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Two thousand years ago, the terra ponies and the alicorns waged war over who would control the world. In the end Discord settled it by attacking both sides. Both were all but wiped out. Or so it was thought.
The Cutie Mark Crusaders have gone missing and it's up to their sisters and their friends to find them. But they might not be looking for three fillies anymore... And why is Trixie calling herself "new and improved"?
So because I'm awesome, I entered the Design a Pony contest. Here's my entry:
His name is Kendall Apple, and he actually comes from this story, though at the end. He's a very minor character but the only one I actually liked enough to consider entering.
A story about the missing evolution of all ponies is an interesting idea, hope it can be done right.
Also, I don't know if this story was written before or after the Wedding episode, but would it be more "up to date" if the Alicorn count was up to three members? Celestia, Luna and Candance.
You got a solid story going. Nicely done.
One thing I did notice, though, other than random grammar mistakes here and there, is that you are overly fond of telling us what the characters look like. It's fine every now and then for a change of pace, but constantly telling us that Rainbow Dash is a cyan pegasus is entirely unnecessary.
But like I said, other than that and a few other random grammar mistakes, you got a nice story going. Keep up the good work 
I wanna who Trixie got mixed with...
This is a great story and I can't wait for more updates. BTW, many grammar mistakes, but the one I see most often is misuse of commas. One tip I can give you is when one character is addressing another, you put a coma before/after their name. Like, if Applejack was talking to Big Mac it would be, "Hey, Big Mac," instead of "Hey Big Mac,"
anyway, I'll be keeping an eye on this story!
(Pinkie's sounding a lot like a Terra Pony 
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Nice chapter. "Common in infant unicorns", I'm going to guess this is only the start after reading that. If that machine does give alicorn magic after all, I'm also going to guess the main 6 are going to go in a modified version in order to be strong enough to fight off whatever the tera ponies have planned?
There's no such thing as alicorn magic, just magic, and magic users. Alicorns are just much stronger on average then unicorns. Scootaloo and Apple Bloom are actually very weak by comparison. I do actually have this numbered out, listing each magic user's stats. It's all written down, and I'll release it once the story is over.
For your benefit, here's a brief rundown. On a scale of 1 to 10, increasing exponentially, comparing the average amount of magic a given adult pony has at their disposal at a given time (or the maximum amount of magical energy their body will store):
Unicorn: 2-6
Fairy Pony: 8-10
Alicorn: 6-10
Winged Unicorns: 3-5
Celestia/Luna: 10.0
Twilight (strongest unicorn ever, according to Celestia): 9.0
Rarity: 3.8
Trixie - Before: 6.2
Trixie - After: 7.1
Apple Bloom: 2.8
Sweetie Belle: 3.2
Scootaloo: 2.1
I have a full list for basically every magic user, but I'll add that later, as it has some spoilers.
Twilight is boss 
. Still better than even modified trixie 
. The magic statistics are also appreciated, its a lot better than trying to guess what they are. You should re-post the magic strenght list every few chapters, it might help out the people who don't this one.
So, I'm working on a later chapter, and I need your help. Yes you. Well not your help, Matt. I hate you. But everypony else, I need your help.
Basically, in a later chapter, I'm sending the trio to magic camp, and I need ponies to fill that camp with. I'm looking for at least 8 ponies.
What I need from you: a name, basic description (1 paragraph, including colors and basic personality, and a fact about them relating to magic. It could be a favorite spell or school of magic, or the first spell they learned, or something like that). That's it. I will of course give full credit for each pony.
Rules: They must be a foal and they must be a unicorn. I'd rather only have blank flank ponies. If being a decedent of the main cast is key to their character, they can't be there for obvious reasons.
Deadline: It's going to be like arc 5 or 6, so there's no rush. You have at least a month. Just post your pony here, or pm me. If I get more than 8, I'll work something out.
Does anypony remember back in the original version when I said there was only going to be 5 arcs? Well it's now nearing 10. Yeah. Most are 2-3 chapters, but arc 6 is a 4 chapter monster, and I think my favorite.In it, we learn Scootaloo's real name.
Also, we need more character icons, like for general griffons and changelings, not just named ones.
