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Joined March 2013
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Stories (4)

  • The Road To Recovery
    Sequel to Scootaloo's Painful Secret. Now that Scootaloo is away from her abusive parents and in the custody of Rainbow Dash, she can focus on recovering from the trauma she was put through and getting on with her life.

    6,440 words · 2,762 views · 205 likes · 16 dislikes
  • The Monster In AppleBloom
    There's something wrong with Apple Bloom, she's unhappy, shying away from her friends, and no one can figure out why. Where has the happy filly gone and why did she leave?
    6,842 words · 1,401 views · 64 likes · 6 dislikes
  • From Crown To Halo
    Sequel to The Monster In Apple Bloom - Apple Bloom is horrified when her colt friend Bright Heart tells her his heart breaking secret. Can her friends and family help her cope?
    5,196 words · 862 views · 40 likes · 3 dislikes
  • The Truth
    Celestia's party takes an interesting turn when Twilight accidently drops a truth potion.
    1,071 words · 1,379 views · 61 likes · 20 dislikes

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Scootaloo is hiding the pain the best that she can, but she feels like she might explode if she doesn't tell someone soon. Who will be there to help the little filly in her greatest hour of need? Will she ever get a happy ending?

Warning: This fic is about child abuse.

First Published
1st May 2013
Last Modified
10th May 2013

Comments ( 135 )

#1 · Chapter 1 · 72w, 4d ago · · ·

:fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry::derpyderp1::derpyderp1::derpyderp1::twilightoops::twilightoops::twilightoops::raritydespair::raritydespair::raritydespair::twilightangry2::twilightangry2::twilightangry2:  WAT

#2 · Chapter 1 · 72w, 4d ago · · ·

I don't normally read Scootabuse, but  this is really good look at a normally taboo subject. Keep up the good quality!

#3 · Chapter 1 · 72w, 4d ago · 5 · ·

I will hunt down Scoots' mom and destroy her:flutterrage:

#4 · Chapter 1 · 72w, 4d ago · · ·

Dohohohoho 69 views.

But for real. This is excellent work right here. I could sense the feels, they were on their way. :fluttercry: You're planning to write more, right? Because I need this like my sandwich needs Nutella.

You have earned 10/10 mustaches for an excellent introduction. Keep on chuggin'!

:moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

#5 · Chapter 1 · 72w, 3d ago · · ·

MOAR! :flutterrage:

#6 · Chapter 2 · 72w, 3d ago · · ·

A bit of a short chapter, but the song was a nice touch! Guess length isn't a major issue either, especially since I just got home and was happy to see some updates!

The part with the dog Peaches really hit me hard :( I was expecting Scoot's mom to have he drowned or something, got pretty scary for a moment there.

Scoot needs RD to come and take her away! :heart:

#7 · Chapter 2 · 72w, 3d ago · · ·

I am loving the story so far.  I really look forward to reading more of it as it come out.  Keep up the great writing!

#8 · Chapter 2 · 72w, 3d ago · · ·

>>2516042 I agree that part hit me hard too since I love dogs and she needs RD now more than ever.

#9 · Chapter 2 · 72w, 3d ago · · ·

It's kind of hard to criticize such short chapters, especially when I find very little wrong with everything. I suppose two things I find that you could approve on:

1. Add more dialogue. This short chapters make this difficult, especially when you are setting up the back story for this 'broken' Scootaloo. I would make them a bit longer if I were you.

2. When you are talking about those events (like the puppy), maybe put a scene or a flashback in italics and expand on them. Make us feel Scootaloo's pain so we go :fluttercry: in real life.

Still MOAR! :flutterrage: Please? :pinkiehappy:

#10 · Chapter 2 · 72w, 3d ago · · ·

It just updated.... what you change? :unsuresweetie:

Also, the reason we want your chapters longer is not just selfish needs. A story can only be featured if it has 4000+ words. And we want you to succeed! :pinkiehappy:

#11 · Chapter 2 · 72w, 3d ago · · ·

>>2516042

>_< QUIT BEATING ME TO ALL THE SCOOTALOO STORIES BRO! Seriously. I was gonna send you the link to this tonight. Oh well, we'll have something to talk about I suppose, lawls.

#12 · Chapter 2 · 72w, 3d ago · · ·

FEELS, FEELS EVERYWHERE :fluttercry: :pinkiesad2: :applecry: :raritycry: :raritydespair:

#13 · Chapter 2 · 72w, 2d ago · · ·

:twilightoops: This...is...:raritycry:

#14 · Chapter 2 · 72w, 2d ago · · ·

Poor Scootaloo!  Please have someone (like Dashie or the Cutie Mark Crusaders) rescue her! I hope that Scootaloo finds the strength to tell her friends what's happening to her at home and for her to know it's not her fault.

