Equestria is a land of magic and harmony, a peaceful realm ruled by immortal,benevolent monarchs. But at what cost is this possible? A fateful encounter leads Twilight Sparkle to find out exactly how.
You have no idea how seeing this here has made me happy.
I like that it is here but doens't it miss about half of the chapters?
Love this story like hell, thanks for uploading it!
it's finally here! free HUZZAH FOR EVERYONE!
Dear author of Vis,
Bless you. May whatever that rules the universe bless you. I love this story. I shall await the next chapter
Whoo... I'm finally current. Thanks for the story, Vis. Let me say that I'm enjoying this immensely, and greatly looking forward to every update.
Now for the bad news. I'm finally current. There's no more of the story I'm enjoying immensely for me to read until you update it...
Sooooo glad to see this up here =) This was the first fanfic I've read, and it got me hooked =) Keep it up! love it
Wheee! New chapter! I'm liking the soul-stasis, I've been toying around with similar ideas.
Glad to see this has been uploaded here, I was following it on EQD but this is much more convenient.
So this is the end of part 1, if I remember reading the author's note correctly. I wait in anticipation for the next part.
That was the sweetest brother sister talk ever... taking into account thet he used to hate Luna. I love this sidestory about the three siblings relation, Terrato is so well crafted. Bravo.
Waiting eagerly for the next part of Upheaval.
Love your stuff man been reading it since i first seen it on EQD.
This is just too bleeding amazing. I have no words. Have my vote, watch, track and favorite.
Poor Terrato. That vision of his won't just be a pipe dream, even if its realization is still later than sooner.
Really liking this story. Celestia is characterized in a way that is both realistic and perfectly meshes with her demeanor in the show. I don't know whether I'm apprehensive or excited, though, to see it all fall down around her ears, which will surely happen now that Luna and the Elements are involved. Keep up the good work.
In closing, "Luna and the Elements" would be a decent name for a rock band.
Logistics (food production).
Civilian. Bathhouse heating?
It looks like they're all spread out. I'm seeing a lot of changes in the works for all of them, quite a bit of desensitization. I hope they don't lose themselves. Good luck, friends.
Forty lashes, save one. How Biblical. I approve of your allusion.
Things are going downhill here very quickly. And I sense there will be more miscommunication and outright deception before the end.
Yes, Fluttershy has every right to be concerned. If in the future they have to use the Elements of Harmony, I'm sure it will be Fluttershy, Pinkie Pie, and possibly Rarity that will pull the others back in. AJ too. But I'm worried for Twilight and more so for Rainbow.
Dun-dun-DUNNNN! It looks like Black Rose is moving forward. Here's a question, though. If she was at the bottom of a shaft, buried under a huge stone pillar, for seven hundred years, how has she known so quickly the situations behind closed doors and how to exploit everypony around her so soon after her return? Has she been able to watch, through astral projections, or something? Wouldn't Terrato have detected her if she'd tried that, when he exhumed her to ensure she was dead, all those years ago?
I can't help but think Black Rose is systematically trying to remove the magic of the Elements. First, RD has lost her loyalty. I don't trust that mana sphere Spike has now, it can't be good for Twilight, and I'm calling right now that the episode in the smithy was aimed at also undermining Rarity's generosity. Thankfully, Pinkie has been spreading laughter, and I can't see AJ becoming less honest as things now stand. However...
I guess I'd better just keep reading.
I was so afraid that Rainbow would actually succeed and become insufferable and renounce her "chosen" status for good. Then I was worried that one of them would die. Thankfully I think both crises are past, though we'll have to wait for Fluttershy to come through in the Med Bay. Nothing like a good crisis to pull friends closer together. I hope.
There are Border ponies in Canterlot!
Creation myth ahoy! The Heavenly Realm must be really weird, if one alicorn spawned three races and others brought the lupids, ursids, and herptids, not to mention draconequi. The 6th Rebellion must be the Black Rose Affair. Only thing it could be, really. Something in Terrato's choices went contrary to the Will of the Crown.
And here we have the Elements mentioned for the first time in seeming months! Or, mentioned as a group, anyway. Lexario and the Queen, along with Terrato's inner musings, don't count. I'm glad they were able to heal their rifts before the situation became even more dire.
Two situations that could bring Luna with that warning: Either Black Rose has sent her soldiers to attack Celestia, or Celestia has raised an army against Terrato and Luna was caught in the crossfire as she escaped to warn her favorite brother. Judging by what happened to Fancypants, I'll go with the first one. But it'll keep until tomorrow. It's late.
welp there goes my spare time after finding this, oh well
Two more officers for Black Rose? I'm calling it right now: Trixie. And for the other: somepony to cause even more heartsickness. I would say she'd try for Big Macintosh, but how willing do the Subjects have to be? Perhaps Twocolt would be a suitable candidate?
