(ignore what the bottom of the title card says. it was drawn over a month ago when i planned this fanfic to be a comic.)
After Applejack's death,Twilight Sparkles daughter Lunar Sparkle brings her back to life with an immortality spell. But is it really the best decision?
(This story also heavily involves Rarity,Rainbow Dash,Spike,Pinkie Pie,and Fluttershy. I just didn't get to choose them all because my choices were limited.)
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This looks interesting. Time to read!
Story moves a little fast, little too light on details. ...But I like the premise. :I Keep it up.
Truthfully, I would have expected Celestia to be a bit more patient.
Having a discussion with a mare that had lived for more than a thousand years can go on for hours.
Urg... plot was too... fast.
Well the problem you have with this story is the lack of context. You need to start describing the scenes a WHOLE lot more, start giving characters more dialogue actions and expressions. For example.
Y'know, it reminds me that AJ's the one pony from the main cast who's from G1. Maybe she's already immortal! A good start, though.. Could use a bit of editing, but I like the premise and I'm curious to see where you go with this. Cheers!