rotary that leads to the highway, the pilot next to me points ahead and shouts "what's that!?" We all look up and see a gigantic ball of molten fire dropping straight down from the sky. It's directly ahead of us, in the dead center of our field of view. Couldn't miss it if you tried. In reality, it's probably a few kilometers away... but right then and there, I was convinced it was going to slam onto the roof of the building across the road and create a mushroom-shaped cloud of fire surrounded by several expanding saturn-rings of energy. We watch it fall for a few seconds, awestruck. I try not to panic and lose control of the vehicle because we're approaching highway speeds. The fireball falls about halfway towards the ground, then breaks apart and sputters harmlessly into a couple short-lived embers.

    Not many fanfiction writers can say they survived an extinction event, eh? Now if you'll excuse me, I have to check the news. I heard on the radio that it--whatever it was--was visible for kilometers around, but that nobody knows what it was. If I begin to exhibit strange and mysterious superpowers, I shall update this post immediately.

    That is all. Carry on.

    16 comments · 154 views
  • ...

A recent plague of freakishly strong thunderstorms has been ravaging Ponyville's borders, and somepony has to put a stop to it. Twilight Sparkle, Applejack and Rainbow Dash must venture into the depths of the untamed Everfree forest, further than ever before, and find the source of these natural disasters... and in so doing, they uncover a being that is beyond all natural law.

Set in the early days of the mane six's friendship, before discord's redemption, and before the King of Shadows or the Queen of Lies were struck down. Don't let the cutesy prologue fool you... this story is a bleak and foreboding glimpse at a fragment of Equestria's ancient history. The story is complete, and chapters will be released every one or two days.

First Published
5th May 2013
Last Modified
11th May 2013

This is actually really good so far! I'm surprised there aren't any comments yet.

Onto the next chapter! Lovin' Dash's attitude!

This is awesome so far, keep it up!

I have a distinct feeling that twilight wasn't the one that saved her...

A Power Greater - Witch Mountain

#5 · 80w, 5d ago · 1 · · Prologue ·

Well, this story has potential.  A lot of it.

However, after reading the prologue, I have two things to say:

One is that there are a few capitalization errors sprinkled throughout the narrative, mostly when a new sentence starts.  

The other is my opinion that it was all going a bit too fast.  You seemed to be jumping from voice to voice without much heed to the overall description and imagery, and without those two elements the newly introduced characters felt more flat than they should be.  They all felt a little too excitable as well.

And that actually brings up another point.  Don't overuse your exclamation points.  I know you want to show emotion and conviction in your dialogue, but exclamation points are better used in moderation.  If written sparingly, a well placed exclamation can come alive and spur adrenaline through the reader, but here, when it seems like you liberally coated it with the symbols (as in, almost every other line uses one), it feels as if everyone's head is going to explode because they had recently inhaled a veritable mountain of candy.

Beyond those three qualms, though, this looks like it'll be a fun ride.  World building, good writing, and interesting concepts.

I'm game.

#6 · 80w, 5d ago · 2 · · Prologue ·

Im so lost right now...but good so far! :pinkiehappy:

Good gravy! Forty favorites in a single day? Is that... normal?

This is the first story I've posted that actually reached the front page. A big thanks to everyone who Liked and Favorited! And, as always, it immediately gets one single dislike. I really want to know what that guy was thinking, actually... that's what I'm most curious about.


Thank you very much for the frank and forthright comment. I'll have to take a closer look at the remaining chapters from here on out: not too late to edit those more carefully for capitalization problems.

As for the hectic speed and saccharin punctuation, it's primarily an attempt to call-back earlier generations of the MLP franchise... but that's still no excuse for poor writing, of course. Also, I cut the prologue by at least a third of it's original length (under the advice of my editor) which might explain the choppiness. I'm curious to know if the problems persist into later chapters. If so, then Houston: we have a problem.


Erm... my first chapters tend to be total non-sequitors, designed to set up the rest of the story in some unexpected way. "The Death of Daring Do" was the same. I'm beginning to think I have a problem.

umm quick question why does it say complete this story doesnt sound complete to me atleast i hope its not complete cause man this is good. so if your readin this could ya tell me if the complete is just an error or if this just leads to another story.


The story is listed as complete because all the chapters are online, fully written and edited, but they haven't been published yet. I'm going to make a new chapter available every one or two days. This way, there's no chance I'll lose interest and leave the story unfinished forever. If this is against the rules, somebody please let me know immediately.