The Mane Six need to bolster their friendship once again, though there's more space between them this time around. It'll take some Doing. But Applejack will be the linchpin.
Celestia will have to be protected until they can get her power back. Maybe they can use that same mana battery trick? Or perhaps appeal to the justice of the Eternal Herd through the Ignis Equi?
Whatever happens, the journey is far from over for our faithful Chosen.
Well, I finally finished it. I'll be Tracking you from now on, and I'm eager to see where you take Things.
Well. I'm intrigued. First.
Fucking hooked. God damn it.... This is going to slow my own stories progress... Very nice shit, very interesting.
Didn't expect that. First.
This is cool. Can't wait to keep reading. I'm surprised there are so little comments though... First
I've heard of Paranoid Parrot, but Paranoid Celestia? Things gonna be going down...
Shit yeah! Time to watch Twilight kick some ass! You go girl!
So it begins...
I just finished reading this the other day. I. Am. Amazed. Literally one of the best stories I've read in quite some time, even including real novels. I absolutely love it, and I can't wait for the rest.
I found myself wondering why this fic was marked "Complete," when it obviously isn't. I'mma slink off and read the sequel now...
How does this story only have 41 up votes?!?!
You are an amazing author, keep up the good work.
Can't wait to see what you do in the next arc.
I would have thought that Fluttershy would be the most worldy of the six- dealing with injured and sick creatures every day, not to mention living in close proximity to the Everfree forest. It seems unlikely that she has never had to deal with death.
hope this is worth all of the chapters
PHEW! Quite the marathon I submitted myself to. Finished this in 2 days. I could've gone faster, but hey, this is the internet. I have like 50 tabs open at once.
Best story I've read in quite a while. I kept tossing it aside because of the grimdark tag and the art I got a glimpse of (the one with AJ lying on a hospital bed, with RD crying her eyes out). Boy am I glad I gave it a fair chance. The world you created just blows my mind. I tried to guess what would happen next or where the story was going, but every 5 chapter or so you proved me wrong. Every single time. I did manage to point out the major plot points that would happen by the end of it though.
Celestia is one of my favorite characters. THAT BEING SAID. You managed to make me hate her guts beyond belief. I tried to understand her thought process, I really did, but she acted like a 12 year old foal would, not like an immortal ruler. Buuuuuuuut I guess that part was essential to the flow of the story. I like how it all turned out though.
Oh, by the way, I cried like a little girl after that one major battle. You know which one. It was heartbreaking, to say the least.
My favourite character dies first. What a surprise.
Awesome job though.
Confound these ponies! They drive me to OC!
that's because the link on EQD does not link to fimfiction, i had to search for it here myself :P
>>493525493525 Replying to a 7 week old comment. That's about as crazy as Oatmeal.
I feel sorry for you son, having to wait this long to read this awesomeness. As a parting gift, I give you this.
If you're having adventuring problems, I feel bad for you son. I dodged ninety-nine arrows but my knee took one.
DUN DUN DUNNNNN
nooooooooo not Fancy Pants!!!! T.T
Dude, just feel I should let you know: This was the first fanfiction I ever read! Way back on FanFiction.net! Didn't realise you've moved here! Anyhow, thanks for a great story bro, I mean it.
>>325112325112 dude you must have read alot more now but hell its a good story this willbe my 5th re-read
>>553119553119 oh yeah, i've caught up by now and this has to be the best fic i've read, besides Echo
>>557512557512 i know rite!!!
i sugesed that he uploaded the story on this site... now its easy to keep up and there are pll who dont look on EQD sugh a shame... but its getting way more fiews this way... and thats how it suposed to be... ^^ now i look a few times a day if it has a update... nice you like it *bro hoove!* /)*
Awesome work. Loved it from beginning to end.That being said I'm off to read the sequel.
>>220853220853 i know rite!!! thats why i ask him to upload it here its so much easyer to track >.<
Fancy Pants was the very definition of a Good Guy. May his spirit find peace in the Eternal Herd.
Luna is the kind of pony I could easily see myself following into battle, even sacrificing my life for her.
Alas, the length of your story has caused me peruse it and read it I did!
I quite enjoyed it towards the end and anticipate the completion of your sequel.
I read the story in Word 2010 with Arial and size 11
the following typos are marked off according to the page I was on when I read them:
[directly after being banished] “The wolven were a good thirty feet or so when they spotted Twilight and her friends.”
 “Her protest was completely driven her head”
 “those strange set”
 “us laugh as staggers”
 “that look like she”
I hope that my reporting these of these typos doesn't annoy you :)
No comments? Guess so...hmm...
liking the story so far.
I can't stand to read this on that other site though. Glad I found it here.
and for the record, your comment is only 4 5/7ths of a week old.
I'm tempted to comment on every one of these because they have none. Silly me.
