24th Feb 2013
24th Feb 2013
I wrote this story nearly six months ago. A friend of mine on dA pushed me into writing a shipping story, and so i started one. Half way through, i got some... pretty bad news about one of my friends, and it all went wrong. At that point, the whole story went to hell, and so i revised the beginning, and threw it online. A few people liked it, to my surprise, and so i'll put it here.
Again, bear in mind that this was written almost six months ago, and is awfully written, even compared to my works.(the more recent ones, at the least). However, even though I've already improved a bunch, i'd like to hear your opinion on both the story and the writing.
Oh, and i know, it's really short, that's how i used to work, and still do, to some extent. Also, don't comment on the contradiction to the title at the end, please. I've known of it all along, i was just too lazy to find another title.
Alright, so, i'm far from proud of this disgrace of a story, but i was half-blackmailed into it, so i had very little choice. The thing is, i'm not proud of most of my stories, so let me know what you think. I didn't deviate to much from the normal sadness, dark, drama sort of writing that i usually do, i just incorperated shipping elements into my regular routine. Again, comments welcome, especailly critiques. Oh, and there is absolutely no excuse for the ending. I don't know, i guess i'm used to writing chapter fics, so i kinda just left it there.
Drawing a blank, a story written to coincide with the events of the CreepyPasta game Story of the Blanks by Donitz. At first this story was only meant to go into the past of the town and such, but as it developed i found it easier to write my own story along side the Story of the Blanks plotline. This is the result of such.
This was not originally my idea, a friend of mine on dA told me he was looking for a Story of the Blanks fanfic, and I told him i'd try to write one.
Please leave HONEST constuctive feedback. Anything less is pointless and useless to me.
Sweets is being abused for her lesbian interests, and Scootaloo is the only one willing to stand by her in her plight. Sad and dramatic is how id describe it. I wrote this based on some experiences of my own(most of this is a true story) and titled it and adapted it to the song "Make it Stop (September's Children)" by Rise Against.
Tell me what you think.