Alright thanks for the info

And so the plot thickens...

Reminds me of the Blair witch project...


I am pretty sure Complete is only for fanfics that have all their chapters online and published.  I'd refer to the site rules if I were you.

EDIT: I see no rules regarding it in the FAQ section. I would think it's supposed to be as I stated above, though. From a reader's perspective, this is not complete. I can not, for example, download this to my ereader and go read it. It is incomplete until I can do just that, in my opinion.

Looks great!:pinkiehappy:

But I'm confused at the complete tag:rainbowhuh:, is this it, or will you be adding more?

Edit: Ah, just reread the description, all good now.:twilightsheepish:

Love the vibe those figures in the tree are giving off, SPOOOOOoooky:pinkiecrazy:

And I would like to imagine the homemaking scene was done in a montage.:moustache:

Can't wait for the next release.:pinkiehappy:

Where the hell is Rainbow Dash? How has she not found them yet?

>>2533718 Your second sentence doesn't make sense. I'm sure you mean 'confused'?:unsuresweetie:(sorry)


As some may have already guessed: Yes, this story's original title was in fact "The Mare Witch Project." But then I noticed somebody else already had a fic by that name. Ah, well.


Hm. There does seem to be a lot of confusion and/or frustration about this, and it does seem vaguely deceitful on my part. I have sent a PM to one of the mods requesting clarification.


Update from a Moderator: The "Complete" tag is, indeed, for stories that are fully published: not just fully written. The story has been set to Incomplete. Terribly sorry, all.

Blair Witch Project

... what the devil is going on? I MUST KNOW!

Keeps getting weirder and weirder. Hope Applejack doesn't lose her nerves.

wow the ponies lack lots of knowledge of how natural weather works :twilightsmile:

Well thats what you get when it can be manipulated by pegasi

This is so interesting!:derpyderp1:

This is really heating up.


I'm suspecting that their's more to the stick figures than one would think . . .

"An it harm none, do what ye will." (the Wiccan Rede)

“Lions, tigers and bears...
Oh My.:trollestia:

Another nice update :pinkiehappy: You do masterful suspense writing:moustache:

Is the centaur a vision of a future encounter, or just a dream I wonder.

Can't wait for more,:pinkiehappy:

For some reason, I keep expecting Mr. Jiggles to show up... wouldn't that be perfect? :pinkiecrazy:

Edit: Bitter... almonds. I see what you did there. And, utterly mundane as it is, that had me spooked for the whole chapter. Well played, good sir... well played.


You get a gold star! Unless you just Googled the phrase, of course.


You have no idea how happy I am that you recognized it as being centaur shaped, even though I never actually used the word "centaur." The ponies wouldn't have such a word: it's half horse, and half... what?

I suppose that didn't stop them from having a minotaur.


But Mr Jiggles has appeared.

Look behind you.


Renard Leblanc turned around to look at Mr. Jiggles.


>>2543557 My pleasure to sooth your fears:twilightsmile:

Though I'm still confused at the "Bird-like head" part.:rainbowhuh:

I've got 2 theories:

1) The centaur has some weird, horned bird head:twilightoops:

2) The centaur was wearing a helmet:moustache:

I have most believe in the second one, but if it's the first one, because you mentioned GW1, I suspect Tirek:moustache:


I do so love fan speculation! I will say this: My primary concern was to take inspiration from G1, but I didn't use any canonical characters. The named characters in the prologue are, as far as I know, my own original creations.

The dream monster certainly resembles Tirek, though... doesn't he? :trixieshiftright:

Hmm... An axe next to the chicken coop? Looks like we're have Scootaloo tonight!:pinkiecrazy:

Good thing they didn't see a headless chicken running around.

I am so glad I decided to read this.


:heart: it!:pinkiehappy:

Also a big fan of your characterization, how long did you spend writing this story?

My first thought was hobbit hole, but based of the reading (and the prologue:moustache:) I'm getting more of a Baba Yaga vibe:yay:.

I'm just WAITING for the stick men to become animated, it's just screaming at me.:coolphoto:

Can't wait for more:pinkiehappy:

Edit: Quick error though.

“Maybe,” said, “but we don’t have to.

Forgot the "she".

Damn, this is good. I can picture it all.

oh no applejack cannot unsee

And thus, Pinkie Pie struck again.

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