Update soon!:scootangel::applecry::unsuresweetie:

#15 · Chapter 3 · 72w, 2d ago · · ·

Oh shit RD is going to kick some flanks! Can't wait for the next chapter!!!

#16 · Chapter 3 · 72w, 2d ago · · ·

Oh damn dude, Scoots' dad, and mom, are rude, horrid. Good thing Rainbow Dash is here. :yay:

#17 · Chapter 3 · 72w, 2d ago · · ·

THE FEELS!!!!!!:scootangel::scootangel::pinkiesad2::pinkiesad2::pinkiesad2::pinkiecrazy::fluttershbad::fluttercry::fluttercry:::applecry::applecry::applecry:

#18 · Chapter 3 · 72w, 2d ago · 1 · ·

Sitting down in McDonald's for lunch, I check out the update, and I just beam at Rainbow Dash's appearance. I bet I look like an idiot!

Sorry to see her father finally got infected by the plague of her mother :( oh well, just an excuse for RD to add another to the body count.

#19 · Chapter 3 · 72w, 2d ago · · ·

First off, ZOMG that ending.

Second,

"  "If you're going to be so careless with your things, then you shouldn’t have them at all!” He grabbed the rest of the figurines off the dresser and placed them on the floor, then he started to smash them to pieces one by one with the hammer." Whoa whoa whoa whoa... whoa.

You told us earlier he wasn't like this... This is more akin to emotional abuse (which I'm guessing Scoot's Mom does to him) than physical. It just feels weird from how you us he was earlier. Just felt awkward. Not bad, just awkward. I'd love to have your comments on this.

And being a victim of abuse myself Scootaloo's talking back to her Mom and Dad feels... weird. Most accounts of abuse don't talk about the part when they DO try to fight back, which is usually for a very small amount of time, and then doesn't happen again. For reading along that line Dave Pelzer "A child called It" accounts a very short segment when he tried to fight back.

Overall, you are doing a good job at painting a true child abuse situation. It seems quite accurate to how things go in a real abuse situation, minus the first point, which, once again, not wrong. It's your story, you can do what you want with it.

Last point; the part where Scoot's Mom is abusive off and on is very accurate portrayal of an abuse situation.  Your accurate description of how these event play out makes me think one of two things. Either; A. You majored in psychology or a similar field (unlikely due to the brony demographic of MLP) or B. you were in an abuse situation yourself. I pray it is the former.

#21 · Chapter 3 · 72w, 2d ago · · ·

>>2521087 Unfortunately it is B. Most of what happened to Scootaloo happened to me in some form or another, except it was my grandmother instead of a father.

I understand your confusion of the father suddenly joining in, but well, that happened to me. I think my grandmother finally snapped herself, being constantly in the middle of my mother and I.

As for the talking back, I didn't actually start doing that till I was a teenager and big enough to physically defend myself, but for this story, everything is happening to Scootaloo in just a few years time for it to fit the story line.

#22 · Chapter 3 · 72w, 2d ago · · ·

>>2521101

That makes sense. I am so sorry about the situation you were in. My Father was very verbally/emotionally abusive. There were a couple counts of physical abuse but they were few and far between. The dog thing was something I knew you couldn't just, you know, make up. And the wonderbolt figurines... Sad face. My Mother divorced him when I was in my teens and we moved out. He wants a relationship now, but I don't really ever reciprocate... Anyway...

#23 · Chapter 3 · 72w, 2d ago · · ·

>>2521128 It's okay. I'm sorry about your situation as well. My grandmother really is a good person. She cried and apologized and she honestly felt bad about what happened later on. She went back to her sweet self afterwards. I have a good relationship with her despite what happened. Anyone can snap when the tension keeps building up too much to bare.

There is that old saying. Man beats wife, wife beats kid, kid beats dog. It's a chain reaction.

#24 · Chapter 3 · 72w, 2d ago · · ·

>>2521145

Never heard that saying to be honest. Interesting. I think it's why MLP is so popular. It's one of the few universes (Equestria is anyway) where everything is truly run by trust and friendship. And their not necessarily worried about crime or theft because the lessons of friendship and honesty are so ingrained into their culture that even being a prankster like Discord gets you labeled a bad guy.

This over analytic view of the Equestiran government has been brought to you buy Schticky! When you get sticky, get schticky.

#25 · Chapter 4 · 72w, 2d ago · · ·

i think the end was sweet.

but where is rainbow going to get the money to spend on scootaloo?

#26 · Chapter 4 · 72w, 2d ago · · ·

Love the upswing in Scoot's fortune! Nothing wrong with RD swooping in and beating the hell out of abusive parents, either.

That's now headcanon for how RD deals with stuff. Just, swoop, in the window and pow.

