Reverie Metherlence
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Ok...this story has potential but you are making it WAY to fast-paced... Try spreading out the events... You should give details on what they talk about for example... Try slowing down and actually adding detail to the story... Great writers aren't born from 500 word stories, I'll track and see how u progress (remember: details details details!)
"Could Rainbow and Fluttershy be in love?"
Congratulations! You are the 250th FlutterDash fic I have read so far that answered that same, damn, question... ![]()
rushed...
way too rushed...
-_- thats all...
otherwise its still cute though :3
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A fine story so far but i have to agree that it is way to rushed so far. No other complaints though, so keep up the good work! ![]()
This is...cute, but way to rushed.
Wait this stuff has allready been said...DAMN![]()
You get my stars and my track, can't wait to see where this goes. Hopefully.
Ok everyone keeps saying the story is going way too fast. Keep in mind that in the third chapter it explained that Rainbow and Fluttershy have known each other sence they were kids and that they know everything about each other. Sence they know everything about each other they don't need to start the relationship slow it can start off kinda fast.
With that said please stop saying that it's going to fast anymore comments that say that will be deleted. Thank you.![]()
I like it. It was cute and sweet.
I agree that it felt too fast, but it was still enjoyable. It was like a shot of happiness. ![]()
Them falling in love was fine, but the story was too rushed...
Look, I'm a writer to, and not a very good one at that.
But the story wan't really... descriptive, the scenes moved too fast, there wasn't very much conflict... etc...
But I digress....
FLUTTERDASH FTW!







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