"She was weighed and measured, asked to fly around, but could only buzz off the floor a bit. Her wingpower being measured at barely 0.1."
The period after "bit" should be a comma, so it should look like this:
"She was weighed and measured, asked to fly around, but could only buzz off the floor a bit, her wingpower being measured at barely 0.1."
Alternatively, if you want to keep it as two sentences, you could go for this:
"She was weighed and measured, asked to fly around, but could only buzz off the floor a bit. Her wingpower was measured at barely 0.1."
All in all, a solid chapter. There were other mistakes, but that was the only one that bothered me enough to detract from the story. I'm looking forward to more.
From what I recall it's kinda like a flashback storytelling. Eventually the story will get around to where we started here. It also allows the story to be told from one pony's point of view while letting somepony interrupt for whatever reason.
It also tends to catch your attention when the story starts off with line like "You killed two beings and watched a friend die." With a line like that involved you kinda want to stick around to find out what happened.
So, here are a few things I have going on, besides this story. Check them out.
My blog based on a character from both this story and Samurai Applejack.
That was a nice update. This story is moving along rather nicely.
Anywho, the one thing that bothers me is Dash and the griffons. I can understand that she grew up on eating meat. That part is at least understandable, even if I'm not a big fan of it. However, no matter how hard I try, I can't picture Dash going out and hunting. That just doesn't sit right. But that's just me and my personal preferences.
>>857215 No idea. You'll have to watch Equestria Daily or Bronycon.org for that kind of info. They haven't made any announcements yet. We probably won't hear anything for a few weeks if not months.
>>858220 I don't get to spend enough time on the computer to do that. Can you give me a notification? Because I'm a little busy appeasing my readers. As well as being a reader. And my parents taking me on trips extremely commonly isn't helping. Just please. Help another brony out and please tell me in advance.
>>858338 They make constant announcements, so just check the BroNYCon website sometime between now and January. Like once a month. For the summer one, they had a time and place by the end of January, just a couple weeks after the January BroNYCon. And I did make several announcements here and only my other story that I would be going. If the past is any indication, the next summer BroNYCon will be announced next January, and I'll post a blog or something about it if I plan to go.
"Rar! Ah'm hungry fer brains! Diamond Tiara, yer safe."
I know I've mentioned this before, but this whole hunting thing is bothering me. I enjoy the story. I really do. And given the society of the griffons, it makes sense that they see strength in hunting. But there is a strength to not wishing to hunt or kill as well. The part where Rainbow Dash was chiding herself for being weak because she let the bunny go is understandable; she has been living with the griffons for awhile. She had her reservations and eventually came to terms with things. Before, I said I couldn't buy Rainbow Dash hunting. Now, perhaps I can. However, Scootaloo seems far too eager to hunt than a pony should be. Still, as understandable as some of these things might be, it just doesn't sit right with me. At the same time, it's a small enough thing that it doesn't prevent me from enjoying the story fully. Happy writing
No... please tell me pinkie isn't evil...
I wish this story would get more attention, I luffs it <3
Also, I didn't know you need more, last time I checked you only needed, like, 4. Did you get my oc that I sent you? (and if you still need more, I have a new unicorn oc from my newest story that you could use.)
The whole time, I was thinking to myself: "Don't rage in the comments, Blue, don't rage in the comments!"
*holds breath for few seconds then breaths out calmly* okay, I won't rage.
But seriously, Twilight is now my least favorite character in this story.
Ps. When are you sending them to magic camp? It sounds like it will be an interesting read with all the ocs.
Ooh, this is getting good (not that it wasn't already :P).
I look forward to the next chapter. I wanna see Twilight as well as Scootaloo's quote-unquote "Parents" get what's coming to them. Twilight for prejudice and discrimination and the "parents" for abandoning Scoot in the first place. I can tell that Celestia is against Twilight here if she gave Pinkie such a quick court date.
Keep up the good work.
OMG the Discord Backstory makes so much sense *sniff* 
I now understand Discord and his reasons... though in his place I would go about it in a bit more discreetly... like corrupt the pony's so they destroy them selves... wow i just realized what i just wrote... 
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. But then I looked at the calendar and I went: 
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can't wait for more!! 
Have you posted/written any of the other chapters/arcs yet?
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