#27 · Chapter 4 · 72w, 2d ago · · ·

>>2521435

I always pegged her as head of the weather team in Ponyville, plus she has that Cloud Mansion. I assume she has money somewhere.

#29 · Chapter 4 · 72w, 2d ago · · ·

>>2521457 Well.. I don't know if she is the head of the weather team, has it ever been mentioned?

And I'm not sure they said how wealthy rainbow is are how much she makes monthly from the weather team.

#30 · Chapter 4 · 72w, 2d ago · · ·

>>2521592

I figured she had to be somewhere up the chain because of how she naps all the time.

#31 · Chapter 4 · 72w, 2d ago · · ·

>>2521626 well i cant argue with that logic :moustache:

#32 · Chapter 4 · 72w, 2d ago · · ·

MOAR! :flutterrage:

#33 · Chapter 4 · 72w, 2d ago · · ·

The FEELS!!!

#34 · Chapter 4 · 72w, 2d ago · · ·

At least justice was served, OR SO IT SEEMS (dramatic bum bum bum), good story. :pinkiesmile:

#35 · Chapter 4 · 72w, 1d ago · 2 · ·

I DON'T EVEN KNOW HOW THIS COULD GET BETTER:pinkiegasp::pinkiegasp::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::raritywink::raritywink::scootangel::scootangel::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

#36 · Chapter 4 · 72w, 1d ago · · ·

Yay!  Scoots got rescued by Rainbow Dash and she and the rest of the Mane 6 got her parents arrested!  I hope that Scoots can now heal, with the help of her friends of course.:scootangel:

#37 · Chapter 5 · 72w, 1d ago · · ·

I totally expected this to SUCK.

BUT IT DIDN'T

It was rushed though I will say that. It could have easily been much longer, but I understand what you were going for here.

Very good work all things considered.

#38 · Chapter 5 · 72w, 1d ago · · ·

Nice ending:twilightsmile: i really liked the picture.

but im so sad you ended it :fluttercry:

I hope you make a sequel.

But i feel there could have more development on the relationship between scoot and rainbow,

I agree rainbow would defiantly defend scoot from her parents, but.. with scoot living with rainbow full time she might feel that she is "Cramping her style" or be more bummed out because she has to take care of a filly and cant socialize as much with her friends.

But I guess you could leave that to a possible future sequel :moustache:

#39 · Chapter 5 · 72w, 1d ago · · ·

It very much could have been a few 10K more words or so honestly, but it wasn't bad at all.  I'd say, try more fics.

#40 · Chapter 5 · 72w, 1d ago · · ·

>>2525196 Keep in mind that Rainbow Dash's element is loyalty, and considering how much time Scootaloo spends with her own friends crusading, I really don't think it'd be a problem for her, but that's just my opinion. I'm glad you liked the story. :twilightsmile:

#41 · Chapter 5 · 72w, 1d ago · · ·

>>2525220

:pinkiegasp: True i didn't think of her element, but still rainbow has to pay for schooling, extra food, the psychiatry and a bunch of other things.

and with her CMCing all the time she could annoy some of the others in ponyville which could later on be a embarrassment rainbow if any ponies were to point fingers back to her.

Im not saying there sudent be flowers and sunshine, but the difficulty's of being a guardian/big-sister could be a good plot mover in future installments to this fanfiction.

#42 · Chapter 5 · 72w, 1d ago · · ·

>>2525253 True, and I probably will write a sequel eventually, but for now I want to focus on my other story.

#43 · Chapter 4 · 72w, 1d ago · 1 · ·

I hope that they are sentenced to death by necromancy.:scootangel:

#44 · Chapter 3 · 72w, 1d ago · · ·

>>2521159:rainbowlaugh: so. Many. Innuendos

#45 · Chapter 4 · 72w, 1d ago · 1 · ·

  “Do you think dogs go to Heaven?”

Of course they do,  ever see the movie 'All Dogs Go to Heaven' ?

#46 · Chapter 5 · 72w, 1d ago · · ·

Here is a good song that goes along with this.

#47 · Chapter 5 · 72w, 1d ago · · ·

I expected the same ole from this story, but I got a return with more, I was expecting the continuation or re-custody to the parents. But instead, I get a ending which leaves me to rub my eyes to be able to continue reading anything smaller than 72 font size. I really enjoyed your story, and I hope you the best of luck in future ones. :pinkiesmile:

#48 · Chapter 5 · 72w, 1d ago · · ·

D'AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW still I wish it was longer...

#49 · Chapter 5 · 72w, 1d ago · · ·

AMAZING!! I LOVE THIS STORY!!!

Would love a sequel too :rainbowdetermined2:

#50 · Chapter 5 · 72w, 1d ago · · ·

Not gonna cry...not gonna- BUCK!

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