A collection of short fics about Celestia and Luna in an alternate childhood.
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looks like someone found 'CUPCAKES'
Oh god yes. That reaction is priceless.
~Skeeter The Lurker
Not bad but... If Celestia can already levitate then why did Luna have to climb on her back to get the book? Even if her levitation is weak it seems it would be easier to levitate the book down from the shelf with the aid of gravity than to lift back up by herself. Seeing as you waste a good portion of the story with that scene rather than just have Celestia levitate it down tells me you added it to put the story over the one-thousand word mark. You could have made the story much better if you had left that out and maybe added a bit more to the part before Faust left or even a scene with her while she's out. You could have even had her see the broken rainbow and come home because of it, maybe even having guessed what happened.
Heh, Cute little story.
But regarding the Cupcakes debacle, I personally would like to try one. Meat is always good, and it's only juicier knowing it was obtained through pain.
Seeing the title and description, I thought: this is going to be adorable.
I was completely right.
2513696 I tried to have Tia make a troll face.
I added in the word 'Problem?' to emphasize that, guess it didn't work too well. Celestia was more than capable of doing it alone but she made Luna do it just because she could. And making Luna oblivious to Celestia's trouble making was too adorable to pass up. I'll do better next time. Thank you for your thoughts.
And the "broken rainbow" is just it raining off in two separate places in the distance, the weather is not dependent on the girls. I have never seen it happen but I don't see why it could not.
I now envision Lauren having Cupcakes in her library just to troll little kids...
2515135
I now can see your reasoning for the scene. I must admit, it would have never crossed my mind, but I do see how it can be interpreted as such. I hope I didn't sound rude in my previous comment, it was simply ment to be constructive criticism. It maybe could have used some more elaboration on the reason why she did it, but I'll leave that up to you. A writer should have the most say as to how he writes his work, for without the writer the story wouldn't exist in the first place. The writer's mind developed the story, so therefore the writer decides how best to put his visulization into writing.
noooooooooooo not CUP CAKES
Cupcakes priceless never gets old
cupcakes?!
Where's my .44?
Oh GODS....what a fail
It was honestly hard to read, but I enjoyed it none the less
You did well, personally I don't having the creator of the show be the Gods mother but that's my option
2541068 I hope that a fail on Celestia's part. I'm glad you enjoyed it, and I'm working on finding a better editor than myself. And I promise more to come soon, including the sister's friends Cheysalis, Discord and a pushover Sombra.
Aaaand in light of Namara's presence, Sombra will now be an attractive sports douchebag after he goes away for a summer.
2541939 Actually, I was planning on Sombra being the attractive sports douchebag after he goes away for a summer. But yes, they're all friends. And I have something planned for them all, especially Chrysalis and Luna. *smirks evilly*
It's a nice a little goofy short read. Worth reading.
awww
Good persanal thoughts-The chapter was a great one, I have to admit that. The fact you used that Luna has a hot temper was gold and the fact that she bottled up her feelings was just like her as a younger sister that I can relate to as I am a younger brother. She has a speech disability. She is always a shy and nervous pony even as an adult. that is great.
Bad personal thoughts-I could find only minor spelling mistakes, however, most of them are because of the lisp.
Overall- I give it a six trollestias
out of ten 
I am glad you're still writng this
this is starting to be an cool story to be honest I love this story, keep up the good work.
2541068 you don't understand he used a small thing with Luna having a lisp.
How do they have cars if they are ponies? More to the point....how can this have the CMC if they were not born until eons later? Poor Luna, even a Goddess has to suffer a little growing up, then as she gets older she remembers that she's a bucking GODDESS AND CAN DO ANYTHING THW MORTALS CAN'T!!
What was I saying?
2595495 Oh I noticed well in this chapter, but not in the first one, poor Luna
2634539 The way I see this world is Fausticorn wrote a book called Friendship is Magic and put her daughters as the Goddesses of the world, while their friends are also powerful characters. The whole world of FiM is in her book (from Celestia raising the sun to the CMC) and are Fausticorn's creations. Luna's favorite CMC is Scootaloo and she struggled long and hard and can finally say her name without a lisp.
I borrowed the characters like this from another author I mentioned elsewhere here but see it as a totally different world then him/her.
Yeah, poor Luna. I based her emotions on what I felt growing up with a speech issue; I had trouble pronouncing R's, Sh's, and Ch's, so I can relate a bit. I read about the tongue twister in a Stephen King book and thought Luna could use it.
Poor Luna.
You are my moonlight, my only moonlight...?
Dangit author, why'd you do that? Now I has sads.
noo not poor Luna :-(
Woona... Now I has a sad
the story was perfect it ties in and shows the char growth. i loved the both of them
If Celestia could levitate the book up to the top shelf, why couldn't she levitate it down?
When I read that Luna was scared by the cover of the book, and saw the words, "the Mare on the cover is Pink", I thought, "Oh My God, THEY FOUND CUPCAKES!!!!!!" Thank God luna didn't read past the first paragraph...
And that's why you don't let kids read the books in top shelf...
In the end everypony's happy! Well... Everypony except Luna.... poor luna...
3662235 She was trolling Luna. That's why she smirked and asked "Problem?"