It's finally on FimFiction! You have no idea how long I've been waiting for this; makes it much easier to track...
Anyways, fantastic writing, keep up the good work!
There are enough opportunities for "DUN DUN DUUUNNNN " in this story to write a musical score.
YES Not dead!
That is all
Why is luna soooo weak even black rose is more powerful then luna is
hahahaha I love Terrato's joke on Luna!!
HOLYCELESTIA THIS IS A GOOD FANFIC!
Ok im confused . What the heck's going on?
>>730119730119 keep reading, it's all explained
HA! I totally called that he wasn't dead!
"...What could possibly be more terrible than that?"
I know that would be, like, the WORST POSSIBLE THING!!!
Especially when she killed those fish for the ferrets in Dragonshy.
Dear Princess Celestia,
Can I has Elements of Harmony?
Your most faithful student, Twilight Sparkle.
On a more serious note, she should ask Celestia for the elements so the six can use them in battle.
I guess that trolling runs in the Alicorn family!
C'mon, Dash can break Mach 1 (or Mach 5 and Mach 10 in our world) there's no way Scarlet can beat her.
Applejack found Twocolt right next to her with his back against a rampart. A trickle of blood dripped from his right shoulder right where a gap between the plates of barding was. "You're bleeding!" she said.
"Lucky wolven slipped in a swipe before I knocked him off his ladder," Twocolt grunted.
"I ain't got time ta bleed," Twocolt grunted.
This story's great...and I'm first.
Pff, Cliche villain is cliche.
COME ON!! WHY U NO ASK FOR ELEMENTS TWILIGHT? Seriously! I'm pretty sure that those things can be set 'from stun to kill' and would make epic weapons against the Wolfturds! But no! Grr
"He realized how fortunate he was now that the Elements of Harmony had come to the Barrier Lands. He would have to rely on them."
Yeah, except that they don't have the ACTUAL ELEMENTS WITH THEM!!!
Oh, and first
Ow great now, is gonna do something ballsy to impress Rabbit and get her medal, she's probably going to get hurt too.
Am I the only one that doubts that this magical device that Miss Blaze gave Spike is going to do only what she told him?
>>754716754716 you can have all those 'firsts' , the rest of us have moved onto the sequel
I read this one on fanfiction.net and now its here?!
The end of this chapter alone would have been enough for a like, favorite, and watch from me... unfortunately I already did it and can't do it again
I can just see Luna
Oh Tia... why you SO stupid?
I really have to say, I like the author's take on the ""royal family" the three siblings ruling the land of the living and their parents taking on the role of rulers of the afterlife
I think five people need to get their brains adjusted (how could you dislike this story?)
Actually, if you think about it, AJ already is being less honest by this point. It's all there in RD's parting shot--AJ is effectively lying to herself about adapting to the harshness of the Barrier Lands. She IS adapting, and she's aware of it on some level, but she's clearly trying to convince herself and everypony else that she's the same as she ever was.
"so many chapterrssss, so many riches of plenty"
this is gunna take me age to read but i'm gunna love it ^^
Well, after three days of reading, I've finally finished this. I must say, you've done an amazing job at worldbuilding, and Twilight Sparkle (not to mention Black Rose) is a badass at war.
Looking forward to reading Part II over the next week.
"She had made up her mind. After this battle, she was going to pony it up and apologize even if it meant that Rainbow was going rub her nose in it. After that, she was going to try again."
Geez, that the equivalent to a cop's last day until retirement
Man whenever Terrato talks he reminds me of a spoiled toddler. Screaming, yelling, and having a hissy fit whenever he doesn't get what he wants
Read the comment and looked at your avatar.
OH GOD MAKE THE LAUGHTER STOP
Twilight you better do two things.
1. Kick some wolven ass
2. Knock some sense into Celestia when you see her again.
Vanguard x Twilight
Lets see dis shit!
Oh thats just perfect, ask a pony like Rainbow Dash how badly she gets punished after severely fucking up and she'll say something like "Until I pass out."
Yet still he is probably the only one looking at this in a smart way
Until Nightmare Moon's presence becomes known there doesn't seem much point of bringing the elements into the fray. The only other target that a good fireballing wouldn't deal with is Fenrir himself and he's bound by honor not to fight anyway.
Have you been editing/rewriting? I see many chapters were updated today.
Going through the chapters to fix sudden shifts in PoV. They're quite prevalent and have to be rewritten .
>>985142985142 I remember seeing a word in chapter 36 that was misspelled when I was reading it just a minute ago, but now I can't seem to find it, just an FYI
how did you manage to get 10 characters? I thought that only 5 was allowed.
>>10089251008925 I'm not sure if the Mane6 count as one character, because I've seen them made into just one icon sometimes
plus when did the 'only five character tags' rule come into being anyway? because this story could've been grandfathered in